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Comment from BethShelby
Nicely written. I sounds as though Logan could be gone at any time. Since I didn't get in on the beginning of this, I wonder if there was a motive for Logan's sister death. Since he is being threatened as well, it sounds as though it is a family thing.
On his was to the shower his way to the shower.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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Nicely written. I sounds as though Logan could be gone at any time. Since I didn't get in on the beginning of this, I wonder if there was a motive for Logan's sister death. Since he is being threatened as well, it sounds as though it is a family thing.
On his was to the shower his way to the shower.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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I have made the correction. Thank you for the kind review. Logan is threatened because he's helping McKenzie.
Comment from judiverse
I'll be curious to see if some kind of threat happens when they go to the hospital and the gym. Someone seems to be aware of Mac's and Logan's whereabouts, and even though they're supposed to have police protection trouble follows them. I'm beginning to think it has to be someone close to Mac who's behind this. We'll see what comes of the threatening note Logan received. Will the police be able to uncover any clues from it? Very suspenseful. I hope things are going well with the home schooling. It sounds like your principal has some unrealistic expectations. judi
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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I'll be curious to see if some kind of threat happens when they go to the hospital and the gym. Someone seems to be aware of Mac's and Logan's whereabouts, and even though they're supposed to have police protection trouble follows them. I'm beginning to think it has to be someone close to Mac who's behind this. We'll see what comes of the threatening note Logan received. Will the police be able to uncover any clues from it? Very suspenseful. I hope things are going well with the home schooling. It sounds like your principal has some unrealistic expectations. judi
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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I think she does too. I have the rest of this year and next and then I'm retiring. I have already told her that. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I'm really intrigued about who murdered Megan and why the attacks on Mac and those around her. Good for you! You deserve retirement. judi
Comment from royowen
Logan takes his runs every morning, but he can do that in the gym, either on the bike or treadmill, or both. And so can McKenzie. A marvellous episode, Barbara, the story progressing, even though it's only been seven days, it seems like more. Well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : Parks has made a threat again(st) him. 2: since Vince won't (be) available. 3: We'll need a few more special noght(s)
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Logan takes his runs every morning, but he can do that in the gym, either on the bike or treadmill, or both. And so can McKenzie. A marvellous episode, Barbara, the story progressing, even though it's only been seven days, it seems like more. Well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : Parks has made a threat again(st) him. 2: since Vince won't (be) available. 3: We'll need a few more special noght(s)
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the catches. I've made the corrections. I really do appreciate your help.
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Most welcome Barbara,
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I do not like to miss reading your work is full of craft for writing, slow but steady plot development, committed, contributory and realistic dialogues, real like characterization, and pleasant taletelling; curious ending, ever.
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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I do not like to miss reading your work is full of craft for writing, slow but steady plot development, committed, contributory and realistic dialogues, real like characterization, and pleasant taletelling; curious ending, ever.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is another fine chapter, and I enjoyed it. McKenzie is still keeping her distance but she seems to be thawing by the minute. I only found one thing:
Logan retrieved the paper and handed it Bill. = ... and handed it to Bill.
I love the story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Hi Barbara, this is another fine chapter, and I enjoyed it. McKenzie is still keeping her distance but she seems to be thawing by the minute. I only found one thing:
Logan retrieved the paper and handed it Bill. = ... and handed it to Bill.
I love the story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the catches. I really appreciate the help.
