The Cafeteria Caper
An honest boy25 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I have a son just like Jimmy. I quickly learned to ask the right question in order to get the truthful answer--just like the mother did with Jimmy. Kids hate being "falsely accused!" ha ha
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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I have a son just like Jimmy. I quickly learned to ask the right question in order to get the truthful answer--just like the mother did with Jimmy. Kids hate being "falsely accused!" ha ha
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your excellent review.
I appreciate your fun comments
Blessings
Janet
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from papa55mike
Well, he finally admitted the truth. That's what counts. What a wonderfully written little story.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Well, he finally admitted the truth. That's what counts. What a wonderfully written little story.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your excellent review.
I appreciate your kind comments
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Sweet Jimmy!! Gotta love an honest mischievous young man! ;) :) Great Flash for the contest, Janet -- best of luck, my lady! ;) Yvette
young man". --> young man." [and add a line space after this line... :)]
Jimmy adamantly protested. --> Jimmy protested adamantly.
You were seen throwing them James and you will be punished. --> This line needs quotes... is it Mrs. Walden speaking?
beans". --> beans."
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Sweet Jimmy!! Gotta love an honest mischievous young man! ;) :) Great Flash for the contest, Janet -- best of luck, my lady! ;) Yvette
young man". --> young man." [and add a line space after this line... :)]
Jimmy adamantly protested. --> Jimmy protested adamantly.
You were seen throwing them James and you will be punished. --> This line needs quotes... is it Mrs. Walden speaking?
beans". --> beans."
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Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you Yvette for your excellent review and for all the helpful suggestions. I immediately made the changes.
Blessings and stay well.
Janet
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hah, Janet!
Definitely a smile-turner! And your sweet story reminded me of my son and his childhood adventures...
A few edits needed:
"I'll be right there,(") Marion responded as she dashed out the door and drove to the school.
"Yes, he did, and you had better fess up (,) young man".
" Your son was caught throwing carrots in the cafeteria."
The above needs to be formatted as one speaker.
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(")You were seen throwing them James and you will be punished.(")
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Hah, Janet!
Definitely a smile-turner! And your sweet story reminded me of my son and his childhood adventures...
A few edits needed:
"I'll be right there,(") Marion responded as she dashed out the door and drove to the school.
"Yes, he did, and you had better fess up (,) young man".
" Your son was caught throwing carrots in the cafeteria."
The above needs to be formatted as one speaker.
~~~~~
(")You were seen throwing them James and you will be punished.(")
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you Diane for your excellent review and the helpful edits.
I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings and stay well.
Janet
Comment from Sally Law
Color blind, poor dear. Either that or the specifics were left out. Men do that, as I have seven close to me.
A fun entry for the flash, and sending my best along and well wishes for the contest.
Sal xoxo
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Color blind, poor dear. Either that or the specifics were left out. Men do that, as I have seven close to me.
A fun entry for the flash, and sending my best along and well wishes for the contest.
Sal xoxo
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Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Thank you Sally for your excellent review.
I appreciate you kind comments
Blessings
Janet
