The Runaway
an 80 word story14 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
How cute is this! I had no idea where this was going and I loved the ending. You did a good job with this flash of fiction. No wasted words and a terrific surprise ending. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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How cute is this! I had no idea where this was going and I loved the ending. You did a good job with this flash of fiction. No wasted words and a terrific surprise ending. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Louise, though most kudos should go to Rockwell who provided the inspiration. Rod
Comment from HarryT
I wish we still had ice cream counters. Loved the Rockwell pic. perfectly fits the story. Story grabbed interest from the start. Believable dialogue, making the characters seem real. Nice twist at the end. My only wonder was why wasn't his clothes in with the family wash?
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I wish we still had ice cream counters. Loved the Rockwell pic. perfectly fits the story. Story grabbed interest from the start. Believable dialogue, making the characters seem real. Nice twist at the end. My only wonder was why wasn't his clothes in with the family wash?
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Harry, for the kind praise of my story. In my town there is an ice cream counter and it?s open. However, you stand outside and phone your order and wait for the owner to open the door and give it to you. Rod
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a wonderful post for the 80-word Flash Fiction contest. The picture is perfect for the story. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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This is a wonderful post for the 80-word Flash Fiction contest. The picture is perfect for the story. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Rebecca, for your kind praise of my story. Rockwell?s paintings all seem to have a story just waiting to be told. Rod
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You're quite welcome. You are right on that!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. It would appear that the lad was running away. I probably would have thought that he was running away also. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I like this. It would appear that the lad was running away. I probably would have thought that he was running away also. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I am delighted you like my shortie, Jeffrey. Thank you for sharing it. Rod
Comment from BeasPeas
Well, the cop is out the cost of the sundae, but he was able to indulge in his ice cream fix with the youngster. I like your cute story, well written and illustrated by the wonderful Norman Rockwell. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Well, the cop is out the cost of the sundae, but he was able to indulge in his ice cream fix with the youngster. I like your cute story, well written and illustrated by the wonderful Norman Rockwell. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Hi, Marilyn. Rockwell had such a knack for telling stories in his art. I am so pleased you enjoyed my shortie. Thank you for reviewing.
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Hi Rod. I recently watched a bio about Rockwell on TV. I love that type of programming. And... you're welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, The Runaway, has the proper word count and puts a different spin on the classic capture by Rockwell of the kid and the cop. Funny.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, The Runaway, has the proper word count and puts a different spin on the classic capture by Rockwell of the kid and the cop. Funny.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thank you for sharing my story, Bill, I?m especially pleased you found it funny. We all need more humor these days.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend,
Great 80 words flash fiction. Good word count. The presentation is nice. The topic is very funny and relatable. Well done my friend.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Hello my friend,
Great 80 words flash fiction. Good word count. The presentation is nice. The topic is very funny and relatable. Well done my friend.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy, for your kind praise of THE RUNAWAY. Rockwell deserves the most kudos, however, for his classic magazine cover which gave me the idea.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a very good example of misjudgment. We assume so much and we REALLY think we are right. Such a nice presentation with the picture and the sundaes.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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This is a very good example of misjudgment. We assume so much and we REALLY think we are right. Such a nice presentation with the picture and the sundaes.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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I truly appreciate your sharing my story and your kind praise, Raffaelina. Happy Easter!
Comment from Sally Law
Mystery writer, a superb write and telling of time and place. I frequented the laundromat with my mother. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Mystery writer, a superb write and telling of time and place. I frequented the laundromat with my mother. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Sally, for your kind praise of RUNAWAY. Happy Easter!
Comment from RShipp
Norman Rockwell would have loved 'the story behind the story' you have created!
Just the laugh I needed in this lovely isolated world.
Job well done!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Norman Rockwell would have loved 'the story behind the story' you have created!
Just the laugh I needed in this lovely isolated world.
Job well done!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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I am so pleased I achieved my objective?bringing some humor into your life. Thank you for sharing my shortie.
