Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I think a "jumping-off-point" refers to a starting point and you used it well with your Russian expression. Thank you for letting us know that a young squirrel is called a kit and weaving a story poem around its curiosity. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020

Hi! It actually made me think about diving boards and suicide. You're nice. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That picture is cute but that's a bunny not a squirrel. But maybe that can be called a "kit" also. I kept imagining a fox kit until I got to your notes.
You made a fun story interacting with nature and sharing some bit of peace.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020

Hi Helen! That is a squirrel. The kit's body is about the size of your hand. It'll grow into it's ears and the tail is double its size. Thank you. Hugs :)

reply by lyenochka on 26-Apr-2020

Ah, thanks for clarifying - it sure looks more like a bunny than a squirrel. I there are really small squirrels running around lately - they're so fast!

Comment from Treischel

Good

I enjoyed this little story of the squirrel and its interactions with traffic as well as your lunch. Some of the rhymes seemed a bit forced, but overall a believable poetic instance. Not sure the phrase really goes with the story either. It feels like you just threw it on at the end. So, to me, I wasn't enthused much. Sorry.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020

Thank you :)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about leaving a problem for a while to recharge your mind us the best thing we can do to solve a problem that we cannot solve when we feel stressed.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020

You're nice. Thank you :)

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Sunni... so, the whole time, I'm thinking that the kit is a baby fox... because they're kits too... but I learned something new here, it was a squirrel! Now the story makes sense, though the picture at the bottom is a quandary... why the rabbit with the ice cream cone? LOL THanks for teaching me something new! :)

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020

Hi Susan! And you thought me something new also. I didn't know about the baby fox. That's nice. You're nice. Thank you :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks a nice, funny story about a kit (squirrel) whose comprehension and wish to go for rest after eating is appreciable; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020

Hi! Thank you. Have a great weekend :)

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

This was a cute little poem and I could see the Kit running around and getting into some mischief. I love the clear descriptions that you provide. The only thing I didn't pick up on was what he was sleeping on.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020

Hi! It was bread like a pillow. Thank you.
Have a great weekend :)

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I just love the word phrase you choose to share in this beautiful poem -story. And this kit has quite the survival skills embedded in his DNA :"Suddenly, traffic grabbed its attention
The kit looked anxiously left and right.
I was shocked at its comphrension;
This little animal was quite bright."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020

Hi! You're very kind. Thank you.
Have a great weekend :)

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this story in a poem about a baby squirrel playing near you. Animals can be fun to watch, especially young ones. Keep writing and stay safe. Bill

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020

Hi! You're nice. Thank you
Have a great weekend :)

Comment from faith bosire

Good

Wow this is a great piece of work
What you wrote about the kit is amazing and it gives such a vivid description . You could also add about its colour . That's just my view

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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020

Thank you :)