A Window On My World
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Can I Make A Wish?"Daily 5-7-5 simplicities for April Na-Po-Wri-Mo
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Comment from poetwatch
I know what you mean, LisaMay. We moved to Hondo, Texas, in November to enjoy our senior years, had a shell of a house built, my wife and I started finishing our dream home and then shit hit the fan. Can't go anywhere, my truck broke down. Got food, finally internet and a TV, but there is no freedom. At least I have an acre to play with. Now if it only stop raining! :) Smile woman. We only live once, hopefully we will come back.
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I know what you mean, LisaMay. We moved to Hondo, Texas, in November to enjoy our senior years, had a shell of a house built, my wife and I started finishing our dream home and then shit hit the fan. Can't go anywhere, my truck broke down. Got food, finally internet and a TV, but there is no freedom. At least I have an acre to play with. Now if it only stop raining! :) Smile woman. We only live once, hopefully we will come back.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Michele Harber
This is very moving, Lisa May, and your last two lines sum your feelings up beautifully, as do your explanatory notes at the end. As you say, you can have all manner of material goods but, without either freedom or someone with who to share isolation, what is it worth?
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This is very moving, Lisa May, and your last two lines sum your feelings up beautifully, as do your explanatory notes at the end. As you say, you can have all manner of material goods but, without either freedom or someone with who to share isolation, what is it worth?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
Comment from Jen Vasquez
Little cute poem every unique I enjoyed reading it follow the rules and regulations clear makes perfect sense I'm just a little emotional at the same time but you just keep the good work coming and I'll keep reading it
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Little cute poem every unique I enjoyed reading it follow the rules and regulations clear makes perfect sense I'm just a little emotional at the same time but you just keep the good work coming and I'll keep reading it
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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I appreciate your review - thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem reads like a suite of senryu and yes, we can all relate. I heard someone else say that she hates shopping but suddenly, she feels an urge to go to the mall!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Your poem reads like a suite of senryu and yes, we can all relate. I heard someone else say that she hates shopping but suddenly, she feels an urge to go to the mall!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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That is funny about the shopper. It seems very human to want what is denied.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
From dawn to dusk we are captive in our own homes whether we wish it or not. So the onus is on us to take advantage of this time alone. Prayer is a portion of it as well as writing and reading and perhaps watching some episodes on TV. But, basically, through all this, there is thought, which cannot be stopped.
Ergo, your well-chosen words in this poem. What is the most important part of this exercise? Our thoughts of those we love.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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From dawn to dusk we are captive in our own homes whether we wish it or not. So the onus is on us to take advantage of this time alone. Prayer is a portion of it as well as writing and reading and perhaps watching some episodes on TV. But, basically, through all this, there is thought, which cannot be stopped.
Ergo, your well-chosen words in this poem. What is the most important part of this exercise? Our thoughts of those we love.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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This compulsory shutdown is an interesting exercise indeed (or lack of exercise!) I hope it makes people more aware and considerate of each other, and that it continues when we regain our freedom.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a clever and rather wistful pair of 5-7-5 poems. I found the whole thing rather touching (pun intended of course, because I know you to have a good sense of humour
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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This is a clever and rather wistful pair of 5-7-5 poems. I found the whole thing rather touching (pun intended of course, because I know you to have a good sense of humour
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. I was aiming for a wistful feeling... I'm finding it interesting how my emotions are fluctuating during this period of 'home detention'. These April poems will probably be quite revealing by the end of the month (when i might be bouncing off the walls, or gibbering in a corner.)
Comment from RodG
You have described very well that FEELING OF DESPAIR one gets if she's isolated for very long. I especially like the allusion to Aladdin's treasure-filled cave, a direct contrast to her being alone. May I suggest rephrasing your second line of haiku two? What do I regard crucial ("hold" important is too slang-ish for me). Rod
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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You have described very well that FEELING OF DESPAIR one gets if she's isolated for very long. I especially like the allusion to Aladdin's treasure-filled cave, a direct contrast to her being alone. May I suggest rephrasing your second line of haiku two? What do I regard crucial ("hold" important is too slang-ish for me). Rod
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your comments, Rod - you can suggest, but i will ignore, hahaha, I wanted the informal feel, and the repeat of hold having different meanings.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Isn't that the truth? Freedom to come and go when we can't makes it all the harder. But we will get through this eventually. Your presentation is lovely. Drew xx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Isn't that the truth? Freedom to come and go when we can't makes it all the harder. But we will get through this eventually. Your presentation is lovely. Drew xx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for your nice comments.
Comment from RShipp
I live alone as well. It is hard to not be in physical contact with friends. I was never one to be a long-distance type friend.
I would be nice to have that lamp to rub and make all this go away!
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I live alone as well. It is hard to not be in physical contact with friends. I was never one to be a long-distance type friend.
I would be nice to have that lamp to rub and make all this go away!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is definitely the kind of poem that resonates with readers in many places right now, perhaps. I was thinking Aladdin needed to be capitalized, unless you had a source that said differently. The idea of being trapped but still surrounded by things which can be fun to look at is what this is kind of like for all of us in the sense of being creative people but on this ongoing in-house limitation. Freedom and space to think is part and parcel of being creative, so of course it requires more prioritizing all over again.
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This is definitely the kind of poem that resonates with readers in many places right now, perhaps. I was thinking Aladdin needed to be capitalized, unless you had a source that said differently. The idea of being trapped but still surrounded by things which can be fun to look at is what this is kind of like for all of us in the sense of being creative people but on this ongoing in-house limitation. Freedom and space to think is part and parcel of being creative, so of course it requires more prioritizing all over again.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
