Drawing a Blank
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Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the title: Drawing a Blank. I have the same question how can drawing leaving a blank paper until I read the following paragraph:
"As our friendship faded inexorably thereafter over five demoralizing years... However hard I try to bring to mind the wonderful moments we shared, all that ever comes to mind is...nothing."
Good times means nothing once a relationship is broken.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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I like the title: Drawing a Blank. I have the same question how can drawing leaving a blank paper until I read the following paragraph:
"As our friendship faded inexorably thereafter over five demoralizing years... However hard I try to bring to mind the wonderful moments we shared, all that ever comes to mind is...nothing."
Good times means nothing once a relationship is broken.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Hello again! The system hiccupped and your review was entered twice. Thanks for the ten stars!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, your words do echo the sadness of your break up with Michael. You told this part well, Liz. I like how you told of your personal feelings in such a . . .personal way. Good for you that running came into your life, and now writing. I like the idea of a 'baker's dozen plus one' and you that phrase in your story.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Yes, your words do echo the sadness of your break up with Michael. You told this part well, Liz. I like how you told of your personal feelings in such a . . .personal way. Good for you that running came into your life, and now writing. I like the idea of a 'baker's dozen plus one' and you that phrase in your story.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thanks Jan, for your always thoughtful words. Stop by anytime! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Drawing the blanks, i just love this expression it's so English and very useful when you don't know how to proceed further. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Drawing the blanks, i just love this expression it's so English and very useful when you don't know how to proceed further. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you, IZA. Always a pleasure to see you. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from samandlancelot
Elizabeth,
Silent witnesses to the expense are (delete 'are') bursting from my closets
There must be more on your mind about Michael then you thought, with your baker's dozen, plus one. What are you hiding from yourself?
I enjoyed your writing style and biographical story.
Patricia
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Elizabeth,
Silent witnesses to the expense are (delete 'are') bursting from my closets
There must be more on your mind about Michael then you thought, with your baker's dozen, plus one. What are you hiding from yourself?
I enjoyed your writing style and biographical story.
Patricia
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thanks Patricia--that piece--and the 13 preceding!-- were written years ago--pre Fanstory--the ugly fallout of the intense relationship indeed devastated me--luckily my emotions are not as raw these days, though I get pangs--it doesn't help that I can't avoid passing by his house!--we walk on occasion when we chance to cross paths but we've devolved to blandness. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Ashtar Zaidi
Excellent Work, I like how you explained minute expressions in a very smooth way, Great work... Thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless you,
~Ashtar~
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Excellent Work, I like how you explained minute expressions in a very smooth way, Great work... Thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless you,
~Ashtar~
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Welcome, Ashtar. So glad you enjoyed the piece. I appreciate your thoughtful remarks. Stop by anytime. Cheers. LIZ
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It's my pleasure :) God Bless you :)
Comment from Shirley McLain
Drawing a Blank was an interesting read and I did not see one error. You did an excellent job. Have a good Monday evening and keep yourself well. Shirley
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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Drawing a Blank was an interesting read and I did not see one error. You did an excellent job. Have a good Monday evening and keep yourself well. Shirley
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Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks Shirley. Stop by anytime. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LisaMay
Another well-written piece of patchwork to fit in the sorry saga. If it's 14 pieces, have we seen them all now?
I think this is a great way to explain your obsessive running (this happened to a friend of mine after a break-up, so I completely get it):
I began to run out of the need for an alternate anesthetic agent.
Back-to-front swapping the latter clause: Out of the need for an alternate anesthetic agent, I began to run.
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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Another well-written piece of patchwork to fit in the sorry saga. If it's 14 pieces, have we seen them all now?
I think this is a great way to explain your obsessive running (this happened to a friend of mine after a break-up, so I completely get it):
I began to run out of the need for an alternate anesthetic agent.
Back-to-front swapping the latter clause: Out of the need for an alternate anesthetic agent, I began to run.
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Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Bear with me--we're almost done! There are two left. Cheers. LIZ
