THE CURSE
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Lucifer's Spell"The six book of the Novels of the Breedline
8 total reviews
Comment from cdefan
Another great chapter. I am never disappointed in this author's exciting stories. It is easy to fall into the breadline world and be captivated by all the excitement.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Another great chapter. I am never disappointed in this author's exciting stories. It is easy to fall into the breadline world and be captivated by all the excitement.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you, dear friend :)
I appreciate all your kind words and support! It makes a difference.
Hugs,
Shana :)
Comment from CEO2020
"You must save Arius... from Lucifer." He started to weep while struggling to keep his focus. "I love... you." Then, he closed his eyes and went limp, falling deeper into a state of unconsciousness. The fault of his son's destiny was his. To keep Arius from the hands of evil, Sebastian was willing to suffer a thousand-fold. Now his fate had come. The thing he had dreaded and feared long ago. His punishment was now a reality. Sebastian would be lost in the horrors of his childhood past, reliving each day he'd fought so hard to forget.
That's why I gave this piece six-stars.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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"You must save Arius... from Lucifer." He started to weep while struggling to keep his focus. "I love... you." Then, he closed his eyes and went limp, falling deeper into a state of unconsciousness. The fault of his son's destiny was his. To keep Arius from the hands of evil, Sebastian was willing to suffer a thousand-fold. Now his fate had come. The thing he had dreaded and feared long ago. His punishment was now a reality. Sebastian would be lost in the horrors of his childhood past, reliving each day he'd fought so hard to forget.
That's why I gave this piece six-stars.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Awww... thank you, Neal :)
This was a surprise to find this morning. You made my whole day! Friday is turning out to be good so far. Your encouraging words keep me motivated to believe in myself.
Thanks again!
Your fan,
Shana :)
Comment from royowen
You always manage to breathe a freshness into your stories that nobody else can. You've created a legion of fascinating characters, and then, in due time you have the ones that had slipped from God's hands into the depths of evil. Now you've brought that eternal knowledge out of Sebastian revealing God has not abandoned us, only devil has that distinction. Wonderfully written dear girl. I love the way you eternalise the love between a man and a woman. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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You always manage to breathe a freshness into your stories that nobody else can. You've created a legion of fascinating characters, and then, in due time you have the ones that had slipped from God's hands into the depths of evil. Now you've brought that eternal knowledge out of Sebastian revealing God has not abandoned us, only devil has that distinction. Wonderfully written dear girl. I love the way you eternalise the love between a man and a woman. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you, Roy :)
Wow... what a great review. Your words bring me to life with more motivation than ever! I am so lucky to have such a talented friend and supporter like you.
Thanks so much!
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Well done my friend
Comment from ngage
Great scene with Lucifer and Sebastian. You really made it believable and realistic with all the details and imaginative descriptions.
I could see this as it played out in clear detail. The part with Eve was touching. You made me want to go help her.
Another great chapter, Ms Shana.
Nate
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Great scene with Lucifer and Sebastian. You really made it believable and realistic with all the details and imaginative descriptions.
I could see this as it played out in clear detail. The part with Eve was touching. You made me want to go help her.
Another great chapter, Ms Shana.
Nate
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thanks so much, Nate :)
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. It is definitely hard to go back and redo it, but in the long run, it's worth it. You are so encouraging!
Hugs,
Shana :)
Comment from fm wright
To me, it read very smoothly. It conveyed emotions and actions very accurately. I couldn't find any errors in it. I did find it to be well written. You revealed enough to understand what was going on, and yet you also ended it with enough suspense to keep one wanting to read on.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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To me, it read very smoothly. It conveyed emotions and actions very accurately. I couldn't find any errors in it. I did find it to be well written. You revealed enough to understand what was going on, and yet you also ended it with enough suspense to keep one wanting to read on.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Faye :)
It has been so difficult and time consuming to go back and redo my previous books, but I know it will be worth it in the long run. Your feedback is so helpful and definitely encouraging. I sure appreciate your time and kind words.
Hugs,
Shana :)
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You are certainly welcome, Shana. I hope it was helpful.
Hugs,
Faye
Comment from Mistydawn
What an intense, gripping chapter. You had me on the edge of my seat start to finish. It was so well-written, worded had such wonderful description that I felt I was there watching it for myself. Your characters really came to life. I could feel Sabitians, pain, his torment, his hatred for satan, and the love for his son and wife. Satan's warning was spine-chilling. Very nicely done. It deserves a six but like most weeks I'm out.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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What an intense, gripping chapter. You had me on the edge of my seat start to finish. It was so well-written, worded had such wonderful description that I felt I was there watching it for myself. Your characters really came to life. I could feel Sabitians, pain, his torment, his hatred for satan, and the love for his son and wife. Satan's warning was spine-chilling. Very nicely done. It deserves a six but like most weeks I'm out.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, Mistydawn :)
Your feedback really eased my mind. I was worried about this chapter, feeling less confident. It's hard to go back and redo what has already been written. But, in the long run, it will be worth it to make the story better. You definitely made my day.
Thanks so much!
Hugs,
Shana :)
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
This is the first time I read a chapter of this fascinating book The Curse. I needed to read carefully the whole post script with the explanations and the role of characters. But I am glad I did.
A very well-written supernatural fiction, I will follow the next chapters.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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This is the first time I read a chapter of this fascinating book The Curse. I needed to read carefully the whole post script with the explanations and the role of characters. But I am glad I did.
A very well-written supernatural fiction, I will follow the next chapters.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, Marjon van Bruggen :)
So glad you enjoyed this chapter. I am putting the new book on hold to go back and redo my other four books since they need it. Hearing your encouraging words gives me the reason to keep going. I believe a story can always be better.
Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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Welcome!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, this is a harsh punishment - Lucifer curled back his upper lip. "You will suffer my wrath with eternal sleep, reliving the horrors of your childhood past.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Wow, this is a harsh punishment - Lucifer curled back his upper lip. "You will suffer my wrath with eternal sleep, reliving the horrors of your childhood past.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, Iza :)
Sebastian has been through a lot with Lucifer taunting him for so long. I was hoping this chapter would be worth the read and now that I hear your feedback, I'm glad I posted it. Thanks for taking the time to read my chapter. I appreciate you!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
