Comment from DragonSkulls

Exceptional

Best one of the bunch. I had a feeling this was who I thought it was. I was right. Lol. Fantastic job of tackling this challenge, author. You got my vote. Hopefully the tables will turn and end up victorious. (For the whole whopping 12 bucks.) Funny piece. Best of luck.

=]

Ron

 Comment Written 16-May-2020

---

reply by the author on 16-May-2020

Thanks for the boost of a 6 rating. I'm perplexed with the voting - as the challenge was to employ phonemes in a story and mine is stuffed full of them. It also perplexes me in contests why some voting lasts for days (as in this case yet there are only 3 entries to read), while others with multiple entries only have a day to vote.

reply by DragonSkulls on 16-May-2020

It's just the way the person created the contest. You can make it for one or three days.

reply by the author on 16-May-2020

Thanks for explaining.

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

This is a cute poem using many animals. Their conversations sound real and believable, and the monkey ended the phonemes perfectly! Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-May-2020

---

reply by the author on 15-May-2020

Thanks for your review. Animals are fun to write about as characters.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Beautiful and inspiring story, and you made good use of the phoneme. for certainly I admire your ingenuity. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest. You got my vote:)

 Comment Written 15-May-2020

---

reply by the author on 15-May-2020

Thanks for your review. Animals are fun to write about as characters.

Comment from AJ McCall

Excellent

This is hilarious! I never knew animals got bored at the Zoo. There are obvious hints to each animal's features or characteristics as the poem ends. The giraffe is my favorite.

 Comment Written 15-May-2020

---

reply by the author on 15-May-2020

Thanks for your review. Animals are fun to write about as characters.

reply by AJ McCall on 15-May-2020

Anytime!

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

A great entry for the A Phoneme Challenge contest. Nice presentation. The topic is interesting and something we all can relate to, well done.

 Comment Written 15-May-2020

---

reply by the author on 15-May-2020

Thanks for your review. Animals are fun to write about as characters.

Comment from Diana Kane

Exceptional

Oh I absolutely loved this. So fun. So imaginative. Great wording. Hell! You could elongate this just a tiny bit and make it a short book for children. Fantastic job!

 Comment Written 14-May-2020

---

reply by the author on 16-May-2020

Thanks for your terrific review! I have written an extended version of this story but edited a lot out to fit the 130 max word count for the contest.

Comment from January L'Angelle

Excellent

This is a very cute story and I enjoyed you play on words. The animal characters were funny and clever. I like how they each had their own voice. Well penned work. -January L.

 Comment Written 14-May-2020

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Nice observation, maybe true, apparently it seems animals of today are revolting; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 14-May-2020

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

What fun these phenomenal phonemes are. A rare zoological delight. Doctor Doolittle would be in his element in a place like this, but I pity the poor zookeeper. I hope he hasn't caught the Coronavirus.

 Comment Written 14-May-2020