Somebody
This is a heart's longing17 total reviews
Comment from January L'Angelle
I like the plea that you are making in this poem. It seems heartfelt and real. The poem is well written and flows very nicely as a free verse should. I enjoyed reading your poem. -January L.
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I like the plea that you are making in this poem. It seems heartfelt and real. The poem is well written and flows very nicely as a free verse should. I enjoyed reading your poem. -January L.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
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Thank You! It is real. Lol
Comment from Sally Law
I'm glad you put your ad out there, dear Brenda. This is sweet and filled with longing. We have many single men here on FanStory, so I'm sure someone will take you up. I can't think of a woman I know that doesn't want these things.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
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I'm glad you put your ad out there, dear Brenda. This is sweet and filled with longing. We have many single men here on FanStory, so I'm sure someone will take you up. I can't think of a woman I know that doesn't want these things.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 11-May-2020
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Thank You Sally!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You desire and wish there would always be somebody to love you and you could love him or her; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this free verse; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
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You desire and wish there would always be somebody to love you and you could love him or her; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this free verse; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
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Thank You!
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This doesn't read like a poem. It reads like just a list of wants. I think of the lines ere shorter, it would read more like a poem. I think those are good things to want in a man, though.
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This doesn't read like a poem. It reads like just a list of wants. I think of the lines ere shorter, it would read more like a poem. I think those are good things to want in a man, though.
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Comment Written 11-May-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Diana Kane
I think you tap into what so many are looking for... That special somebody. Great job! My only suggestion is that maybe incorporate what you said in the note. Maybe the last line or two would be something like what are you gonna do to find that somebody?
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I think you tap into what so many are looking for... That special somebody. Great job! My only suggestion is that maybe incorporate what you said in the note. Maybe the last line or two would be something like what are you gonna do to find that somebody?
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Thank You!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Brenda, Thank you for describing so well, that ideal person we all wish for.
But it is in your author's notes that the real message is delivered. "What, if anything, are you going to do about it?"
I do hope these 20 and 30 year old FanStorians are in the habit of reading every thing in a post.
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Dear Brenda, Thank you for describing so well, that ideal person we all wish for.
But it is in your author's notes that the real message is delivered. "What, if anything, are you going to do about it?"
I do hope these 20 and 30 year old FanStorians are in the habit of reading every thing in a post.
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Thank You!
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed reading this poem. It flows well and has a nice feel to it. I think we can all relate to it as well which is what makes it Such a lovely poem. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
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I enjoyed reading this poem. It flows well and has a nice feel to it. I think we can all relate to it as well which is what makes it Such a lovely poem. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
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Comment Written 11-May-2020
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Thank You!
