Relationships
An Acrostic- Loop Poem23 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Hello,
I have given you five stars as you have given us something quite delightful: An interesting treatise on love, using strong words, in an acrostic form that is well-illustrated.
However, you should know that this is not a loop poem. To classify for that award, as well as the identical words repeat scheme you need an abcb rhyme scheme. I made the same mistake last month in a contest entry, but Jannypan pointed it out to me and I managed to fix it in time. I just checked with her that this rhyme is strictly required in a loop poem and that it wasn't just some quirk of that contest, but no: The rhyme scheme is an integral part of the loop poem.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Hello,
I have given you five stars as you have given us something quite delightful: An interesting treatise on love, using strong words, in an acrostic form that is well-illustrated.
However, you should know that this is not a loop poem. To classify for that award, as well as the identical words repeat scheme you need an abcb rhyme scheme. I made the same mistake last month in a contest entry, but Jannypan pointed it out to me and I managed to fix it in time. I just checked with her that this rhyme is strictly required in a loop poem and that it wasn't just some quirk of that contest, but no: The rhyme scheme is an integral part of the loop poem.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you for your comments, please note this poem is not in any contest, this could be called a combination poem, I understand that most Acrostic and Loop poems require rhyme when they stand alone, I write this form as a challenge, if there are rules for combining forms I am not aware of them, many thanks****kahpot
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I did say what you wrote was delightful, and I did realise it was for pleasure not contest. Thus, you can break any rules you want. I just wondered if you knew a loop poem for contest has to have the rhyme (wanted to protect you from the trap I fell into)
Comment from sunnilicious
I liked your poem. Excellent work.
I wish growing love relationships were simpler. I liked this man so much, but he never noticed me. Idk how one day we just talked. We clicked so weirdly together, I was too honest at the start. Boom, bad move. I still like him. Five or six years later, I did something dumb again, told him happy birthday and wrote him a note to call me, because that crush returned. You know what kapot, I'm stupid because he ignored me again. So I started fake crushing on Hunter Biden. How to get a life... Blah.
Have a great week :)
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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I liked your poem. Excellent work.
I wish growing love relationships were simpler. I liked this man so much, but he never noticed me. Idk how one day we just talked. We clicked so weirdly together, I was too honest at the start. Boom, bad move. I still like him. Five or six years later, I did something dumb again, told him happy birthday and wrote him a note to call me, because that crush returned. You know what kapot, I'm stupid because he ignored me again. So I started fake crushing on Hunter Biden. How to get a life... Blah.
Have a great week :)
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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You know what sunnilicious, I don't read anything in your comments that makes you "stupid" a crush (love) is not stupid it is us- the way others treat that is either to their benefit or detriment, I am as you my feelings are no good to me alone, they do no good if we do not share, this is a wonderful review, many thanks, sorry for the late replies, I am playing catch up****kahpot
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Not an easy task to pull of this form of poetry, but you have accomplished
it very well. It is clearly understandable. I have never tried to write this type of poetry. Maybe I should give it a go. Don't have any more sixes.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Not an easy task to pull of this form of poetry, but you have accomplished
it very well. It is clearly understandable. I have never tried to write this type of poetry. Maybe I should give it a go. Don't have any more sixes.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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I can understand that you may not have anymore sixes but why did you rate this poor with only one star?
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are clear, kind, interesting and creative. I found
the words of this poem conveying a truly health relationship. I found
the word, honor, to be a word that is hardly used - thank you. I think it is important to honor each in a relationship. The artwork is perfect
and compliments this poem. Hope you had a great day!
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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The author's words are clear, kind, interesting and creative. I found
the words of this poem conveying a truly health relationship. I found
the word, honor, to be a word that is hardly used - thank you. I think it is important to honor each in a relationship. The artwork is perfect
and compliments this poem. Hope you had a great day!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for your great comments and review, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, kahpot.
-This is a very well written
poem and complex in
managing to write an
acrostic/loop poem, and
then end with the same
word that you began with.
-You give very good examples
of what makes a good relationship, too.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation, kahpot.
-This is a very well written
poem and complex in
managing to write an
acrostic/loop poem, and
then end with the same
word that you began with.
-You give very good examples
of what makes a good relationship, too.
-Well done!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow!! Look at you with the acrostical loop... or the looping acrostic - either way, so very well done, kahpot!! Please take this virtual sixer for such an awesome poem, sir, as it certainly deserves one!! :) ;) You should have put this in the contest that comes up in a day or so -- would have done great! ;) Thanx so much for that wonderful message wrapped in such an impressive penning! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Wow!! Look at you with the acrostical loop... or the looping acrostic - either way, so very well done, kahpot!! Please take this virtual sixer for such an awesome poem, sir, as it certainly deserves one!! :) ;) You should have put this in the contest that comes up in a day or so -- would have done great! ;) Thanx so much for that wonderful message wrapped in such an impressive penning! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you Yvette, I do like this challenge for myself, as for the contests they seem to require a rhyme scheme-acrostic and loop, thank you for your wonderful comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Decker
Kahpot, you've written a really nice acrostic money poem. I love how you characterize love as being forever ; to me it means people I've loved in life who are gone are vetted to me, or I am to them, and I will see them again. Love and a promise of the afterlife is what sustains people trying to recover a loved ones debt. I don't want to detract from your
Poem..It's excellent. Best luck and blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Kahpot, you've written a really nice acrostic money poem. I love how you characterize love as being forever ; to me it means people I've loved in life who are gone are vetted to me, or I am to them, and I will see them again. Love and a promise of the afterlife is what sustains people trying to recover a loved ones debt. I don't want to detract from your
Poem..It's excellent. Best luck and blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you Cindy, for your wonderful review and comments, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Teri7
This is a very neat acrostic and loop poem. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is a very neat acrostic and loop poem. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for your great review, always appreciated****kahpot
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you are so welcome!
Comment from June Sargent
A delightful way to capture the positive aspects of a never ending relationship. Support, strength and security are key components that create a bond that will endure. We enjoyed the loop format.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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A delightful way to capture the positive aspects of a never ending relationship. Support, strength and security are key components that create a bond that will endure. We enjoyed the loop format.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for these wonderful comments, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Kahpot. This is a very creative piece of writing a poem by combining a loop and an acrostic. You managed to incorporate two styles and meet both standards. Well Done!!
Robert
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Hello Kahpot. This is a very creative piece of writing a poem by combining a loop and an acrostic. You managed to incorporate two styles and meet both standards. Well Done!!
Robert
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for your very encouraging comments, much appreciated****kahpot
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You're welcome
