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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Red Rose"A book consisting of seventy-eight flower poems
8 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nice poem, Alicia. The rose is quite inviting. These are my favorite lines:
"Let the reality of the rose be romance.
Let the reality of the red rose be love.
May the scent of the rose be soft and sweet;
Soft and sweet as sharp thorns go unnoticed
Because beauty sits on the horizon."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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This is a very nice poem, Alicia. The rose is quite inviting. These are my favorite lines:
"Let the reality of the rose be romance.
Let the reality of the red rose be love.
May the scent of the rose be soft and sweet;
Soft and sweet as sharp thorns go unnoticed
Because beauty sits on the horizon."
Marilyn
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Hi Marilyn! You're nice. Thank you. Hearts & hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the red rose that stands for love and romance no matter how old you are, I am over sixty and I still like to receive red roses once in a while.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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A very well-written poem about the red rose that stands for love and romance no matter how old you are, I am over sixty and I still like to receive red roses once in a while.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi! Romance never ends for you. I'm still wondering how to get it started. Lolz. Thank you :)
Comment from lyenochka
I like the way the poem sounds - you used repetition nicely. I get this feeling of roses just multiplying and blooming everywhere! And I don't think it sounds "old" - but youthful. Besides, you'll always be 25 in my mind - just like your photo.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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I like the way the poem sounds - you used repetition nicely. I get this feeling of roses just multiplying and blooming everywhere! And I don't think it sounds "old" - but youthful. Besides, you'll always be 25 in my mind - just like your photo.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi Helen! I was like 44 in that photo. Do we know each other, like have we met? Thank you :)
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We never met in person but I feel like I know you. I guessed 25 from your picture. You look young!!
Comment from Joan E.
What a spectacular, velvety rose and so appropriate for Mother's Day! You certainly captured the beauty of the classic, red rose with your words, either singly or in groups. Enjoy the bloom's scent and symbol of love on this special day- Joan
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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What a spectacular, velvety rose and so appropriate for Mother's Day! You certainly captured the beauty of the classic, red rose with your words, either singly or in groups. Enjoy the bloom's scent and symbol of love on this special day- Joan
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi Joan! You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from Enzo Lance
You play the repetition very well. It's like I'm handling the rose myself while singing my favorite poems. I tried to count syllable counts per line, and i observed that meter is there in 10 counts of most lines. "Soft and sweet as sharp thorns go unnoticed is my favorite line of the poem. A s a reader, I go to that central idea of the rose. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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You play the repetition very well. It's like I'm handling the rose myself while singing my favorite poems. I tried to count syllable counts per line, and i observed that meter is there in 10 counts of most lines. "Soft and sweet as sharp thorns go unnoticed is my favorite line of the poem. A s a reader, I go to that central idea of the rose. Well done.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi! That's exactly how I wrote this poem. Lolz. You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from Vampire24
I love red roses. I have loved roses since I was a kid. I am 24 now and still enjoy receiving them. They are like a symbol of love, the most romantic gesture or gift a lover could ever give. I really enjoyed your poem. It was simple and straight to the point about how roses are and how you see them.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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I love red roses. I have loved roses since I was a kid. I am 24 now and still enjoy receiving them. They are like a symbol of love, the most romantic gesture or gift a lover could ever give. I really enjoyed your poem. It was simple and straight to the point about how roses are and how you see them.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi! You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Oh, the rose! It is, it always was and it will always be a favorite flower to all the romantic hearts. To give to the loved one, to express one's admiration or gratitude, to write about the rose in words like you did in your lovely poem.
You use the repetitive key words, making them penetrate further in the mind. I can practically touch its velvety petals and smell the intoxicating fragrance.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Oh, the rose! It is, it always was and it will always be a favorite flower to all the romantic hearts. To give to the loved one, to express one's admiration or gratitude, to write about the rose in words like you did in your lovely poem.
You use the repetitive key words, making them penetrate further in the mind. I can practically touch its velvety petals and smell the intoxicating fragrance.
Very well done!
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi! You're nice. Thank you :)
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and you are welcome!
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I like the contrast in the first line... but a rose is on a stem when it is on a bush so maybe the opposite would be blooming in a vase? Which yours was (you didn't bring the bush in the house :)
It might be fun to play with opposites... that might make it more interesting. You say "romance" which is good, what first comes to mind but what about playing with that next line with a word that means "sorry" Don't use sorry as I think that is a boring word (go to rhymezone(dot)com or dictionary(dot)com and use the thesaurus (that is my go-to)
I don't quite understand the numbers... but roses are often referred to as a dozen red roses.
Because beauty sits on the horizon I don't quite get.. but roses do climb a trellis... they are often on corsages - celebrate weddings and funerals (there's an opposite).
Just some thoughts. I'm rambling now. I like this idea a lot - it is why I spent time on this critique. Hope you don't mind.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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I like the contrast in the first line... but a rose is on a stem when it is on a bush so maybe the opposite would be blooming in a vase? Which yours was (you didn't bring the bush in the house :)
It might be fun to play with opposites... that might make it more interesting. You say "romance" which is good, what first comes to mind but what about playing with that next line with a word that means "sorry" Don't use sorry as I think that is a boring word (go to rhymezone(dot)com or dictionary(dot)com and use the thesaurus (that is my go-to)
I don't quite understand the numbers... but roses are often referred to as a dozen red roses.
Because beauty sits on the horizon I don't quite get.. but roses do climb a trellis... they are often on corsages - celebrate weddings and funerals (there's an opposite).
Just some thoughts. I'm rambling now. I like this idea a lot - it is why I spent time on this critique. Hope you don't mind.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hi! It's not about one rose. It's about my beliefs, ideas and truths of the red rose / red roses. I'm sorry you don't understand more and more roses through a number. I'm sorry you don't get a metaphor. It's all pretty straightforward. I'm not really allowed to say much more than thank you. That's like a rule... Thank you :)
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I understand metaphors as it is one of my favorite forms to use in my poetry writing. Roses through a number... You are correct, I don't understand. I guess I did miss it. But that is my critique... and I need to be honest. No need to be sorry for me - I don't understand that response. I'm giving you honest feedback - I receive feedback where readers don't get what I'm trying to say and I weight their thoughts. And then make a change or not. Thats what is great about this site.
