Man in the Mirror
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about looking in he mirror and find the real us in the mirror and see deeper than what the normal eye can see is not always very easy and can reveal very deep emotions we would not like to see.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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A very well-written poem about looking in he mirror and find the real us in the mirror and see deeper than what the normal eye can see is not always very easy and can reveal very deep emotions we would not like to see.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for your review...John
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Major update, if you're interested..
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, this poem sounds like a rap beat, and I like it:) it conveys a very strong message that we can't control anything not even our own images in a deformed mirror :"
We use templates like a mirror
Each time we look, we find error
Our ignorance creates terror
We seek to find a truth-bearer"
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Wow, this poem sounds like a rap beat, and I like it:) it conveys a very strong message that we can't control anything not even our own images in a deformed mirror :"
We use templates like a mirror
Each time we look, we find error
Our ignorance creates terror
We seek to find a truth-bearer"
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for your review...John
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Major update, if you're interested..
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Whew. There is a lot packed in there! It keeps an interesting beat and finding the perfect rhyme throughout must have been a bit of work - I'd love to hear this read out loud as I think it would gain something from hearing it in the author's voice. (actually all poetry should be read out loud. I find when I'm here on FanStory I will read poetry twice - and it really does sound differently!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Whew. There is a lot packed in there! It keeps an interesting beat and finding the perfect rhyme throughout must have been a bit of work - I'd love to hear this read out loud as I think it would gain something from hearing it in the author's voice. (actually all poetry should be read out loud. I find when I'm here on FanStory I will read poetry twice - and it really does sound differently!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for your review...John
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Major update, if you're interested..
Comment from karenina
I'm quite sure there is nothing at all wrong with your poetry. There are just some readers and poets that don't seem to connect--and we are two of those. I see no obvious errors--I simply find your themes to be a bit grandiose. I will review this one and then leave your work to those who find you fascinating.--Karenina
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reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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I'm quite sure there is nothing at all wrong with your poetry. There are just some readers and poets that don't seem to connect--and we are two of those. I see no obvious errors--I simply find your themes to be a bit grandiose. I will review this one and then leave your work to those who find you fascinating.--Karenina
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Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thanks.
Comment from SS. Anjum
Delightful......im impressed by the depthful thoughts you have given in this poem........truly this is how we glance in the mirror and thata how we presume ourselves to be! Thanks for this wondrous piece! Good day
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reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Delightful......im impressed by the depthful thoughts you have given in this poem........truly this is how we glance in the mirror and thata how we presume ourselves to be! Thanks for this wondrous piece! Good day
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Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you much...John
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Major update, if you're interested..
