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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, that was an eerie little story. I did like it, though. There's good imagery of the forest, the boys, and the gold coins. I was engaged from start to finish. You did a great job with the prompt. Right off the bat you grabbed readers' attention and held it til the last. The one thing I would change is referring to the boys as tots. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Well, that was an eerie little story. I did like it, though. There's good imagery of the forest, the boys, and the gold coins. I was engaged from start to finish. You did a great job with the prompt. Right off the bat you grabbed readers' attention and held it til the last. The one thing I would change is referring to the boys as tots. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Whether in the plot the writer adds anything fanciful or imaginary, ultimately truth reveals at last, it is so sweet and the charm or hub of the taletelling, I enjoyed the twisted plot but the theme is going at par - crime never pays; dialogues and characters go realistic and real; curious ending; all well said and done.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Whether in the plot the writer adds anything fanciful or imaginary, ultimately truth reveals at last, it is so sweet and the charm or hub of the taletelling, I enjoyed the twisted plot but the theme is going at par - crime never pays; dialogues and characters go realistic and real; curious ending; all well said and done.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, this is a great entry, so this is straight out of a nightmare, which I suppose it is. You have a great imagination and I loved the story. Thank you so much for participating and the best of luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Hi Brett, this is a great entry, so this is straight out of a nightmare, which I suppose it is. You have a great imagination and I loved the story. Thank you so much for participating and the best of luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from BethShelby
Very creative fantasy fiction. You used a lot of the things here that managed to confuse me. From two boys running from some creatures in the woods to the fact that leprechaun named Mordecai had been with them and then that it was a all a scary dream that Tony was having. Then we learn they had found the pot of gold and each boy had stolen a coin. When Tony wakes up he places his coin next to a toy also name Mordecai and which point the toy come to life and kills him and goes after the other boy.
You have a great imagination.
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Very creative fantasy fiction. You used a lot of the things here that managed to confuse me. From two boys running from some creatures in the woods to the fact that leprechaun named Mordecai had been with them and then that it was a all a scary dream that Tony was having. Then we learn they had found the pot of gold and each boy had stolen a coin. When Tony wakes up he places his coin next to a toy also name Mordecai and which point the toy come to life and kills him and goes after the other boy.
You have a great imagination.
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Sankey
Wow! What a punch line and you kept us hanging right till the end. Well done and I like the artwork as well. Did you know "St Patrick" was a cook up by Rome? Patrick of Ireland was a believer who did much good. Look forward to meeting him on Glory.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Wow! What a punch line and you kept us hanging right till the end. Well done and I like the artwork as well. Did you know "St Patrick" was a cook up by Rome? Patrick of Ireland was a believer who did much good. Look forward to meeting him on Glory.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
That is a vicious little leprecaun. If I understood correctly the leprecaun is a marionette that came to life. You did an excellent job and I found no mistakes. Keep that nasty bug away from you. Shirley
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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That is a vicious little leprecaun. If I understood correctly the leprecaun is a marionette that came to life. You did an excellent job and I found no mistakes. Keep that nasty bug away from you. Shirley
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Appreciate your insights and the review. Perhaps Tony and Jeremy learned a valuable lesson.
