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Comment from royowen
So, not only has Mackenzie's place been ransacked but she has been told she's dead! But I think if Bill, Logan and Jose have got a say in this, that's not going to happen. Edger made a great recovery, except for wanting to go to the loo all the time. Beautifully written dear Barbara, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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So, not only has Mackenzie's place been ransacked but she has been told she's dead! But I think if Bill, Logan and Jose have got a say in this, that's not going to happen. Edger made a great recovery, except for wanting to go to the loo all the time. Beautifully written dear Barbara, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Comment from susand3022
I didn't realize you were a first-grade teacher, Barbara, that must be a real challenge online! Do you ever go to work half-dressed? Or do you do Pajama Friday now? Do you go by your student's homes to say hello from the sidewalk and share a story? I've seen so many teacher stories here of incredible teachers. Of course, I have no idea what kind of setting you're in, perhaps you aren't in an area where that kind of thing is possible. I do hope you're having as much fun teaching as I am reading this story. :)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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I didn't realize you were a first-grade teacher, Barbara, that must be a real challenge online! Do you ever go to work half-dressed? Or do you do Pajama Friday now? Do you go by your student's homes to say hello from the sidewalk and share a story? I've seen so many teacher stories here of incredible teachers. Of course, I have no idea what kind of setting you're in, perhaps you aren't in an area where that kind of thing is possible. I do hope you're having as much fun teaching as I am reading this story. :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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It is a challenge to teach first graders on-line. I am always fully dressed. I raised four boys and always felt I should be dressed around them. I only have one home now. My school district won't allow us to drive around our students' neighborhood. They feel its't risky. I often read them fun stories by computer and play games with them. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This was a "different" chapter. Drama and emotions and learning more about people. A few spags and suggestions. "Well, I guess I'd (better)start cleaning up."
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"Well, I guess I'[d](ll} start cleaning up."
I'll give (it)to Bill when we see him.
McKenzie answered her ring(ing) phone.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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This was a "different" chapter. Drama and emotions and learning more about people. A few spags and suggestions. "Well, I guess I'd (better)start cleaning up."
OR
"Well, I guess I'[d](ll} start cleaning up."
I'll give (it)to Bill when we see him.
McKenzie answered her ring(ing) phone.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the catches. I made the corrections. One of them I changed as I was posting. Should have left it alone.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I coudn't agree more with Logan. Mckennzie could certainly be more open with her feelings. She is positively reserved with everybody.
I just found a small thing:
"I found one in the den. I'll give to Bill when we see him. = "I found one in the den. I'll give it to Bill when we see him.
I love the story. All best. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Hi Barbara, I coudn't agree more with Logan. Mckennzie could certainly be more open with her feelings. She is positively reserved with everybody.
I just found a small thing:
"I found one in the den. I'll give to Bill when we see him. = "I found one in the den. I'll give it to Bill when we see him.
I love the story. All best. Ulla xx
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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I have made that correction. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice chapter, thank God Edgar is ok and Logan can continue with his romantic approach with Mackenzie. I hope you get the attackers in the next chapter. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Nice chapter, thank God Edgar is ok and Logan can continue with his romantic approach with Mackenzie. I hope you get the attackers in the next chapter. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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It won't be the next post but it will happen. Thank you for the kind review.
