Carolina Pastorals
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Land: Pt. 2; Groundwork"A celebration of North Carolina
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Comment from royowen
Unfortunately there are many farmers here, generational I presume, because of drought conditions for years here, hardy men are leaving the land, or some commit suicide, because this is an occupation that depends solely on faith and dependence on an unresponsive weather condition, it is the most basic of struggle and reward, beautifully written my friend, you do always have a purpose and thrust your writing. Without which I wonder why folk write. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Unfortunately there are many farmers here, generational I presume, because of drought conditions for years here, hardy men are leaving the land, or some commit suicide, because this is an occupation that depends solely on faith and dependence on an unresponsive weather condition, it is the most basic of struggle and reward, beautifully written my friend, you do always have a purpose and thrust your writing. Without which I wonder why folk write. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks so much for your excellent review and your perspective on the poem. I really wanted to convey that sense of not being altogether in control of this life, of needing faith to get through it, of relying on perseverance and hard work. estory
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Most welcome
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a lovely free verse, E!! :) Of course, being from a very rural part of the country, I can relate!! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
living to made --> [did you mean..?] living to be made OR living to make OR living made
born onto it --> [did you mean..?] born into it
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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What a lovely free verse, E!! :) Of course, being from a very rural part of the country, I can relate!! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
living to made --> [did you mean..?] living to be made OR living to make OR living made
born onto it --> [did you mean..?] born into it
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your encouraging remarks and perspective, and all the suggestions. I will take a look at editing it. estory
Comment from January L'Angelle
This is a very descriptive poem that really gives the reader great visuals. I could clearly see the earth and how the men work it. The poem is great in its structure and flow. Well done. -January L.
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This is a very descriptive poem that really gives the reader great visuals. I could clearly see the earth and how the men work it. The poem is great in its structure and flow. Well done. -January L.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging remarks. I'm so glad the visuals came through so clearly, so much of my poetry depends on vibrant images with depth. estory
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Estory, I am happy I found the second of your four "Land" poems. I enjoyed the first one so much I was really looking forward to this one.
Good, descriptive writing. Gives me a good idea of the vastness of the land, the endlessness of the repetitive days, the heavy work. But also of the pride of doing all this well, having a good harvest, the farmer's way of Thanksgiving. A fulfilling life.
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Estory, I am happy I found the second of your four "Land" poems. I enjoyed the first one so much I was really looking forward to this one.
Good, descriptive writing. Gives me a good idea of the vastness of the land, the endlessness of the repetitive days, the heavy work. But also of the pride of doing all this well, having a good harvest, the farmer's way of Thanksgiving. A fulfilling life.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging remarks. So glad you got these elements of hard work, of faith, of perseverance and the struggle to make a living out of this vast, uncontrollable earth and weather. estory
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You are very welcome,
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
"Groundwork" great free verse, it's almost like you wrote this about my family and I. May day's and late evenings tilling the ground, planting corn rotating to wheat depending on the seasons. After all the work is done, You Bring The Sacrament, great end. Best regards.
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"Groundwork" great free verse, it's almost like you wrote this about my family and I. May day's and late evenings tilling the ground, planting corn rotating to wheat depending on the seasons. After all the work is done, You Bring The Sacrament, great end. Best regards.
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Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments and perspective. So many farmers and people from farming backgrounds read this and I am glad they felt the poem captured something of their way of life. estory
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Excellent! freeverse poem about the reality of those who work the soil for their very existence. It is an ode of rhythm in the music of cadences reading enthusiastically out loud. I have not a 6* to give you for it definitely deserves it.
My grandparents were farmers and I am able to relate to how they thought and felt about the land and scraping a living from it year after year.
It reads wonderfully and progresses in thought and image. A real find! I also love how you related it to the Eucharist, the sacrament, the outward sign of the real presence here in the work and in the toil of the generations of life culminating a thanksgiving of what the land produces after the self giving of the blood sweat and tears. giovanni
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Excellent! freeverse poem about the reality of those who work the soil for their very existence. It is an ode of rhythm in the music of cadences reading enthusiastically out loud. I have not a 6* to give you for it definitely deserves it.
My grandparents were farmers and I am able to relate to how they thought and felt about the land and scraping a living from it year after year.
It reads wonderfully and progresses in thought and image. A real find! I also love how you related it to the Eucharist, the sacrament, the outward sign of the real presence here in the work and in the toil of the generations of life culminating a thanksgiving of what the land produces after the self giving of the blood sweat and tears. giovanni
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Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks so much for your inspiring review and your wonderful perspective on the poem. So glad the poem was able to capture these elements of perseverance and faith, of fitting into family traditions and the struggle with an uncontrollable landscape and weather. So many people from farming backgrounds enjoyed this and I am glad the poem was able to capture something of the hard work and faith that goes into it. estory
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y/w giovanni
