Different
A coming of age story27 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
Great story, and I think will resonate with a lot of people right now. It is well written, clear, and you make it easy for the reader to feel her feelings. One tiny thing - third line from the bottom - I think there should be a comma after Keys in hand. Just my picky little thing about punctuation. Wonderful story, and I would love to know where she ends up!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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Great story, and I think will resonate with a lot of people right now. It is well written, clear, and you make it easy for the reader to feel her feelings. One tiny thing - third line from the bottom - I think there should be a comma after Keys in hand. Just my picky little thing about punctuation. Wonderful story, and I would love to know where she ends up!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much! I've got a feeling that she's going to do great things!
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your flash fiction. I found it a bit confusing though. At first I thought she was in a cabin on a ship but then realised she wasn't. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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I enjoyed reading your flash fiction. I found it a bit confusing though. At first I thought she was in a cabin on a ship but then realised she wasn't. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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Thank you! When life gets turbulent it can feel like you're on a ship! LOL 🙂
Comment from tfawcus
There is a breaking point for all of us. Being closed in and isolated is hard for some people, especially extroverts. I'm also reminded by your story of the time when teenagers eventually feel the need to break away from their home environment and go out, in the words of fairytales, 'to seek their fortunes'.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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There is a breaking point for all of us. Being closed in and isolated is hard for some people, especially extroverts. I'm also reminded by your story of the time when teenagers eventually feel the need to break away from their home environment and go out, in the words of fairytales, 'to seek their fortunes'.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Gideon300
Spring always makes me want to go outside. But really I am just enjoying my back yard now. Well I hope she gets her wish one day.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Spring always makes me want to go outside. But really I am just enjoying my back yard now. Well I hope she gets her wish one day.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love your last line it changes the perspective on the entire story - She didn't know what lay ahead but, whatever it was; it'd be DIFFERENT!
A new chance to live and let live. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and stay safe my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I love your last line it changes the perspective on the entire story - She didn't know what lay ahead but, whatever it was; it'd be DIFFERENT!
A new chance to live and let live. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and stay safe my friend.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
We all need someone to come and save us. Sometimes, (after reading your story) I guess we have to chance it on our own. Best wishes and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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We all need someone to come and save us. Sometimes, (after reading your story) I guess we have to chance it on our own. Best wishes and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
This is certainly a hard time to go out and find ourselves right now. Meeting new people is pretty much out of the question and it's just hard. Great job with this.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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This is certainly a hard time to go out and find ourselves right now. Meeting new people is pretty much out of the question and it's just hard. Great job with this.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from lance michaels
Very nice story. I do hope the young lady finds whatever it is she is looking for. Sometimes different is what we all could use a little more of. I loved it. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Very nice story. I do hope the young lady finds whatever it is she is looking for. Sometimes different is what we all could use a little more of. I loved it. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thank You!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brenda Henderson,
Nice story as Flash Fiction having impressive phraseology, smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the MARVELOUS end.
Best of Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Hello Brenda Henderson,
Nice story as Flash Fiction having impressive phraseology, smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the MARVELOUS end.
Best of Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank You!
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Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This fiction has all the hallmarks of young people not concerned with consequences. She is supercharged with the need for adventure and freedom, never thinking that if she should return home, she may bring death to those she loves.
This is a very good story. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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This fiction has all the hallmarks of young people not concerned with consequences. She is supercharged with the need for adventure and freedom, never thinking that if she should return home, she may bring death to those she loves.
This is a very good story. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank You!
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You're welcome.
