Man in the Mirror
Self-Analysis45 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Wise words to live by. Anyone who has reached a state nearing maturity has surely learned by now. If you did not create yourself, you are no better than the next man who is just as mortal as yourself. If you cannot control the rate at which you age, get sick, get well, live or die. You are just as mortal as the next fool who thinks more of himself than he should. Are you listening sir? You know who you are. This is a very wise and wonderful write.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Wise words to live by. Anyone who has reached a state nearing maturity has surely learned by now. If you did not create yourself, you are no better than the next man who is just as mortal as yourself. If you cannot control the rate at which you age, get sick, get well, live or die. You are just as mortal as the next fool who thinks more of himself than he should. Are you listening sir? You know who you are. This is a very wise and wonderful write.
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you .... John
Comment from Sophie Clarke
I really enjoyed the final stanza to this poem; it really captures the whole point of self-reflection and the riddle of life. I do feel like some of the rhymes are forced on occasion; however I do love your rhyme scheme and wish it were concrete throughout (although you could very well argue that this is poetry and nothing has rules and concrete is pointless! If you make that argument, I will happily accept it!). Thanks for the poem!
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I really enjoyed the final stanza to this poem; it really captures the whole point of self-reflection and the riddle of life. I do feel like some of the rhymes are forced on occasion; however I do love your rhyme scheme and wish it were concrete throughout (although you could very well argue that this is poetry and nothing has rules and concrete is pointless! If you make that argument, I will happily accept it!). Thanks for the poem!
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you much...John
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Isn't that a woman in the artwork? Just saying. This is an. impressive work of poetry. If I write 16 lines I'm usually spent. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Isn't that a woman in the artwork? Just saying. This is an. impressive work of poetry. If I write 16 lines I'm usually spent. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review...John
Comment from smileycloud
very nice 8 meter and rhyme for a poem style prose story and it is a very enlightening and thought provoking story
the stages are well set out and the paragraphs do give the best answer available for each problem presented
it does give "the problem" " the deeper aim" "the intended course of action" and finally "the resulting outcomes for the betterment of our own inner image" and this keeps the theme of a road to recovery and well being alive throughout the entire presentation
the templates created by others can certainly be a fearful manner to adopt for ones own life and substance
you are so right Jesus' ministry was certainly pure but skewed by pharisees and sadducees while on earth and still now by false teachings and the ego of man seeking recognition and even perhaps in some circumstances greed for cash but mainly to control and manipulate the very kind of victims which your portrayed "mirror" is bringing into the light to encourage the seeking of truth/reality/blessings and a safe soul
it is a sadness and desperate shame that humanity believes that they can "evolve" themselves
as much well being and peace of mind and self acceptance can come from allowing the Spirit to work in us and yes, not to use mirrors to "get" what we think we want and be who we desire to be , but to self assessment according to ones own growth and value to fellowman in service and loving kindness
I found myself thinking deeply about your "third level" and wondering is perhaps the animal kingdom with their amazing sense of family worth and protection of their own young and close community and to only take from the earth what is required for sufficient food and shelter "perhaps" man has degenerated to a level far below that, if they block the way for the Spirit to enter and guide
very good work and if you were used to public speaking this is a fine start which could be expanded upon to use as a seminar in clinics and schools Pro Bono for the young to have the means to self assess less critically but more lovingly toward themselves and for those who suffer low self esteem by looking in "that" mirror
thank you for writing
have a smiley day
blessings
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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very nice 8 meter and rhyme for a poem style prose story and it is a very enlightening and thought provoking story
the stages are well set out and the paragraphs do give the best answer available for each problem presented
it does give "the problem" " the deeper aim" "the intended course of action" and finally "the resulting outcomes for the betterment of our own inner image" and this keeps the theme of a road to recovery and well being alive throughout the entire presentation
the templates created by others can certainly be a fearful manner to adopt for ones own life and substance
you are so right Jesus' ministry was certainly pure but skewed by pharisees and sadducees while on earth and still now by false teachings and the ego of man seeking recognition and even perhaps in some circumstances greed for cash but mainly to control and manipulate the very kind of victims which your portrayed "mirror" is bringing into the light to encourage the seeking of truth/reality/blessings and a safe soul
it is a sadness and desperate shame that humanity believes that they can "evolve" themselves
as much well being and peace of mind and self acceptance can come from allowing the Spirit to work in us and yes, not to use mirrors to "get" what we think we want and be who we desire to be , but to self assessment according to ones own growth and value to fellowman in service and loving kindness
I found myself thinking deeply about your "third level" and wondering is perhaps the animal kingdom with their amazing sense of family worth and protection of their own young and close community and to only take from the earth what is required for sufficient food and shelter "perhaps" man has degenerated to a level far below that, if they block the way for the Spirit to enter and guide
very good work and if you were used to public speaking this is a fine start which could be expanded upon to use as a seminar in clinics and schools Pro Bono for the young to have the means to self assess less critically but more lovingly toward themselves and for those who suffer low self esteem by looking in "that" mirror
thank you for writing
have a smiley day
blessings
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review...John
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever and apt title. This verse is jam-packed with powerful insights--self-reflection indeed. My favorite line: His truth was skewed by sophistry. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Clever and apt title. This verse is jam-packed with powerful insights--self-reflection indeed. My favorite line: His truth was skewed by sophistry. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review...John
Comment from Ignatius Albright
A very nice piece of poetry. You've included skillful and effective use of rhyme and I'm especially fond of your use of monorhyme throughout the piece. Your message is powerful, well done.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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A very nice piece of poetry. You've included skillful and effective use of rhyme and I'm especially fond of your use of monorhyme throughout the piece. Your message is powerful, well done.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review...John
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I think this is one of your poems I've ever read. It is as thought provoking as your essays are. Well, it made me think and it's well written. Well done trying your hand on poems. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Hi there, I think this is one of your poems I've ever read. It is as thought provoking as your essays are. Well, it made me think and it's well written. Well done trying your hand on poems. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you...
Comment from Louise Michelle
I love the line: start putting lies through a screening. Well, this certainly is quite an interesting and deeply thought out poem. We all have to have egos because it's helpful in self-esteem and in achievements. However, it certainly can get out of whack. Balancing the spiritual with the intellectual is key. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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I love the line: start putting lies through a screening. Well, this certainly is quite an interesting and deeply thought out poem. We all have to have egos because it's helpful in self-esteem and in achievements. However, it certainly can get out of whack. Balancing the spiritual with the intellectual is key. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you for your review.....John
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I think it's a shame that people are obsessed with the way they look, and there are those that try to copy other people. It's a mad world when celebrities are actively encourage people to do this. I thought this was an enlightening poem about the human nature and how it has evolved over time. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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I think it's a shame that people are obsessed with the way they look, and there are those that try to copy other people. It's a mad world when celebrities are actively encourage people to do this. I thought this was an enlightening poem about the human nature and how it has evolved over time. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
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Many Thanks...John
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good mixture of mono-rhyme and abcb quatrains which tell of the fight between living a good life and letter your ego get away with things that aren't so good. It tells of the look for wisdom throughout your life span and what finding that wisdom can lead to. Eternal life.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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This is a good mixture of mono-rhyme and abcb quatrains which tell of the fight between living a good life and letter your ego get away with things that aren't so good. It tells of the look for wisdom throughout your life span and what finding that wisdom can lead to. Eternal life.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dp
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thanks much.....John
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Don't mention it, John
Joan
