Soft Shining Wind
Spring Haiku 4/7/511 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
soft shining wind
plays with her peach kimono --
coquette geisha smiles
Light breezes, nimble movements, and a pleasant smile come to mind.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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soft shining wind
plays with her peach kimono --
coquette geisha smiles
Light breezes, nimble movements, and a pleasant smile come to mind.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Mark, I appreciate you taking the time to review my work.
Comment from kahpot
Don't ask me why but I love the idea of " peach" and flirtation being linked, to me, your words have given a wonderful image that enhances your artwork, very well written and very understandable, well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Don't ask me why but I love the idea of " peach" and flirtation being linked, to me, your words have given a wonderful image that enhances your artwork, very well written and very understandable, well done****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much, take care, my friend.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your 4-7-5, spring haiku and the reinforcing Japanese print. I admired your use of alliteration and energy in your ensemble. Big smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed your 4-7-5, spring haiku and the reinforcing Japanese print. I admired your use of alliteration and energy in your ensemble. Big smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Joan.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
When I read these, I try to scroll down to the piece before I see the picture to get the whole thing in my mind first. I can picture it but had to read the notes for the season. Good reasoning. Then I could picture the pink, the bouffant back piece and the little smile, just a little, with the way the lips are painted.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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When I read these, I try to scroll down to the piece before I see the picture to get the whole thing in my mind first. I can picture it but had to read the notes for the season. Good reasoning. Then I could picture the pink, the bouffant back piece and the little smile, just a little, with the way the lips are painted.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review, Barb.
Comment from Roberta Lawrinsky
This haiku perfectly conveys the feeling of silk as wind caresses a silk garment--very sensual & subtle.
Thank you for calling attention to little things.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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This haiku perfectly conveys the feeling of silk as wind caresses a silk garment--very sensual & subtle.
Thank you for calling attention to little things.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review. Could you please tell me why you gave me four stars? It's customers to give feedback for the reason.
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Dear Gypsy Blue Rose,
So sorry --my bad. I didn't know the values of the rating system, but I'm learning fast. I see your poem deserves a 5 or 6.
Forgive my hastiness?
I hope so.
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No problem, it happens to me too. Thank you.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gypsy, I sooo love your poem sweet girl...when I was younger for Halloween ...my mom dressed me as a geisha girl...I did it every year...I loved it...your poem reminded me...soooo very nicely written my sweet friend...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Hi Gypsy, I sooo love your poem sweet girl...when I was younger for Halloween ...my mom dressed me as a geisha girl...I did it every year...I loved it...your poem reminded me...soooo very nicely written my sweet friend...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your sweet review, Linda, you are an angel. Love you too. I'm glad it brought good memories.
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your so welcome sweet girl...always...much love xxoo
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely haiku about the a flirtatious wind playing with the geisha's kimono. The only word the stumped me a little was "shining" because I can't see the wind so how will I see the shine?
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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A lovely haiku about the a flirtatious wind playing with the geisha's kimono. The only word the stumped me a little was "shining" because I can't see the wind so how will I see the shine?
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I got the "shinning wind from a Japanese kigo dictionary.(see my link to the source) It's a poetic term, not literally shinning wind .
Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
I know there were other reasons for the paint, but reads like this make one think of how her blush of embarrassment would not even show.... and how attractive that blush can make a female to a male... ;) Thanx for sharing, Gypsy! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I know there were other reasons for the paint, but reads like this make one think of how her blush of embarrassment would not even show.... and how attractive that blush can make a female to a male... ;) Thanx for sharing, Gypsy! :) Yvette
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much, Yvette. Yes, I love the geisha's make up.
Comment from royowen
Another excellent haiku with a great theme, the chosen words are ultra important in any form of poem, and even more so when it comes to Japanese poetry, like this one, well done, Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Another excellent haiku with a great theme, the chosen words are ultra important in any form of poem, and even more so when it comes to Japanese poetry, like this one, well done, Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy. Take care, my friend.
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Bless you
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is another of your great haiku, Gypsy. You are a master at writing these. This one is beautiful. I could 'see' this as I read. Great work on the haiku style. I have read several for the contest (I know this isn't for it) that are really stretching the rules of haiku. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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This is another of your great haiku, Gypsy. You are a master at writing these. This one is beautiful. I could 'see' this as I read. Great work on the haiku style. I have read several for the contest (I know this isn't for it) that are really stretching the rules of haiku. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
