Viewing the World With Fresh Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Riding High"The fifteen Years of My Life
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Comment from Bill Pinder
That is amazing to me that as a five-year-old girl, you had the courage to do something your own father wouldn't do. I don't know where that would come from. Did you continue to be bold in doing new things the rest of your life.? Bill
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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That is amazing to me that as a five-year-old girl, you had the courage to do something your own father wouldn't do. I don't know where that would come from. Did you continue to be bold in doing new things the rest of your life.? Bill
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I always like to go on wild rides at fairs but I was not as brave around people once I started to school. I didn't handle being teased very well.
Comment from Ben Colder
This made me remember when I rode in my first plane ride as well. He was a Ace from WW2 and I expereience the same as you.Thanks for the memories we can share together. Hope you win the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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This made me remember when I rode in my first plane ride as well. He was a Ace from WW2 and I expereience the same as you.Thanks for the memories we can share together. Hope you win the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Ben, I appreciate you reading this and your comments. It's nice that we have memories that are so much alike. It's hard to forget that first plane ride.
Comment from zanya
This is simply a superb article for the 'I remember' contest told through the eyes of a child - love the part where the family dog appears to have shrunk -really gets the message across as to the reality of being above the earth, as it were
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This is simply a superb article for the 'I remember' contest told through the eyes of a child - love the part where the family dog appears to have shrunk -really gets the message across as to the reality of being above the earth, as it were
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I really appreciate the six stars.
Comment from LisaMay
I'm so impressed with your daddy letting you do that when he probably was scared to fly himself. He gave you a precious memory and status in the family - you wrote terrific story. I liked how it was written from a child's viewpoint
There are a few errors; you might want to edit your story after reading them:
"Yes! Yes! Can I?" Please, can I ride in a plane?" (remove the quotation mark after the question mark.)
"We'll see,' Daddy said. (change the single quote mark to a double one.)
At age five, getting to actually fly in the air would a be a dream come true. I envied the birds (add an apostrophe after s in birds') ability to fly. Every (remove the y) since Mom...
"No, Not me." Daddy said. (change cap to lower case in Not = not)
You ready to take a ride?" he asked me. I grinned and nodded. "Well, all right! Let weigh you in." (should be Let's)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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I'm so impressed with your daddy letting you do that when he probably was scared to fly himself. He gave you a precious memory and status in the family - you wrote terrific story. I liked how it was written from a child's viewpoint
There are a few errors; you might want to edit your story after reading them:
"Yes! Yes! Can I?" Please, can I ride in a plane?" (remove the quotation mark after the question mark.)
"We'll see,' Daddy said. (change the single quote mark to a double one.)
At age five, getting to actually fly in the air would a be a dream come true. I envied the birds (add an apostrophe after s in birds') ability to fly. Every (remove the y) since Mom...
"No, Not me." Daddy said. (change cap to lower case in Not = not)
You ready to take a ride?" he asked me. I grinned and nodded. "Well, all right! Let weigh you in." (should be Let's)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the comment and especially for picking up on the errors. I've fixed them. I think there is a child still trapped in each of us. When the memory happened as a child, why not let the child out to relate it?
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I agree with you that there is a child in each of us. You have utilised your inner child's voice really well in your story.
Comment from amada
I absolutely loved this story...but now i am curious what happened next...did you became a pilot when you grew up, are you a retired pilot right now. This story has good writing, great details, and very nice people. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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I absolutely loved this story...but now i am curious what happened next...did you became a pilot when you grew up, are you a retired pilot right now. This story has good writing, great details, and very nice people. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments. No, I didn't become a pilot but I did want to be a flight attendant. I married a man with the same desire to fly as me. We often went up in small planes for the fun of it. He learned to fly. I didn't. Thanks so much for the six stars.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a memory you probably will remember the rest of your life. ha ha This is a good entry or the contest. Good luck.
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This is a memory you probably will remember the rest of your life. ha ha This is a good entry or the contest. Good luck.
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much Rebecca. I appreciate the comment and review. I don't think I'll ever forget it because I've remembered it a lot years already.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from gingermo
The voice of the child comes through in this well written story that skillfully captures her excitement. The natural dialogue moves the story along at a good pace. I liked the the way the pilot related to his little passenger. A touch of humor here and 'the bald head,' bit great. Thank you for a lovely memory shared.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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The voice of the child comes through in this well written story that skillfully captures her excitement. The natural dialogue moves the story along at a good pace. I liked the the way the pilot related to his little passenger. A touch of humor here and 'the bald head,' bit great. Thank you for a lovely memory shared.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the excellent comments. I really appreciate you input.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful memory to hold with you -- that thrill of flying is something that NEVER leaves your blood or your memory!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Such a wonderful memory to hold with you -- that thrill of flying is something that NEVER leaves your blood or your memory!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments.
