Hail, Gentle Spring!
A short tribute to my favorite season15 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
The picture you chose to accompany your poem was a great touch.
"roam ... bleating" very precise words. Perfect!
Spring is a wonderful time on the farm. Great memories!
Best of luck in the Two Line Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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The picture you chose to accompany your poem was a great touch.
"roam ... bleating" very precise words. Perfect!
Spring is a wonderful time on the farm. Great memories!
Best of luck in the Two Line Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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The picture is indeed lovely and inspired the poem. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This has a Shakespearean tone to it. I can hear Spring being announced across the theater stage with cheering and toasting with an ale. And the juxtapositions takes place with peace becoming joy and raucous dancing and celebrating. You created all of that in this reader's imagination by the way you phrased the thoughts. I am voting for this. A+ for creating such an experience of wonder and mirth.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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This has a Shakespearean tone to it. I can hear Spring being announced across the theater stage with cheering and toasting with an ale. And the juxtapositions takes place with peace becoming joy and raucous dancing and celebrating. You created all of that in this reader's imagination by the way you phrased the thoughts. I am voting for this. A+ for creating such an experience of wonder and mirth.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Liz, for your marvelous praise of my short poem. I am delighted I could conjure images of Shakespeare productions for you. Lao I truly appreciate those six bright stars.
Comment from Selyob
I wrestled with this review. I gave six stars, and then took one back... then repeated.
I ultimately gave it five stars because I felt the "Come now" was too awkward, compared to a more common arrangement, "Now comes," which felt more natural, and flowed off the tongue more easily.
Additionally, I felt the comma in the second line should have been replaced with "and" to maintain the rhythm and flow established by the masterful word choices which preceded it.
All in all this is still a wonderful poem, and I truly enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I wrestled with this review. I gave six stars, and then took one back... then repeated.
I ultimately gave it five stars because I felt the "Come now" was too awkward, compared to a more common arrangement, "Now comes," which felt more natural, and flowed off the tongue more easily.
Additionally, I felt the comma in the second line should have been replaced with "and" to maintain the rhythm and flow established by the masterful word choices which preceded it.
All in all this is still a wonderful poem, and I truly enjoyed it!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Selyob, for your high praise of HAIL,GENTLE SPRING! and for taking the time to comment specifically on what improvements could be made.
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I should have mentioned that I lean toward Elizabethan style some times. So, I find myself drawn to similar "awkward" word arrangements as what I criticized you for.
Sometimes I mutter horribly as I delete whole lines and stanzas which are perfect... but so out of place. The curse of reading so much older stuff I guess. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, Hail, Gentle Spring, uses thirteen words and acts as a welcoming chant for the long-awaited season of renewal. Neat.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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This two-line poem, Hail, Gentle Spring, uses thirteen words and acts as a welcoming chant for the long-awaited season of renewal. Neat.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Bill, for sharing my short poem.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is beautifully described. Spring is an upbeat time of year and my favorite. Goodness knows we need a way to feel upbeat right now. This painting by Macwhirter is outstanding as is your short poem. Good Luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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This is beautifully described. Spring is an upbeat time of year and my favorite. Goodness knows we need a way to feel upbeat right now. This painting by Macwhirter is outstanding as is your short poem. Good Luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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I am delighted we both favor Spring the same reasons. Many thanks for your high praise. Rod
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This beautiful rhymed and metered poem is inspirational, describing the normal spring scenes we love to see; they are still there for us even when the times are not normal.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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This beautiful rhymed and metered poem is inspirational, describing the normal spring scenes we love to see; they are still there for us even when the times are not normal.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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I am delighted you found my short poem inspirational, Janice. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from zanya
The sentiments are simply exquisite, capturing the delicate and gentle arrival of that precious season of Spring with classic sounds of lambs and fledgelings - this year we should be able to hear all those sounds much clearer since our old world is passing away !
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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The sentiments are simply exquisite, capturing the delicate and gentle arrival of that precious season of Spring with classic sounds of lambs and fledgelings - this year we should be able to hear all those sounds much clearer since our old world is passing away !
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thank you, zanya. I am truly happy I brightened your day with this short poem, zanya.
Comment from Ogden
I think most English-speaking people (in
North America at least) would say Spring is their favorite season, although I'm not sure the lambs and birds are more active than in May, another popular month.
Ogdn (Don)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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I think most English-speaking people (in
North America at least) would say Spring is their favorite season, although I'm not sure the lambs and birds are more active than in May, another popular month.
Ogdn (Don)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Don, for sharing my short poem.
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You're very welcome. Enjoy your favorite season in good health and safety!
Don
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Fantastic, you have stated nicely the coming of the gentle season, Spring and the wonderful environment around; I like the tribute to the season, so specially worded.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Fantastic, you have stated nicely the coming of the gentle season, Spring and the wonderful environment around; I like the tribute to the season, so specially worded.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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I am so pleased you like my designation for Spring. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore spring time when new life begins to blossom on the trees, lambs are born, the flowers grow and the birds lay eggs, the sun shines and the weather is warmer, what more could one wish for, you brought the scene here in your two lines, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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I adore spring time when new life begins to blossom on the trees, lambs are born, the flowers grow and the birds lay eggs, the sun shines and the weather is warmer, what more could one wish for, you brought the scene here in your two lines, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Dolly. I do hope Spring?s truly come your way by now.
