Corona
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good mixture of prose and poety. I like the definitions linking corona with both humanity and nature.
The poem explains the spread and fear of carona virus. It has changed our lives and made us find new ways to connect with families and friends.
Yes the Camry took place of the Corona but that was in 1983.
I like the internal rhyme in the extra line in the penultimate stanza and the connection between devestation of war and this disease. Although it seems strange to have just one five line stanza.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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This is a good mixture of prose and poety. I like the definitions linking corona with both humanity and nature.
The poem explains the spread and fear of carona virus. It has changed our lives and made us find new ways to connect with families and friends.
Yes the Camry took place of the Corona but that was in 1983.
I like the internal rhyme in the extra line in the penultimate stanza and the connection between devestation of war and this disease. Although it seems strange to have just one five line stanza.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks again Joan
please keep safe
dip
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Don't mention it.
dp
Comment from kahpot
" so we're had a total eclipse' should this be (we've) ? I like this out look as when this is over some people have a lot to answer for and are going to look mighty stupid, this may or may not be the worst we are going to or have ever seen, but if people don't pull their heads in it bloody well might be, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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" so we're had a total eclipse' should this be (we've) ? I like this out look as when this is over some people have a lot to answer for and are going to look mighty stupid, this may or may not be the worst we are going to or have ever seen, but if people don't pull their heads in it bloody well might be, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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Thanks for picking up the spag Kahpot I retweaked a few things and adsded a couple of commas for those to totally understand how I would like this to be read because the only way I wish my humble rhmes to be read is aloud.
thank you as always I appreciate your support
dip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The last huge pandemic was in 1918, the spanish flu killed 50,000 million people Dip. This one won't kill that many people, but it does not discriminate and we are all vulnerable, this is a hard hitting write, and should have a warning for the bad language, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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The last huge pandemic was in 1918, the spanish flu killed 50,000 million people Dip. This one won't kill that many people, but it does not discriminate and we are all vulnerable, this is a hard hitting write, and should have a warning for the bad language, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Yeah i am aware of the history of viruses Dolly 50,000 million?
The biggest worry is the fact that its remifications and aftermath are still an unknown. Like can you possible get it again in another strain will it damage organs will people's immune system be compromised with this strain. Will this mutate before a vaccine is produced and render it useless on another strain We have had 102 years of medical advancements since the 1918 flu pandemic and we still cannot be sure we can defeat every virilant virus that comes along
Thanks the warning about language gee I am such a gutter mouth these days lol
dip
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The virus might mutate if the vaccine is not effective, it is a worry I agree, love Dolly x
Comment from Kellie Scranton
Love your outlook on this confusing and scary time. In this country, even in times like these when we should be introspective and valuing humanity and showing compassion. Many of us can let fear take us to animalistic levels, forgetting how some don't even have a place to go at night or a bed, or some that are elderly in nursing homes quarantined away from everyone and everything that gives them a sense of well-being and comfort. We blame choices people have made in life and don't know how to just show empathy and meet people where they are at. Everyone is in the same boat with something like this, and selfishness, ego, and placing blame is not going to change any of it. I think your poem and definitions are so telling of the age we are in, because only things like love, empathy and human connection (not literally) but connection as in understanding and compassion are going to lead us back out of this. This is definitely my favorite line Everyone is susceptible now
No one is immune the piper's playing the tune, it is so introspective and true. Levelling should be Leveling (just a spelling error) in that one line. But I think it flows nicely. I don't usually love rhyming poems but this one is quite clever, especially due to the times we are in.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Love your outlook on this confusing and scary time. In this country, even in times like these when we should be introspective and valuing humanity and showing compassion. Many of us can let fear take us to animalistic levels, forgetting how some don't even have a place to go at night or a bed, or some that are elderly in nursing homes quarantined away from everyone and everything that gives them a sense of well-being and comfort. We blame choices people have made in life and don't know how to just show empathy and meet people where they are at. Everyone is in the same boat with something like this, and selfishness, ego, and placing blame is not going to change any of it. I think your poem and definitions are so telling of the age we are in, because only things like love, empathy and human connection (not literally) but connection as in understanding and compassion are going to lead us back out of this. This is definitely my favorite line Everyone is susceptible now
No one is immune the piper's playing the tune, it is so introspective and true. Levelling should be Leveling (just a spelling error) in that one line. But I think it flows nicely. I don't usually love rhyming poems but this one is quite clever, especially due to the times we are in.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Wow, thank you for your in depth review and insight Kellie.
Can you do me a big favour Kellie, would you please revisit and read this aloud.
When reading rhyming verse one of the reasons people don't like it is they struggle knowing how to read it.
I only discovered poetry some 9 years ago when invited to Facebook to look at surfing photos(surfing is my first passion poetry is a long third after family)
I started to comment in rhyme as a joke which led me to writing ditties then poems I have never lost the passion to write rhyming verse and I self published a book of poems callled poems from the heart back in FEB 2013.
Lately I have been reciting my poems live at open mike poetry nights I attend every 2nd and 4 th wednesday of the month at a local inner city hotel in Sydney where i live in the suburb of Cronulla in the Sutherland shire.
I have been coming to Fanstory since May 2013 and I really enjoyed the cameraderia among those who enjoy the love of the written word and yes I am partial to rhyming vers having written close to 5000 poems since that initial day on Facebook back in 2010.
Sorry just wanted to give you a bit of an insight into my background as I have never read a review or have seen any of you posts I assume you must have been coming here for a very long time.
Now the reason I ask you to read this aloud is that I want you to establish the rhythm and beat I am establishing in my poems forget meter and syllabic count concentrate on accentuation and elongation and how to pause.
Many wonderful poets who are not partial to rhyming verse are that way inclined because they purely do not know how to read it.
On saying that you have established from your rating there is room for improvement so I am all ears.
I very much respect and appreciate you going to the trouble to read this and I invite you to check out my other 4000 poems I have posted here in rhyming verse I would love to hear what you feel and think and I promise I will fan you so I can be notified of yours.
We are ALL aware the impact this virus has had on the world , blind freddy could see this and yes we are all in the same boat (luckily not a cruise ship)
I am 65 years old so I have experienced many facets of life its happiness it brings, its sadness, the losses and the wins.
Just because one is chronologically aged does not reflect their attitude to life Age is a state of mind and I love the state I'm in physically and mentally.
I don't think I have ever been better I am surfing 4 to 5 hours aday when I can get in and that is most days as I was made redundant after 35 years some 5 years ago at the age of 60 so I have much time to reflect and enjoy my passtime and further pursue my passion to write simple rhyming verse.
respectfully dip
