Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

given,
whate'er I ask,
differently, I know,
my Science Math thought goes wrong, as
unexplained power 'yond mort' offers per
natural, unknown, mystic ord,
an unseen eye, keeps track
my needs, ask not,
given.

A bit unorthodox here but never the less a great attempt at the style.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for certified review

reply by Gungalo on 08-Apr-2013

Smile

Comment from muezza56

Excellent

i enjoyed this very well written poem and the play with dialectual usage of words. well conceived and well constructed poem

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

A well written rictameter aided by some poetic licence. I like the hidden meaning of the true friendship- deep personal feelings. Giddy

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for the review

Comment from emjaihammond

Excellent

Another lovely thoughtful poetic message. I had to read it twice, I admit, but I come away with a message that says God is all knowing, and can care for us much better than natural thought will allow. If that makes sense to you. I must say I am not sure, but love the way words make us think.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for review with doubts

Comment from Anthony Crosbie

Excellent

You have a unique style which can be seen as difficult or interesting depending on your mindset, I think you're saying that God is always watching and knows best, but I can't be sure. :)

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for review with suspicion

Comment from jmdg1954

Good

I reads this twice, then went to look at other reviews for done help, got none, went back , reads'em few mo times, still ain't got nothin.,,
I keep try in' ...
They absolutely no sense, sorry, John

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for trying

Comment from Tacticz

Excellent

I love it. It instantly gives off that philosophical vibe that not many people can grasp. Only a true poet can write these words and deliver them to the reader perfectly.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for honest and fair review with complements

Comment from TiffanyLeeBaldwin

Excellent

This is a new type of poem for me to read. I like the form. You did a great job putting this together and the key really helped. Good Job, I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent review

Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Wow! another brain twister for my professional eyes; what shall we make of this hodge-podge of scrambled thoughts? Perhaps that your great brain, however useful in many venues, yet cannot meet inner needs or perhaps, even ordinary ones, so you must rely on God who blesses you without even being asked. Wonder what would happen if you prayed?

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for guesswork

reply by Deniz22 on 08-Apr-2013

I did my best with what you gave. Obscurity are you. :)

Comment from Ceallach

Excellent

Ahh, I see the essence of this poem - me thinks well done yet again. Isn't a wonder when what we learn about life through schooling ends up to not add up to what our spirits view as true? Well done sir, very well done. C~

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

thanks for honest review