Joseph's Star
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Comment from Jen Vasquez
Absolutely love this writing short sweet simple clear to the point emotional sad you feel for the for the child for sure I admire the little boy being able to be confident and proud of his dad my favorite line of all
" His badge has a
star.
It is mine.
Now."
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
Absolutely love this writing short sweet simple clear to the point emotional sad you feel for the for the child for sure I admire the little boy being able to be confident and proud of his dad my favorite line of all
" His badge has a
star.
It is mine.
Now."
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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Thanks so much, Jen, and welcome to Fan Story. You picked a good time to join - with the quarantine, it's a fun way to spend time.
I'm glad you liked this piece and I appreciate your comments.
pome lover
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You are more than welcome people
keep them coming
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Great entry for the Joseph's Star contest. Good syllable count and beautiful presentation. I like this form. Good job. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
Hello my friend
Great entry for the Joseph's Star contest. Good syllable count and beautiful presentation. I like this form. Good job. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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thanks. I appreciate your comments.
pome lover
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Joseph's Star writing prompt.
This lovely verse describes the picture very well.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
I think this is a good entry for the Joseph's Star writing prompt.
This lovely verse describes the picture very well.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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thank you, Sharon, for your kind words.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from RShipp
You have no rhyme in your poem and the syllable count seems accurate.
Each line makes a complete statement.
Your picture was a good choice. Wow, my heart aches for the son.
Best of luck in the Joseph's Star writing contest.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
You have no rhyme in your poem and the syllable count seems accurate.
Each line makes a complete statement.
Your picture was a good choice. Wow, my heart aches for the son.
Best of luck in the Joseph's Star writing contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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thank you very much.
pome lover
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a cute poem for Joseph's Star entry. The little boy looks so cute decked out in his cowboy outfit with a sheriff's star. The little boy looks like the little boy who played in some of the early Disney movies that were on television when we were kids. It was a circus movie!
Good luck with the contest!
Stay safe!
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
This is a cute poem for Joseph's Star entry. The little boy looks so cute decked out in his cowboy outfit with a sheriff's star. The little boy looks like the little boy who played in some of the early Disney movies that were on television when we were kids. It was a circus movie!
Good luck with the contest!
Stay safe!
Patty
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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thank you, Patty.
You stay safe, too.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment from rspoet
This is certainly a sad story/poem for the Joseph's star contest,
but I like the way you work the marshal's star in there.
The syllables are exact. It would look better centered, but that's up to you.
Excellent picture to match.
Well done
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
This is certainly a sad story/poem for the Joseph's star contest,
but I like the way you work the marshal's star in there.
The syllables are exact. It would look better centered, but that's up to you.
Excellent picture to match.
Well done
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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thank you. will take you up on your suggestion.
Comment from MARIANNE GI
I am really sorry for your father... I would so much love to read the same story in a more poetic form... With the exact words... Maybe something that describes him. Very nice work!
Marianne
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
I am really sorry for your father... I would so much love to read the same story in a more poetic form... With the exact words... Maybe something that describes him. Very nice work!
Marianne
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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this is strictly fiction - for the contest.
thanks for reading.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Joseph's Star, formatted to the same framing, tells the story of Joe Junior and his probable commitment to pursue justice as his fallen daddy did. Book 'em Dano
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
This poem, Joseph's Star, formatted to the same framing, tells the story of Joe Junior and his probable commitment to pursue justice as his fallen daddy did. Book 'em Dano
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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the boy is proud to have the badge, but would rather have his dad back. thanks for reading.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Luckily, now you have the badge, the star; per heredity, you are the winner of the badge as heir in absence of your dad; from father to son; well said.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
Luckily, now you have the badge, the star; per heredity, you are the winner of the badge as heir in absence of your dad; from father to son; well said.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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the boy is proud to have his father's badge, but he would rather have his dad back. thanks for reading.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Nice twist on the usual poignancy given dad's dead. I can easily believe these words coming from a boy who, probably years after the loss, gives just the facts, ma'am. Good for you, breaking the box. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
Nice twist on the usual poignancy given dad's dead. I can easily believe these words coming from a boy who, probably years after the loss, gives just the facts, ma'am. Good for you, breaking the box. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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thanks so much.
yep, he looks like a boy of few words.