O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from HansiJ
Your poem brings out the true strength of almighty God. His eyes see all the good and evil of puny humans. A person can be very tricky and mastermind in committing crimes. But he can not deceive God.
God bless you and good luck.
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Your poem brings out the true strength of almighty God. His eyes see all the good and evil of puny humans. A person can be very tricky and mastermind in committing crimes. But he can not deceive God.
God bless you and good luck.
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from dragonpoet
You remind us in this poem the God is always watching. I like the alliteration used throughout. I like the oxymoron of visibly invisible.
I think punish should be punishes.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
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You remind us in this poem the God is always watching. I like the alliteration used throughout. I like the oxymoron of visibly invisible.
I think punish should be punishes.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Alcreator Litt Dear,
It's a nice piece of Spiritual Poetry in the form of 'Acrostic Poem' meeting the desired norms, having phraseology pregnant in ideas, enchanting flow with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting God's Eyes having various shades.
Particularly noteworthy are:
"Visibly Invisible Eyes" & The last Stanza.
LAUDABLE Indeed!
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Hello Alcreator Litt Dear,
It's a nice piece of Spiritual Poetry in the form of 'Acrostic Poem' meeting the desired norms, having phraseology pregnant in ideas, enchanting flow with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting God's Eyes having various shades.
Particularly noteworthy are:
"Visibly Invisible Eyes" & The last Stanza.
LAUDABLE Indeed!
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from Franklin Dillard
This story is the way one would think that Adam and Eve must have felt. When they discovered they had been duped by the devil it was too late to undo what they had done. Good job.
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This story is the way one would think that Adam and Eve must have felt. When they discovered they had been duped by the devil it was too late to undo what they had done. Good job.
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic poem about the divine eyes of God that are everywhere and notice all unjust behavior as well as the ones who are suffering from others behavior and only He will judge at the end.
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A very well-written acrostic poem about the divine eyes of God that are everywhere and notice all unjust behavior as well as the ones who are suffering from others behavior and only He will judge at the end.
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from heavenempress
Hi, excellent piece of work and you are very creative. Keep it up. I enjoyed the poetic style and the very relevant image. Super by presentation and rich English vocabulary.
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Hi, excellent piece of work and you are very creative. Keep it up. I enjoyed the poetic style and the very relevant image. Super by presentation and rich English vocabulary.
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We are certainly being punished just now with this pandemic as so many people have died and your words here are very powerful and quite scary, we are being tested and I fear for us all, a fine religious acrostic with a fearful message, love Dolly x
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We are certainly being punished just now with this pandemic as so many people have died and your words here are very powerful and quite scary, we are being tested and I fear for us all, a fine religious acrostic with a fearful message, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I've never seen an acrostic done in quite this way - I'd like to see it wrap around and flow a bit more - it's a little bit "choppy" for me - but I did stop and ponder each line. We must never forget that God is all-knowing, (all-seeing) we can't fool him.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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I've never seen an acrostic done in quite this way - I'd like to see it wrap around and flow a bit more - it's a little bit "choppy" for me - but I did stop and ponder each line. We must never forget that God is all-knowing, (all-seeing) we can't fool him.
Comment Written 08-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Thank you but you have rated unfairly so please re-read and raise rating fairly as I mentioned in Author Notes about my limitations per nature of work and to follow my own style and art of expression, and I do not plead my work but I request you to reconsider rating.
With the kindest personal regards,
Thanking you in advance for rating higher,
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
8th May 2020
PS Please see other ratings and reconsider your rating
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Seriously? How long have you been here participating on FanStory? Do you really think a 4 is a bad rating? It says a "4" is Good and Adjustments needed. I told you honestly what I felt. I don't think is is a 5 (Excellent pome and no revisions needed). Please tell me why a rating of 4 seems "unfair" to you. I don't understand what your limitations are... I will go try and see in Author's Notes. But how would that still have a bearing on the poem's critique?
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Thank you for teaching,
How could I explain?
You have to explain yourself.
Yes, you must explain as a reviewer. You should know the duty of a reviewer is to help the author and not to simply say your opinion and giving poor rating. Where is your suggestion or advice for improvement or betterment of the work? If you have not read such a work that is not related to your giving poor rating to the work. I have written about 100,000 positive reviews only to help authors and not to get self-satisfaction by giving poor rating as I never write an unfair review. If there are errors, mistakes and I can offer suggestions for editing I fairly give rating accordingly and not like you simply saying a word telling your opinion and giving the author a punishment.
I write this to let you know, without explanation and suggestions or advice to improve in the writing of the author, you are making or writing or sending an unfair review with unfair rating of the work to denounce the author and bringing down reputation, popularity of the author willingly, desperately, intentionally to prove yourself how good reviewer you are; since 99.99% of the reviews of the work gives fair review and rating, in this circumstance, I can say you are wrong and you have rated my work poorly and unfairly and you expressed a wrong opinion, because you cannot say if you have not read or seen a writing before, that is not a valid ground for giving poor rating of the work. If you have courage and confidence, please explain yourself and prove me wrong. I know out of your ego sentiment you will not give higher rating.
In that case, as you have written an unfair review, being unable to help author and being unable to clarify your words and being egoistic you do not raise the rating, in that case only, for I will wait for a few hours, thereafter I will take my next decision.
So, if you are really not raising the rate, by doing so, you never lose anything, and incur any loss anyway, and I think, you will do a good job.
Thanking you once again for writing and teaching me something interesting,
Thanking you in advance for giving higher rating and or explaining and clarifying your point of difference and or offering suggestions, advice for improvement in a few minutes,
With the kindest personal regards,
Wishing you every success in your chosen goal,
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
9th May, 2020 Saturday Morning
PS: Please read other ratings and reconsider rating
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So you expect 5's all the time? I think your words are choppy. I know one can list with an acrostic, so that aspect of your poem is fine. But, I still think the flow of the words is important .. it really falls apart (for me, the reviewer) in the last two lines. It does not have to rhyme. That isn't the problem - it's that the words don't flow. Me, as a review, as a poet, a person, I think the last two lines need tweaking to make them poetic. To flow. A 4 is NOT a bad score. I am not an "egoistic" - I'm honest with my rating and trying to write fair reviews. I think it is actually against the rules of FanStory to question a review... I have to admit, your response scares me a little bit. You sound angry and I don't know who you are... This is the kind of return that makes people not want to review anything...
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is an interesting acrostic poem, my friend. This is an interesting line:
Visibly Invisible Eyes.
Take care and stay safe, my friend~Debbie
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This is an interesting acrostic poem, my friend. This is an interesting line:
Visibly Invisible Eyes.
Take care and stay safe, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 08-May-2020
Comment from richie b
Acreator,
Your poem tells of the Supreme Being that He is.
No words or titles can describe Him,there for "I AM."
I understand your finality on all your descriptions
of His awesome Wisdom and intelligent creative powers.
I agree that He cannot be slotted into any earthly
thinking certain grouping.
He is the Universal Christ.
Peace,
Richie b
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Acreator,
Your poem tells of the Supreme Being that He is.
No words or titles can describe Him,there for "I AM."
I understand your finality on all your descriptions
of His awesome Wisdom and intelligent creative powers.
I agree that He cannot be slotted into any earthly
thinking certain grouping.
He is the Universal Christ.
Peace,
Richie b
Comment Written 08-May-2020
