Carolina Pastorals
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Flow"A celebration of North Carolina
22 total reviews
Comment from Ashtar Zaidi
You write with your heart and that is something i love. And you are an amazing poet. Well written my friend, good way to express through gems and molten lava, your flow is outstanding and your work is unique, keep it up, God Bless You :)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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You write with your heart and that is something i love. And you are an amazing poet. Well written my friend, good way to express through gems and molten lava, your flow is outstanding and your work is unique, keep it up, God Bless You :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging remarks. It's always rewarding when a poem takes flight and brings people from all walks of life on a journey through the experienced of their life. estory
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You call it a stream of consciousness but I see a stream of subconsciousness. Your subconscious is telling you that things will never be the same and are changing rapidly. Our work habits will be drastically affected by this Pandemic because we see what can be accomplished from home. We see the veil of pollution lifting because of the absence of traffic. There is so much to be gleaned now. Your poem was very enjoyable to read. It's almost a forecast.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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You call it a stream of consciousness but I see a stream of subconsciousness. Your subconscious is telling you that things will never be the same and are changing rapidly. Our work habits will be drastically affected by this Pandemic because we see what can be accomplished from home. We see the veil of pollution lifting because of the absence of traffic. There is so much to be gleaned now. Your poem was very enjoyable to read. It's almost a forecast.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the poem. I wrote this before the pandemic started and it doesn't really have to do with the pandemic; it is really meant to be an articulation of the natural forces flowing through this world and shaping our own creations, constantly in motion, moving beyond us...estory
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I did enjoy it. I could visualize what your words were stating about the many ways things can flow. Even here, your words flowed smoothly with great imagery. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I did enjoy it. I could visualize what your words were stating about the many ways things can flow. Even here, your words flowed smoothly with great imagery. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your wonderful encouraging remarks supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it estory
Comment from Ross E Silke
Well, the first thing to mention is that it has great 'flow', lol!! I like your word that is new to me . . . a big one, transubstantiation.--wow, great word! I like how flow suggests changes in direction and changes in life, etc. This is entertaining and a great write. I like how you mention lava flow and different gemstones, you write a very powerful picture with lots of good details. Very bright and powerful. Great work here at the exceptional level I believe, A+
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Well, the first thing to mention is that it has great 'flow', lol!! I like your word that is new to me . . . a big one, transubstantiation.--wow, great word! I like how flow suggests changes in direction and changes in life, etc. This is entertaining and a great write. I like how you mention lava flow and different gemstones, you write a very powerful picture with lots of good details. Very bright and powerful. Great work here at the exceptional level I believe, A+
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks again for the exceptional review and these inspiring comments....estory
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Well, I think that you have captured he flow precisely, from one state to the next, never stopping always flowing on and on. Reads well aloud and I like the choice of words and concepts. the rhythm is an ever flowing rhythm too. giovanni
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Well, I think that you have captured he flow precisely, from one state to the next, never stopping always flowing on and on. Reads well aloud and I like the choice of words and concepts. the rhythm is an ever flowing rhythm too. giovanni
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments validating the construction of the poem. I am so glad the poem seemed to become what I wanted it to become to so many people. estory
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y/w giovanni
Comment from Ulla
Hi estory, I liked your free verse very much and I certainly went with the flow.LOL. It has great alliteration and it was a joy to read. It is quite a unique approach. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hi estory, I liked your free verse very much and I certainly went with the flow.LOL. It has great alliteration and it was a joy to read. It is quite a unique approach. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks for all the continued support of my work and your excellent review supporting this poem. I didn't really think that much of this one; but sometimes things can surprise you. estory
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
It is fascinating! Good poetry, giving me images of spirals, energy bundles, all kind of spiritual forms. Did you ever hear of Nassir Haramein? If not, please look him up. His lectures came so clearly in my mind!
A beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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It is fascinating! Good poetry, giving me images of spirals, energy bundles, all kind of spiritual forms. Did you ever hear of Nassir Haramein? If not, please look him up. His lectures came so clearly in my mind!
A beautiful poem.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks again for the six star review and your continued support of my poetry. Glad you are enjoying it so much estory
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More than welcome.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love this! You go with the word "Flow," and flow with it you do, to the many ways that the word flow is used, in combinations, both inclusive and ever outward reaching. This is, as you say in your notes, a stream of consciousness poem that explores the many ways it can be used. I especially like the commentaries on the flow of information, and how it has changed and morphed into something not quite real or satisfying. This is a superb display of the use of different rhythms and patterns of sound...it is fun to read aloud. I have enjoyed reading through this several times to try to 'get' the deeper meanings involved, and I can see that it is left to the readers' interpretation, which is always a good sign of an exceptional poem. Each time, I see and read into, different ideas take fruition. This is the best free form verse piece I have read in quite a while. The absence of picture and blankness of the presentation is very suitable for this type of free association. Nothing to persuade the reader to form attachments to images before reading what is written.
Thank you for an enjoyable ride.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I love this! You go with the word "Flow," and flow with it you do, to the many ways that the word flow is used, in combinations, both inclusive and ever outward reaching. This is, as you say in your notes, a stream of consciousness poem that explores the many ways it can be used. I especially like the commentaries on the flow of information, and how it has changed and morphed into something not quite real or satisfying. This is a superb display of the use of different rhythms and patterns of sound...it is fun to read aloud. I have enjoyed reading through this several times to try to 'get' the deeper meanings involved, and I can see that it is left to the readers' interpretation, which is always a good sign of an exceptional poem. Each time, I see and read into, different ideas take fruition. This is the best free form verse piece I have read in quite a while. The absence of picture and blankness of the presentation is very suitable for this type of free association. Nothing to persuade the reader to form attachments to images before reading what is written.
Thank you for an enjoyable ride.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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It's always rewarding to have a poem take off and take so many people on a journey; to offer them a vision of the world, an articulation of experience. Thanks so much for this perspective and your encouraging remarks estory
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You are very welcome. I enjoyed reading your poem and am glad I had the chance to view it.
I'm happy you liked my review.
Jesse
Comment from smileycloud
yes
I did enjoy it
it is expressive of so many differences and the ins and outs of all the paraphernalia which bombards the human brains and attacks the feelings like a ghost train derailing off the tracks we try to follow
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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yes
I did enjoy it
it is expressive of so many differences and the ins and outs of all the paraphernalia which bombards the human brains and attacks the feelings like a ghost train derailing off the tracks we try to follow
have a smiley day
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your perspective on this poem...estory
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:)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I felt the motion of your words as you played with different scenarios and the changes you noticed. Years do change even solid objects. Well thought out and written.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I felt the motion of your words as you played with different scenarios and the changes you noticed. Years do change even solid objects. Well thought out and written.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem...estory
