The Longing
It begs to question.71 total reviews
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
Well done my friend, so few words that explain so much, the art work is beautifully done. I hope you do well in the contest
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Well done my friend, so few words that explain so much, the art work is beautifully done. I hope you do well in the contest
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a really good start to your sojourn here at FanStory. Using the 5-7-5 format you ingeniously found a way of inserting a cross rhyme, yearning/returning into this. I imagine it was this little poetic twist that swung it for you with the judges. I hope you go on to other successes in contests here.
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This is a really good start to your sojourn here at FanStory. Using the 5-7-5 format you ingeniously found a way of inserting a cross rhyme, yearning/returning into this. I imagine it was this little poetic twist that swung it for you with the judges. I hope you go on to other successes in contests here.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
A few words put together speak a lot.....Thanks for sharing! your words are wisely chosen and I love how it ends with a question....The poem also flows very smoothly...Congrats on your win :)
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A few words put together speak a lot.....Thanks for sharing! your words are wisely chosen and I love how it ends with a question....The poem also flows very smoothly...Congrats on your win :)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from JLR
Welcome to FS and your entry reflects that this is the place that you will find engaging opportunities to create, share and discover. What more could be more perfect. good success!
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Welcome to FS and your entry reflects that this is the place that you will find engaging opportunities to create, share and discover. What more could be more perfect. good success!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Possummagic
This is certainly amazing imagery used here. In addition, it never ceases to amaze me that so few words can convey so much. I loved reading it, thank you for sharing. PM
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This is certainly amazing imagery used here. In addition, it never ceases to amaze me that so few words can convey so much. I loved reading it, thank you for sharing. PM
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Tate A. Davis
A timeless sentiment that spans across so many classic novels, stories, and poems of painful longing or frustrated yearning. I loved the way this was put together and it matched the art nicely. I enjoyed it very much.
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A timeless sentiment that spans across so many classic novels, stories, and poems of painful longing or frustrated yearning. I loved the way this was put together and it matched the art nicely. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Ignatius Albright
This is a wonderful 3 line poem. you have said so much with so few words, well done and congrats on winning the contest! keep writing nd keep safe! Ignatius A
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This is a wonderful 3 line poem. you have said so much with so few words, well done and congrats on winning the contest! keep writing nd keep safe! Ignatius A
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Well chosen words to express a philosophical question in these short lines. What does make certain minds click and yearn in specific ways? Congratulations on the win!!
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Well chosen words to express a philosophical question in these short lines. What does make certain minds click and yearn in specific ways? Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Opal Rose
It begs to question. why the longing gives one a ravenous yearning and seizing your thought, why does it seem evermore and eternity is great rhetorical question.
Welcome to Fanstory
Gert
forevermore; why
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Hello Opal Rose
It begs to question. why the longing gives one a ravenous yearning and seizing your thought, why does it seem evermore and eternity is great rhetorical question.
Welcome to Fanstory
Gert
forevermore; why
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
Comment from sammielwf
Opal,
Ravenous thoughts or desires of the heart are never sated. They may sink below the waves of conscious thought for awhile- but reappear with a gentle ferocity that takes ones breath away.
I was really taken with your piece.
Well done.
And this poet. Yearns for more.
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Opal,
Ravenous thoughts or desires of the heart are never sated. They may sink below the waves of conscious thought for awhile- but reappear with a gentle ferocity that takes ones breath away.
I was really taken with your piece.
Well done.
And this poet. Yearns for more.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
