A Shadow On The Street
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Shallow Minds of Bigotry"One man's blessing can be another's curse.
13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Pinder
That is sad that some people are like that. It's especially sad when they are a member of a church and think they are doing it right. Thanks for sharing the truth in a creative way. Bill
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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That is sad that some people are like that. It's especially sad when they are a member of a church and think they are doing it right. Thanks for sharing the truth in a creative way. Bill
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hi, Bill! Many thanks, for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Anya Trofimova
I think that this piece reads very well. You strike the nail on the head when it comes to finding the balance between too much and too little description. Your characters are very believable, thanks in part to the natural and realistic dialogue. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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I think that this piece reads very well. You strike the nail on the head when it comes to finding the balance between too much and too little description. Your characters are very believable, thanks in part to the natural and realistic dialogue. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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I appreciate you reading both of them. Thank you!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I'm so glad that you straighten those people out and explained to them about African-Americans. Do you live in the south where this perhaps happens often? I love Walmart shopping, and have never noticed this happening in the stores around here.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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I'm so glad that you straighten those people out and explained to them about African-Americans. Do you live in the south where this perhaps happens often? I love Walmart shopping, and have never noticed this happening in the stores around here.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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I live in Milan, Tennessee, and sadly I've seen this happen more than once. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes, There is a lot of bigotry in this world but I do believe it is getting better. I was not brought up to be one of those. This was a good story, Mike, and I enjoyed it very much. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Yes, There is a lot of bigotry in this world but I do believe it is getting better. I was not brought up to be one of those. This was a good story, Mike, and I enjoyed it very much. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hi, Nancy! Many thanks for your kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from JudyE
Some people are incredibly bigoted yet call themselves Christians.
Just a few points:
"Great, I'm home." - period after 'Great'
We all sit together at the table has the family we are - should be 'as the family...'
It seems the next section is written by a woman (Kathy?) but I'm afraid it's not at all obvious to me. Maybe there needs to be another hint or two as to the sex of the person.
"Oh, it's worse than that." I calmly reply. "I married him. - replace period after 'that' with a comma.
The car is about the same shade of gray has their hair. - should be 'as their hair'
"Why shouldn't I, you gave me no respect at all. - question mark after 'I'
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Some people are incredibly bigoted yet call themselves Christians.
Just a few points:
"Great, I'm home." - period after 'Great'
We all sit together at the table has the family we are - should be 'as the family...'
It seems the next section is written by a woman (Kathy?) but I'm afraid it's not at all obvious to me. Maybe there needs to be another hint or two as to the sex of the person.
"Oh, it's worse than that." I calmly reply. "I married him. - replace period after 'that' with a comma.
The car is about the same shade of gray has their hair. - should be 'as their hair'
"Why shouldn't I, you gave me no respect at all. - question mark after 'I'
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hi, Judy! Many thanks for your kind words and help with this story.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a wonderful story showing the right way to handle evil people!
Noticed two typos:
"Kathy has supper ready when I walk out of the bathroom, all clean and spiffy. We all sit together at the table has the family we are. Well, I'm at one end, they're at the other." (as the family we are)
"Well, there's go that chance. The cashier stops what she's doing and looks at me while grabbing the intercom." (Well. there goes that chance.)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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This is a wonderful story showing the right way to handle evil people!
Noticed two typos:
"Kathy has supper ready when I walk out of the bathroom, all clean and spiffy. We all sit together at the table has the family we are. Well, I'm at one end, they're at the other." (as the family we are)
"Well, there's go that chance. The cashier stops what she's doing and looks at me while grabbing the intercom." (Well. there goes that chance.)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hi, sweetie! As and Has, and I, don't get along. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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You are certainly welcome.
Comment from royowen
I have no understanding of prejudice, if one raise one's children in the the way of Christ, they know we are all sinners washed in the blood, if we believe, Jesus hung out with all the social misfits, why? Because He knew, They knew, they were sinners, and who He was, if God loves all men, why shouldn't I? Prejudice is taught, children aren't born with it. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : At the table (h)as the family we are. The same shade of gray (h)as their hair.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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I have no understanding of prejudice, if one raise one's children in the the way of Christ, they know we are all sinners washed in the blood, if we believe, Jesus hung out with all the social misfits, why? Because He knew, They knew, they were sinners, and who He was, if God loves all men, why shouldn't I? Prejudice is taught, children aren't born with it. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : At the table (h)as the family we are. The same shade of gray (h)as their hair.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hi, Roy! Prejudice runs deep in Tennessee, but times are changing. Many thanks for your kind words!
Have great day and God bless.
mike
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Good job Mike
Comment from estory
You created some strong contrasting characters in this piece, and the tension between the racist couple and the mother leapt off the page. That scene at the cash register was really well written. the dialogue through out was really well put together and it drove the chapter. I like how you disarmed the racist man at the end with that lecture from the pastor. An interesting read. estory
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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You created some strong contrasting characters in this piece, and the tension between the racist couple and the mother leapt off the page. That scene at the cash register was really well written. the dialogue through out was really well put together and it drove the chapter. I like how you disarmed the racist man at the end with that lecture from the pastor. An interesting read. estory
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hello, my friend! Many thanks for your kind words and for those shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a grerat day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sally Law
I'm sure you did get some evil looks, unfortunately. I've had many black friends and a good one in high school. In the sixties and seventies is was a lot worse than it is now but still see it. I wish it weren't so. It's ridiculous and so hurtful. :(
A small typo and suggested improvement.
"Well, there goes that chance."
"Went" works here, as well.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings in Christ to you all,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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I'm sure you did get some evil looks, unfortunately. I've had many black friends and a good one in high school. In the sixties and seventies is was a lot worse than it is now but still see it. I wish it weren't so. It's ridiculous and so hurtful. :(
A small typo and suggested improvement.
"Well, there goes that chance."
"Went" works here, as well.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings in Christ to you all,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hi, Sally! As and Has, and I, don't get along. Many thanks for your kind words and help with this story.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Interesting theme, (concept, shallow minds of bigotry, even today, race discrimination and colour - black and white with religious differentiation, human categorization), I find taletelling and plot development is fast forward, frank and realistic, but I do not find the dialogues are expressive, though contributory, characterization is good, if not impressive; general ending, still well said and well done.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Interesting theme, (concept, shallow minds of bigotry, even today, race discrimination and colour - black and white with religious differentiation, human categorization), I find taletelling and plot development is fast forward, frank and realistic, but I do not find the dialogues are expressive, though contributory, characterization is good, if not impressive; general ending, still well said and well done.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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Hello, my friend! Many thanks for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.'
mike
