Spring Rain
A Lyrical poem...17 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes!! Come on Spring!! ;) What a joyful ballad offering just to remind us that this 'warming' trend is here to stay... and to sing of its promises!! ;) Thanx for sharing your vision... it was in the seventies today!! Hooray! ;)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Yes!! Come on Spring!! ;) What a joyful ballad offering just to remind us that this 'warming' trend is here to stay... and to sing of its promises!! ;) Thanx for sharing your vision... it was in the seventies today!! Hooray! ;)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Woo hoo! we got to 57, not bad for us but we also have the spring thunderstorms rolling through! Thank you for letting this lift your spirits today! xoxo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written lyrical poem about the first rain of Spring that brings freshness in thehe air and new life is found everywhere in the plants and animal world.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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A very well-written lyrical poem about the first rain of Spring that brings freshness in thehe air and new life is found everywhere in the plants and animal world.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you Sandra! We have a spring rain today but the birds were singing in full chorus just before! Such a peace amid such worldly chaos. xoxo
Comment from judiverse
It is so welcoming to hear the birds in the morning. They are a sure sign that spring is here. We also see buds on the trees that looked so bare during winter. I can't wait to see the spring flowers. I've seen some daffodils where I live. Nice imagery of the blades of grass weaving a carpet. Excellent work with your rhyme. judi
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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It is so welcoming to hear the birds in the morning. They are a sure sign that spring is here. We also see buds on the trees that looked so bare during winter. I can't wait to see the spring flowers. I've seen some daffodils where I live. Nice imagery of the blades of grass weaving a carpet. Excellent work with your rhyme. judi
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank you my friend. So much going on that Spring coming is a good distraction! xoxo
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You're very welcome. Maybe it will mean a slowdown in the spread of coronavirus. judi
Comment from Tanvi Pauddar
I really liked reading your poem. In fact, I enjoy reading all of your poems. I especially , liked the line, "returning is the life hidden." It sounds really professional. Once again, I really enjoyed reading your poem! xoxo
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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I really liked reading your poem. In fact, I enjoy reading all of your poems. I especially , liked the line, "returning is the life hidden." It sounds really professional. Once again, I really enjoyed reading your poem! xoxo
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank you! With all the sad going on now, I thought it good to distract with thoughts of Spring! Appreciate your precious feedback! xoxo
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Yeah, I guess many people may not even pay attention to the weather. xoxo
Comment from Drew Delaney
The ba sound is very prominent in this lovely rhyming poem. Love it!
One night I was trying to write a poem and I really struggled because as I wrote it, a tune formed and played in my head. The first stanza seemed to pick out the tune, but I had never experienced that before. I have written songs before years ago, but this was different. The tune would not let me alone. Try to write something when that tune insists on its own way. Has this ever happened to you?
Drew xx
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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The ba sound is very prominent in this lovely rhyming poem. Love it!
One night I was trying to write a poem and I really struggled because as I wrote it, a tune formed and played in my head. The first stanza seemed to pick out the tune, but I had never experienced that before. I have written songs before years ago, but this was different. The tune would not let me alone. Try to write something when that tune insists on its own way. Has this ever happened to you?
Drew xx
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank you and that?s funny because sometimes it does happen and I mean I can here all instruments playing their part, but no words flow, only the music. Hmmm... even when I write lyrically, no tune comes with it. It?s like either or, and I can?t write music so that is lost inside as tomorrow I?ll never remember exactly how it went! Ugh! xoxo
Comment from l.raven
Hi Diana, so good to see you sweet girl...as much as Winter is my favorite season...it will be good to see Spring again...I love the way you describe the beauty if it...lights up the day...I love your poem...very nicely written...and the picture...stunning...love you...Linda xxoo
I hope all is well with you...and you are staying safe...God Bless...xxoo
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Hi Diana, so good to see you sweet girl...as much as Winter is my favorite season...it will be good to see Spring again...I love the way you describe the beauty if it...lights up the day...I love your poem...very nicely written...and the picture...stunning...love you...Linda xxoo
I hope all is well with you...and you are staying safe...God Bless...xxoo
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for stopping to check this out! Thought we needed a distraction from these sad times with a little bit of hope! Hope you are doing good and staying safe too! xoxo
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Hi Diana, I am doing well...just staying low...you stay safe as well...
your soooooo welcome...always...love xxoo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your spring poem gives us cheery thoughts when we read it. Like your poem's image. Lily of the valley is a favorite spring flower around here; also the blue bell, violets.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Your spring poem gives us cheery thoughts when we read it. Like your poem's image. Lily of the valley is a favorite spring flower around here; also the blue bell, violets.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thanks so much! Lily of the Valley and Daffodils are the first real sign that winter is gone! Happy spring in spite of the current situation. xoxo
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you, too
Comment from June Sargent
If we take the time to really look, we can see that life is going on as usual, despite the distressing conditions surrounding us. Nothing is stopping the birds, the bees, the flowers and trees from taking care of business. We should embrace life as well...the little things.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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If we take the time to really look, we can see that life is going on as usual, despite the distressing conditions surrounding us. Nothing is stopping the birds, the bees, the flowers and trees from taking care of business. We should embrace life as well...the little things.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Exactly, nature will prevail and seasons can?t be stopped! God renews the soul in spring! So happy you could enjoy! Be safe! xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet rhyming poem about the forthcoming spring.
On stanza two you have used a feminine ending "barren" on line 2 this needs to be matched up with line 4.
These are just suggestions to show you feminine endings Diana:
"from branches once (so) barren;"
"green carpets now will happen"
Also stanza three, to keep the meter here, this line needs to read:
"returning is life hidden" which is one syllable short, but that is okay because your previous feminine ending line has the extra syllable, so your poem will flow perfectly.
This line then needs to match up for the sake of meter:
"The iris soon shows purple"
I hope you understand me Diana, I want to help. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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A sweet rhyming poem about the forthcoming spring.
On stanza two you have used a feminine ending "barren" on line 2 this needs to be matched up with line 4.
These are just suggestions to show you feminine endings Diana:
"from branches once (so) barren;"
"green carpets now will happen"
Also stanza three, to keep the meter here, this line needs to read:
"returning is life hidden" which is one syllable short, but that is okay because your previous feminine ending line has the extra syllable, so your poem will flow perfectly.
This line then needs to match up for the sake of meter:
"The iris soon shows purple"
I hope you understand me Diana, I want to help. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
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Thank you Dolly! I have not had a chance to look this over yet, but I will keep your suggests at hand to work on it soon. I sincerely appreciate your help. xoxo
Comment from A. Willow Bends
So upbeat in view of what is surrounding our world right now. Spring brings hope and the world is hungry for it. This was a beautiful thing to read this very early morning and it is raining gently here.
Lovely!
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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So upbeat in view of what is surrounding our world right now. Spring brings hope and the world is hungry for it. This was a beautiful thing to read this very early morning and it is raining gently here.
Lovely!
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Amen Wendy! We need to keep our mind on the positive! Appreciate you enjoyed this and were uplifted by it! xoxo
