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Cut Yourself When Opening

A Sharks Last Thought

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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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A Sharks Last Thought
Cut Yourself When Opening

Hello my friend

Wow, that's terrible for the poor shark. I guess this really happens. Good job with the syllable count and contest rules. Nice picture.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
    Thank you very much
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Witty title! What a fresh idea and so cleverly done with phrasing out of the usual order--works well here. Dorsal digit... slaughtered for soup alliteration. Good work. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

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    Thank you very much
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
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Cute! Poor sharky ended up as a meal. How sad! Until you think about it, if you're out swimming and Mr. Snarky swims in and he opens up his big mouth and he takes one big chunk of your body and you become a just bite-size bite for him. I'm sorry, I have no empathy.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
    I agree with this difference for us to murder and hunt this shark we must enter their domain/territory, they however do not enter ours to take a bite-size bite empathy or no it is our fault either way
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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Yes, it is nasty to cut off fins and throw the fish back alive to be unprotected and eaten by other fish. There's no means to escape any longer.

Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
    Thank you and yes it should be banned
Comment from ISTHATAONE
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Hmmnn.... I like the title better than the poem.

I also the pointed humor and most of the repetition of consonants.

The word Digit bothers me though:

I have trouble thinking of a dorsal fin being used to "touch" like a finger, but maybe that is my ignorance..... is that how dorsal fins are described scientifically?

I thought it was mainly for stabilizing the body in the water.

I think maybe this is a poem that needs more than 10 words.

Have fun revising!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
    Fair enough-what about toes?
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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So... that's shark soup..? Eeeeew! Certainly an appropriate offering for this contest -- and your syllable count looks good! :) Best of luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2020

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
    Yes something different to fill the mind, thank you very much