Diamond Dust
The changing of love, living with another husband16 total reviews
Comment from estory
I thought this was wonderful. You had a great personal language here, almost a private language, and it was taught with emotion. Super sense of the dramatic in the rhythms of the lines. Great images of physical attraction wearing away into whispers, echoes of arias, and yet what seems to remain is faithfulness, faith itself, in that image of church and confession. A sense of duty, a duty to life, and a former feeling of love. In the end you have nothing left but love, all the need and desire melt away in that endless dawn of love, and pride disappears, of no value. estory
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
I thought this was wonderful. You had a great personal language here, almost a private language, and it was taught with emotion. Super sense of the dramatic in the rhythms of the lines. Great images of physical attraction wearing away into whispers, echoes of arias, and yet what seems to remain is faithfulness, faith itself, in that image of church and confession. A sense of duty, a duty to life, and a former feeling of love. In the end you have nothing left but love, all the need and desire melt away in that endless dawn of love, and pride disappears, of no value. estory
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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What a beautiful and moving review, Estory! And six stars too. Thank you very, very much.
Comment from sunnilicious
Sorry to hear about your husband. Coupling is a good thing. Remember the good memories and work through everything else. Love is enduring. Wait it out. Nice work. God bless you :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
Sorry to hear about your husband. Coupling is a good thing. Remember the good memories and work through everything else. Love is enduring. Wait it out. Nice work. God bless you :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your encouraging review!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I can't begin to imagine what it must have been like for you, Marjon. I am scared such a thing would happen to me, or one of mine. Not to know who you are, or who your family are, must be so frightening. To be the carer, the one who loved the one with the Alzheimer's Disease, is even harder. You know what's happening, and you can't do anything to stop it. Your poem is so touching, my friend. Sending a huge hug. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
I can't begin to imagine what it must have been like for you, Marjon. I am scared such a thing would happen to me, or one of mine. Not to know who you are, or who your family are, must be so frightening. To be the carer, the one who loved the one with the Alzheimer's Disease, is even harder. You know what's happening, and you can't do anything to stop it. Your poem is so touching, my friend. Sending a huge hug. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your very kind review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job describing in verse how the man you loved changed before your eyes to due Alzheimer's. Though you loved him forever, those changes affected you as much as him. I'm sorry for your loss. I'm glad you were able to write your feelings and, even more so, share them here. Thank you. Take care.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
You did a great job describing in verse how the man you loved changed before your eyes to due Alzheimer's. Though you loved him forever, those changes affected you as much as him. I'm sorry for your loss. I'm glad you were able to write your feelings and, even more so, share them here. Thank you. Take care.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Jan, thank you very much for your review. It matters to me.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the live with someone who are physically there but nothing else to share with is a heavy burden on the one who is caring for the other. It will be a test of patience and compassion.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
A very well-written poem about the live with someone who are physically there but nothing else to share with is a heavy burden on the one who is caring for the other. It will be a test of patience and compassion.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much Sandra!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Alzheimer's Disease does put you in the spot of knowing two men in one, when they forget all that has gone on between you in previous years. It is good you had writing to release stress and frustration.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
Alzheimer's Disease does put you in the spot of knowing two men in one, when they forget all that has gone on between you in previous years. It is good you had writing to release stress and frustration.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Rebecca, thanks. Yes, I had my writing. Thank God for that.
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It was a good outlet that you honed for days such as this.
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thanks
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Writing kept me sane - I can understand where you are coming from Marjon. I am my husband's carer, his mind works well, not his body, due to chronic heart disease that's affecting everything, and it does change both the lives of the sufferer and the carer. Today I've been wondering if I should continue with Fan Story, but, I know I need it, it doesn't need me.
Enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing it, I needed to read this today.
cheers
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
Writing kept me sane - I can understand where you are coming from Marjon. I am my husband's carer, his mind works well, not his body, due to chronic heart disease that's affecting everything, and it does change both the lives of the sufferer and the carer. Today I've been wondering if I should continue with Fan Story, but, I know I need it, it doesn't need me.
Enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing it, I needed to read this today.
cheers
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Pearl, thank you for your review. I feel for you, because I know what you are going through. The last year of my husbands's life, he also had cancer and could not eat anymore.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This deeply moving and personal piece conveys a powerful message about caring for an Alzheimer's-stricken spouse, who is not like the same person
to whom you said "I do."
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
This deeply moving and personal piece conveys a powerful message about caring for an Alzheimer's-stricken spouse, who is not like the same person
to whom you said "I do."
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Janice, thanks for your kind review.
Comment from K. Olsen
That was gorgeous. The last stanza was particularly heart-wrenching and I liked that the last image was of pride crumbling into something too small to be of value. It puts a life shared into beautiful perspective, even ending. Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
That was gorgeous. The last stanza was particularly heart-wrenching and I liked that the last image was of pride crumbling into something too small to be of value. It puts a life shared into beautiful perspective, even ending. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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I am very happy with your review, thank you so much. And six stars!
Comment from January L'Angelle
I loved this poem. It was heart wrenching. I think of past relationships where they failed and I felt hopeless. "An apology becomes a compliment," This was an awesome line. It really resonated with me. Well penned. Respectfully, -January L.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
I loved this poem. It was heart wrenching. I think of past relationships where they failed and I felt hopeless. "An apology becomes a compliment," This was an awesome line. It really resonated with me. Well penned. Respectfully, -January L.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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January, thank you very much for your comment.