conversation of a lie
correspondence of a lie6 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
The argument of this is a bit hard to follow in places, but the general tenor seems to be that lies are always bad and that truth is eternal. Our path into the future needs to be built on truth.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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The argument of this is a bit hard to follow in places, but the general tenor seems to be that lies are always bad and that truth is eternal. Our path into the future needs to be built on truth.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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thank you for the time of day for your review,tfawcus! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I think this is very disjointed. I think it could definitely be made more cohesive. I'm not really following the story this poem is trying to tell. I think the repetition doesn't do justice to this poem.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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I think this is very disjointed. I think it could definitely be made more cohesive. I'm not really following the story this poem is trying to tell. I think the repetition doesn't do justice to this poem.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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thank you for the time of day for your review,amanda louise davis! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
I do not have problems with your kind of writing and constant comparisons of words until you come to a rather interesting conclusion.
But using non-existing words like badass makes it difficult to follow the reasoning. You could maybe simplify this by separating bad and ass. (Just a thought)
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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I do not have problems with your kind of writing and constant comparisons of words until you come to a rather interesting conclusion.
But using non-existing words like badass makes it difficult to follow the reasoning. You could maybe simplify this by separating bad and ass. (Just a thought)
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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thank you for the time of day for your review,marjon van bruggen! also thanks for your thought and recommendation. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
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Your so vein. welcome!
Comment from CHANYA MASHENGU
I was completely taken by the tongue-twisting of the words yet they had a lot of logical sense.
The author caught me so unaware. because as I was beginning to understand the meaning reaching to acceptance, a new concept was yet introduced.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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I was completely taken by the tongue-twisting of the words yet they had a lot of logical sense.
The author caught me so unaware. because as I was beginning to understand the meaning reaching to acceptance, a new concept was yet introduced.
Well done.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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thank you for the time of day for your review,chanya mashengu! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Conservation in a lie, conversation with a lie you are so right lots of times the truth is hiddingb between the lines. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Conservation in a lie, conversation with a lie you are so right lots of times the truth is hiddingb between the lines. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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thank you for the time of day for your review,Iza deleanu! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks very well the meaning and essence of a conversation of a lie and shows it is correspondence of a lie; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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This speaks very well the meaning and essence of a conversation of a lie and shows it is correspondence of a lie; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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thank you for the time of day for your review,alcreator! sorry for the late reply. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
