Colorful Covenant
From Noah's time 'til today...13 total reviews
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A beautiful rainbow photo sets the stage. I thought the first line was very good. At first read I missed the Gay Pride and pot of gold luck references. The second line clearly conveys the Genesis story. However the third line brings down the entire work. As written it seems to be an affirmation of God's word. An exclamation would be more meaningful such as "Promise eternal!" Share the excitement of God's love. A great start but need to adjust the third line.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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A beautiful rainbow photo sets the stage. I thought the first line was very good. At first read I missed the Gay Pride and pot of gold luck references. The second line clearly conveys the Genesis story. However the third line brings down the entire work. As written it seems to be an affirmation of God's word. An exclamation would be more meaningful such as "Promise eternal!" Share the excitement of God's love. A great start but need to adjust the third line.
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Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Comment from Lucy de Welles
There are several ways to look at this message. One could visualize a rainbow standing in front of pride and luck, like attorney, to argue in favor of clemency. Or, maybe the rainbow in the context of it's crowning glory over the Earth after the flood where the proud people drowned and Noah's family were lucky. But Noah had great faith...Also, Jesus went down into Sheol to preach to the people who had died in the flood so that was lucky. The rainbow could have contained a promise in reference to that.
Nice to have new food for thought. Photo is gorgeous! Nothing to improve.
Well done!
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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There are several ways to look at this message. One could visualize a rainbow standing in front of pride and luck, like attorney, to argue in favor of clemency. Or, maybe the rainbow in the context of it's crowning glory over the Earth after the flood where the proud people drowned and Noah's family were lucky. But Noah had great faith...Also, Jesus went down into Sheol to preach to the people who had died in the flood so that was lucky. The rainbow could have contained a promise in reference to that.
Nice to have new food for thought. Photo is gorgeous! Nothing to improve.
Well done!
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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The rainbow was certainly one of God's promises to Noah and to mankind. Thank you for your review. 8-)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Faith stands way ahead of Pride and Luck. It is often likened rather to Hope and Love, which have much more power and thus can match up to Faith more closely. Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Faith stands way ahead of Pride and Luck. It is often likened rather to Hope and Love, which have much more power and thus can match up to Faith more closely. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Those references were to the 'pride' parades that use the rainbow for their symbol as well as the leprechauns for their 'lucky' gold... Thank you so much for your review! 8-)
Comment from smileycloud
you are not wrong there
He promises...He delivers
it is only the interpretations of His true and perfect promises which get all screwed up
your poem has a good powerful punch in few words
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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you are not wrong there
He promises...He delivers
it is only the interpretations of His true and perfect promises which get all screwed up
your poem has a good powerful punch in few words
have a smiley day
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks for the review today!!
Comment from Rmocruz
You have well penned an appropriate ode to a promising rainbow.
The colorful rainbow well compliments your written word.
Best wishes with this worthy contest entry.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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You have well penned an appropriate ode to a promising rainbow.
The colorful rainbow well compliments your written word.
Best wishes with this worthy contest entry.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks - enjoy the evening!!
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You're welcome, best wishes!
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like this poem of faith that focuses on the fact that God still gives us rainbows as a promise that he will never again destroy the earth with water. However, he also promises that it will be destroyed by fire at some point. However, through faith in Christ we don't have to worry about that either. Bill
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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I like this poem of faith that focuses on the fact that God still gives us rainbows as a promise that he will never again destroy the earth with water. However, he also promises that it will be destroyed by fire at some point. However, through faith in Christ we don't have to worry about that either. Bill
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks, Bill!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Colorful Covenant, has the right set up and reminds all who can see it and know why it's there that all that's connected to it is still in play.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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This 5-7-5, Colorful Covenant, has the right set up and reminds all who can see it and know why it's there that all that's connected to it is still in play.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks, Bill!
Comment from Ben Colder
Yes it does now and for always. We sometimes forget the book is filled with promises. This is a very nice entry and see nothing wrong . My blessings to the poet. Hope you win.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Yes it does now and for always. We sometimes forget the book is filled with promises. This is a very nice entry and see nothing wrong . My blessings to the poet. Hope you win.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks, Ben, and blessings back atcha!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup before the rainbow belonged to Him, now we took over that heavenly symbol too. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Yup before the rainbow belonged to Him, now we took over that heavenly symbol too. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks, Iza!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine faith write here as the rainbow gives us hope and promise that all is well and pride and luck take second place to our beliefs, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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A fine faith write here as the rainbow gives us hope and promise that all is well and pride and luck take second place to our beliefs, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thanks much, Dolly!
