Living Up to Expectations
Life sentence, per doctor's decree14 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, you write some hilarious material, about a most serious subject, LIZ. I started smiling right off with the black-flecked flock, that's some tongue twister there. lol
The powers that Wannabe, another good one and a perfect lead in the faith of pharmaceuticals. Almost perfect rhymes too.
Excellent tone and I really enjoyed the shift from 1978 to 2018 with the deja vu umbrella moment. Forty years is a lifetime to be caught in the same system under the microscope of someone else's expectations to find what it is they are looking for, not what is really there.
You write real good, LIZ. I enjoyed this muchly.
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Ha, you write some hilarious material, about a most serious subject, LIZ. I started smiling right off with the black-flecked flock, that's some tongue twister there. lol
The powers that Wannabe, another good one and a perfect lead in the faith of pharmaceuticals. Almost perfect rhymes too.
Excellent tone and I really enjoyed the shift from 1978 to 2018 with the deja vu umbrella moment. Forty years is a lifetime to be caught in the same system under the microscope of someone else's expectations to find what it is they are looking for, not what is really there.
You write real good, LIZ. I enjoyed this muchly.
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Gloria. The doctor with the umbrella scenario #1, where he assumed the patient was a visitor, really happened--it was the pivotal moment for her to break free of the mental case label and so achieve a functional life. I imagined scenario #2 as what would have ensued had the doctor's impression of her as an escapee confirmed her fears that she was a hopeless case. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The human brain is very delicate and can become unbalanced at any time, we keep the lid on our emotions by staying in control of ourselves and if this goes then we become a danger to society. Laws are in place to protect these people from themselves and others. Often we can all be rehabilitated and it is sad that we all have to confirm in society, but without it there would be chaos on the streets. Some people become institutionalised and cannot function outside that regime without flipping their lid. It sometimes boils down to how much support we have at home and having some direction in life. I dare say some quite sane people can be innocently caught up in the system too. A poignant write Elizabeth, I hope both your friends do something good with their lives, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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The human brain is very delicate and can become unbalanced at any time, we keep the lid on our emotions by staying in control of ourselves and if this goes then we become a danger to society. Laws are in place to protect these people from themselves and others. Often we can all be rehabilitated and it is sad that we all have to confirm in society, but without it there would be chaos on the streets. Some people become institutionalised and cannot function outside that regime without flipping their lid. It sometimes boils down to how much support we have at home and having some direction in life. I dare say some quite sane people can be innocently caught up in the system too. A poignant write Elizabeth, I hope both your friends do something good with their lives, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Dolly. The doctor with the umbrella scenario #1, where he assumed the patient was a visitor, really happened--it was the pivotal moment for her to break free of the mental case label and so achieve a functional life. I imagined scenario #2 as what would have ensued had the doctor's impression of her as an escapee confirmed her fears that she was a hopeless case. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LaRosa
Elizabeth, your scenario re what it is like, what happens in an emotionally charged institutionalized mentallity (drs and society, more than patient wise) is so perfectly presented.
Patient A, Patient B. Why do they make or not make it out?
I relate because of two family members who have lived this hell. It is a crime happening to them daily on the emotional/mental side, another crime what the 'institutions' and societal discomfort does to them on the other side.
I saw what you were doing, exposing 'what if' based on how much information is presented and you did it very well.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Elizabeth, your scenario re what it is like, what happens in an emotionally charged institutionalized mentallity (drs and society, more than patient wise) is so perfectly presented.
Patient A, Patient B. Why do they make or not make it out?
I relate because of two family members who have lived this hell. It is a crime happening to them daily on the emotional/mental side, another crime what the 'institutions' and societal discomfort does to them on the other side.
I saw what you were doing, exposing 'what if' based on how much information is presented and you did it very well.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. The doctor with the umbrella scenario #1, where he assumed the patient was a visitor, really happened--it was the pivotal moment for her to break free of the mental case label and so achieve a functional life. I imagined scenario #2 as what would have ensued had the doctor's impression of her as an escapee confirmed her fears that she was a hopeless case. Cheers. LIZ
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thanks for clarifying the two scenes, Elizabeth. obviously I missed the connection after all. Still, it's best the way you intended!
Comment from BethShelby
This is cleverly written with a cool sense of humor as you describe the women in first person. I would imagine that a doctor would have the final say as to who might be released and who must stay. I like the way you've shown what may have happened as alternate realities.
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This is cleverly written with a cool sense of humor as you describe the women in first person. I would imagine that a doctor would have the final say as to who might be released and who must stay. I like the way you've shown what may have happened as alternate realities.
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Beth. The doctor with the umbrella scenario #1, where he assumed the patient was a visitor, really happened--it was the pivotal moment for her to break free of the mental case label and so achieve a functional life. I imagined scenario #2 as what would have ensued had the doctor's impression of her as an escapee confirmed her fears that she was a hopeless case. Cheers. LIZ
