Sleep
8 word poem11 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Your lulling, Eight-Word Poem and parallel picture made me crave a nap! I admired your abundant use of the alliteration of "s's". Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Your lulling, Eight-Word Poem and parallel picture made me crave a nap! I admired your abundant use of the alliteration of "s's". Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eight-word poem, Sleep, has the right word count and certainly pushes the idea that these sisters sleep. Snoring dogs are just as funny as those that chase things in their dreams.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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This eight-word poem, Sleep, has the right word count and certainly pushes the idea that these sisters sleep. Snoring dogs are just as funny as those that chase things in their dreams.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Writer, and these are pets I presume, I had to zoom in on them because at first I thought they were possums. I'm sorry being that possums have this saying about them that they're faking their sleep while playing possum is the statement that's often used in this case . Now the colors of the pups were deceiving to my eyes, so I had to zoom in but I see that they're two sister pups sleeping side by side. Your eight words captured a special moment. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Writer, and these are pets I presume, I had to zoom in on them because at first I thought they were possums. I'm sorry being that possums have this saying about them that they're faking their sleep while playing possum is the statement that's often used in this case . Now the colors of the pups were deceiving to my eyes, so I had to zoom in but I see that they're two sister pups sleeping side by side. Your eight words captured a special moment. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review Mary. I never thought of them as possums but now you mention it I see where you're coming from.
Comment from RShipp
You have the required eight words for your poem.
The picture you selected accompanied was a great selection.
The 'snoring' I can certainly relate to... My dog is now waking me up from HIS snoring. He used to bark at me for mine.
I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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You have the required eight words for your poem.
The picture you selected accompanied was a great selection.
The 'snoring' I can certainly relate to... My dog is now waking me up from HIS snoring. He used to bark at me for mine.
I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Good word count. The presentation is nice. I don't understand why you repeat the line at the end. Seems repetitious. I would change the last line.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Hello my friend
Good word count. The presentation is nice. I don't understand why you repeat the line at the end. Seems repetitious. I would change the last line.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 8 Word Poetry contest.
This short piece is a good match for the photo.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 8 Word Poetry contest.
This short piece is a good match for the photo.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed .
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author... this is just the cutest thing! The image is adorable and the idea is just a winner! I love the idea of them snoring together. LOL I'm a sonorous gal myself and so is my boyfriend, it's fun to think of us in concert together as we sleep! LOL
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Hello Author... this is just the cutest thing! The image is adorable and the idea is just a winner! I love the idea of them snoring together. LOL I'm a sonorous gal myself and so is my boyfriend, it's fun to think of us in concert together as we sleep! LOL
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review Susan. They used to be really cute together.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
They are a cute bunch of lazy little dogs. I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your words create great imagery. The picture is adorable. I could 'hear' them snoring together. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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They are a cute bunch of lazy little dogs. I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your words create great imagery. The picture is adorable. I could 'hear' them snoring together. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Obviously your s-letter alliteration floats so easily through your short verse. Cute picture accompanies the same.
IMHO...these very short posts will benefit in its overall presentation to FS readers if the selected font is increased in size. Initial caps are apparently your style.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Obviously your s-letter alliteration floats so easily through your short verse. Cute picture accompanies the same.
IMHO...these very short posts will benefit in its overall presentation to FS readers if the selected font is increased in size. Initial caps are apparently your style.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review and advice. Much appreciated.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Isn't it funny when our pets snore?! ;) A good offering for this contest that even employs repetition to paint a complete image in sight and sound1 ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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LOL! Isn't it funny when our pets snore?! ;) A good offering for this contest that even employs repetition to paint a complete image in sight and sound1 ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
