Group: After the Break
a one scene script18 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles I found your a one scene script
'Group: After the Break' very entertaining,
with the humorous way you had your chacters
seem like ordinary folks. I must say you have each of your chacters making a comical way of making fun of each other.
Gert
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Smiles I found your a one scene script
'Group: After the Break' very entertaining,
with the humorous way you had your chacters
seem like ordinary folks. I must say you have each of your chacters making a comical way of making fun of each other.
Gert
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thanks, Gert
Comment from Spitfire
Guess yer five minute break got broke.--good one!
More mixed up words--she's transmissionin'; Wonner if we's relativilated, and cockk-eyed referenes: Ned's shark-that-got-away might have JAWSed her.
I want to play the part of the unnamed character. :-)
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Guess yer five minute break got broke.--good one!
More mixed up words--she's transmissionin'; Wonner if we's relativilated, and cockk-eyed referenes: Ned's shark-that-got-away might have JAWSed her.
I want to play the part of the unnamed character. :-)
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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You?re in!
Comment from Alaskastory
"Group: After the Break" at my first read left me with a lot of questions. My wonder was what the story was about, so I reread it. Then it was more amusing, some characters came through. It left me unsure of the purpose of this story. Maybe just a laugh?
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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"Group: After the Break" at my first read left me with a lot of questions. My wonder was what the story was about, so I reread it. Then it was more amusing, some characters came through. It left me unsure of the purpose of this story. Maybe just a laugh?
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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I really should connect my scenes. Group:After the Break is a second scene after Group.
Comment from judiverse
I'm surprised that Ned and Jiffy start wrestling. The Unnamed character is a strange one. No speech, and now she's a female. Seeing the worm might be interesting. Those are fun questions the boys answer. Pallas says he and Pez will be trying to solve the case of the missing diver. It's only fitting the there are claims of a shark sighting. That fits in with the characters. I'm not sure what this is all about, but maybe I'm not supposed to be. That's theatre of the absurd. judi
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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I'm surprised that Ned and Jiffy start wrestling. The Unnamed character is a strange one. No speech, and now she's a female. Seeing the worm might be interesting. Those are fun questions the boys answer. Pallas says he and Pez will be trying to solve the case of the missing diver. It's only fitting the there are claims of a shark sighting. That fits in with the characters. I'm not sure what this is all about, but maybe I'm not supposed to be. That's theatre of the absurd. judi
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thanks, Judi, for giving this a look.
Comment from Ulla
Oh Bill, this is crazy humour at its best. You had me laughing out loud several times. It's just too funny and you still manage to keep it all together. I took a special note to 'relativilated'. Wonderful. No six left I'm sorry to say. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Oh Bill, this is crazy humour at its best. You had me laughing out loud several times. It's just too funny and you still manage to keep it all together. I took a special note to 'relativilated'. Wonderful. No six left I'm sorry to say. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you, Ulla. I think maybe one more then I'll send the duos out on their own adventures.
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Oh no, does that mean we won't hear from them again? No no, no, you can't do that!!!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! A great offering, Bill -- so all over the place, I don't know what to focus on! ;) Sooo... Ned's REEEL GOOD at his job (maybe not really like that 'for real'), the unnamed is a fluid-gender mute in charge of bookkeeping/organization, Jiffy luvs to pick on someone finally 'dumber' than him, you got complaints from people that have a 'hollywood view' of basic training, and we have to wait til next time to see who kicks who's butt (my money's on Ned)... and I'll leave it there - LOL! ;) A great stage setter for so much to come, Bill - loved it! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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LOL! A great offering, Bill -- so all over the place, I don't know what to focus on! ;) Sooo... Ned's REEEL GOOD at his job (maybe not really like that 'for real'), the unnamed is a fluid-gender mute in charge of bookkeeping/organization, Jiffy luvs to pick on someone finally 'dumber' than him, you got complaints from people that have a 'hollywood view' of basic training, and we have to wait til next time to see who kicks who's butt (my money's on Ned)... and I'll leave it there - LOL! ;) A great stage setter for so much to come, Bill - loved it! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you, Yvette. I?m getting a ?No Time For Sergeants? vibe coming on.
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very cute script you have penned. Those characters always crack me up. They language sounds like they would sound in person if they were real. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Bill, This is a very cute script you have penned. Those characters always crack me up. They language sounds like they would sound in person if they were real. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you, Teri
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Another great script again.
Noticed what I think might be a typo:
"Matt: Drill Sergeant Mother Scratcher wants to know if Jiffy and I are done with the Army or are we going to see it throught?" (through)
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Another great script again.
Noticed what I think might be a typo:
"Matt: Drill Sergeant Mother Scratcher wants to know if Jiffy and I are done with the Army or are we going to see it throught?" (through)
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you, TT. You are right of course.
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It was just an overlooked typo. No biggie.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a group of misfits. You have characterized them perfectly. I enjoyed reading this. It gets funnier and funnier. I could picture all of it due to your great descriptive words/dialogue. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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What a group of misfits. You have characterized them perfectly. I enjoyed reading this. It gets funnier and funnier. I could picture all of it due to your great descriptive words/dialogue. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you, Jan, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, I am going to have to keep reading these posts, until I can figure out what the heck is going on.
In the meantime your writing remains excellent as always.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Dear Bill, I am going to have to keep reading these posts, until I can figure out what the heck is going on.
In the meantime your writing remains excellent as always.
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you, Suzanna. Sorry if they are not clear.
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I think it is my limited intellect at fault.
