A Love
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Comment from Puzzle
I glad you explained about the fruit in the notes hahaha. I was thinking something way different!!! But nice poem. I like the flow and I like the picture you chose to go along with it.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I glad you explained about the fruit in the notes hahaha. I was thinking something way different!!! But nice poem. I like the flow and I like the picture you chose to go along with it.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Ha ha. Thank you.
Comment from Therese Caron
I am not sure what this poem means, I think I can find several meanings in it. I think the overripe fruit is a metaphor for something, but I can't seem to decide what.In any case this poem was an enjoyable read with a beautiful image - it just makes you want to go for a nice walk.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I am not sure what this poem means, I think I can find several meanings in it. I think the overripe fruit is a metaphor for something, but I can't seem to decide what.In any case this poem was an enjoyable read with a beautiful image - it just makes you want to go for a nice walk.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Metaphor for older people. Still, their over-ripeness can still shine in the presence of love.
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Beautiful!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and presentation, Doug.
-I think there is a lot
of symbolism in this.
-You use the crack as
the central idea to show
the stumbling blocks in life,
and eventually those things
get better and "shine again."
-The shine could come from
several sources, one being the sun.
-I could be way off, but
that is what I get out of it.
-Well done for giving us
something to ponder.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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-Very nice image
and presentation, Doug.
-I think there is a lot
of symbolism in this.
-You use the crack as
the central idea to show
the stumbling blocks in life,
and eventually those things
get better and "shine again."
-The shine could come from
several sources, one being the sun.
-I could be way off, but
that is what I get out of it.
-Well done for giving us
something to ponder.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Great implied metaphor that a love is like the sun, can't be controlled, seems to decide when it shines or doesn't (depending on clouds). I like the idea of a crack in fruit and the cracks in a slatted walk being compared visually. Quite a lot of long 'i' assonance. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Great implied metaphor that a love is like the sun, can't be controlled, seems to decide when it shines or doesn't (depending on clouds). I like the idea of a crack in fruit and the cracks in a slatted walk being compared visually. Quite a lot of long 'i' assonance. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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And thank you for reading.
Comment from rjuselius
In Finland we have a saying that states that the sun shines also on a pile of sticks.
It means everyone have good times sometime.
Thank you for sharing dear doug!
Blessings and a humongous hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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In Finland we have a saying that states that the sun shines also on a pile of sticks.
It means everyone have good times sometime.
Thank you for sharing dear doug!
Blessings and a humongous hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank God for the Sun's indifference, eh? Lol
Comment from Bichon
This was quite an interesting read, to say the least. I was confused by the meaning, but I presume fruit has a strong presence in the poem? With the overripe text. An enjoyable read nonetheless!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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This was quite an interesting read, to say the least. I was confused by the meaning, but I presume fruit has a strong presence in the poem? With the overripe text. An enjoyable read nonetheless!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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I'm sorry it did not work for you. But, you are still quite young. The over-ripe fruit is just allegorical for us old people, who still find love. Doug
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about loving over ripe fruit that comes our way each season when the sun shines and the fruit falling from the tree right onto us.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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A very well-written poem about loving over ripe fruit that comes our way each season when the sun shines and the fruit falling from the tree right onto us.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You poetry often puzzles me and this poem, although extremely well written, has me completely baffled. I am sure it has a meaning but to be honest, I am totally confused.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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You poetry often puzzles me and this poem, although extremely well written, has me completely baffled. I am sure it has a meaning but to be honest, I am totally confused.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Ripe fruit, ripe old people, but love still possible. Thanks.
Comment from estory
It comes across to me as a lighthearted moment, a glimpse of light through the crack, a piece of hope. Nice fragmented format and good sense of the dramatic in the line breaks. Light and airy feel to it. estory
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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It comes across to me as a lighthearted moment, a glimpse of light through the crack, a piece of hope. Nice fragmented format and good sense of the dramatic in the line breaks. Light and airy feel to it. estory
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Mr. E-story. Please read my latest-"Water Colours."
Comment from dragonpoet
Doug,
Yes, it is always good to come out of the shadow into the sun. I like the geen background to show health and life. This being in the sun will be harder now. Stay healthy.
Keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Doug,
Yes, it is always good to come out of the shadow into the sun. I like the geen background to show health and life. This being in the sun will be harder now. Stay healthy.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Joan.
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You're welcome, Doug.
Joan
