A Day of Exploring
A Monometric poem for Potlatch Poetry23 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely outdoors walk through this woodland path that you take us on Yvonne. I enjoyed -
the quail
ran by with mother at their tail.It was easy to visualize your descriptions.
Nicely done, cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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A lovely outdoors walk through this woodland path that you take us on Yvonne. I enjoyed -
the quail
ran by with mother at their tail.It was easy to visualize your descriptions.
Nicely done, cheers,
valda
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Thank you. I'm glad you could see it as I did.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Nope - now you should have lots of time to enjoy the forest, yeah? :) :) I really like this form, Yvonne, and just love the beautiful meter you seem so adept at... the poem just slides off the tongue with our wishes to follow you along the way!! :) Can I pack a bag and join you?! ;) LOL! Yvette
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Nope - now you should have lots of time to enjoy the forest, yeah? :) :) I really like this form, Yvonne, and just love the beautiful meter you seem so adept at... the poem just slides off the tongue with our wishes to follow you along the way!! :) Can I pack a bag and join you?! ;) LOL! Yvette
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2020
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Of course! Come and go with me. I'd love that. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Yvonne. I like this form, the monometric, very much. I like the independent monorhymes and growing stanza lines. Your theme is done well with smooth composition and illustrated well. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Hi Yvonne. I like this form, the monometric, very much. I like the independent monorhymes and growing stanza lines. Your theme is done well with smooth composition and illustrated well. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you. I appreciate your lovely comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Monometric poem about exploring outside at the beginning of Spring when everything seems fresh and new as well as colorful with all the blooms.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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A very well-written Monometric poem about exploring outside at the beginning of Spring when everything seems fresh and new as well as colorful with all the blooms.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Very informative author notes. Thank you. I am one who is highly appreciative of all I learn there. The poem is distracting. WAIT WAIT WAIT
It took my mind from the CoVid. THANK YOU. I am presently laid off and self isolating, so at some point in the near future (I hope!) I can once again NOT socially distance from my grandchildren. I wrote one poem relevant to Co-Vid and now I am letting it go. Any further entries will attempt to think outside that particular box, just like your poem did so eloquently. I loved it. Thank you for the wonderful distraction. AM also trying to use time to get back into my 2 chosen clubs as I have been off the site so very long. No time and more so, NO desire. I am back.
You have cheered me this morning. Bless You.
On a different note, any word on Gary Redgrave? I hope that is his real name. He sent me a signed copy of his book. Wife is Cyndi and for the life of me, I cannot recall his pen name this early morning.
Hugs, from a distance.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Very informative author notes. Thank you. I am one who is highly appreciative of all I learn there. The poem is distracting. WAIT WAIT WAIT
It took my mind from the CoVid. THANK YOU. I am presently laid off and self isolating, so at some point in the near future (I hope!) I can once again NOT socially distance from my grandchildren. I wrote one poem relevant to Co-Vid and now I am letting it go. Any further entries will attempt to think outside that particular box, just like your poem did so eloquently. I loved it. Thank you for the wonderful distraction. AM also trying to use time to get back into my 2 chosen clubs as I have been off the site so very long. No time and more so, NO desire. I am back.
You have cheered me this morning. Bless You.
On a different note, any word on Gary Redgrave? I hope that is his real name. He sent me a signed copy of his book. Wife is Cyndi and for the life of me, I cannot recall his pen name this early morning.
Hugs, from a distance.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you for a most wonderful review. I'm so happy you liked it that much. Sorry, I don't know who Gary Redgrave is.
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the words to your poem, they're a perfect match to your poem
As I'm reading your sweet words I felt I was on the trail with you and, enjoys all the wonderful sights you seen.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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I love the words to your poem, they're a perfect match to your poem
As I'm reading your sweet words I felt I was on the trail with you and, enjoys all the wonderful sights you seen.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you. I'm so glad you were able to 'join me' on my walk.
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Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from rhymelord
Skilfull and accurate rendering of the form beautifully progressive as it leads the reader deeper into nature. I have one point of preference and that is to end the poem on a "continuing" note rather than a cessation. Maybe:
"And now I find such joy to stay
to watch......"
or somesuch
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Skilfull and accurate rendering of the form beautifully progressive as it leads the reader deeper into nature. I have one point of preference and that is to end the poem on a "continuing" note rather than a cessation. Maybe:
"And now I find such joy to stay
to watch......"
or somesuch
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you. I will consider your suggestion.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You write a lot of poems that remind me of my childhood on the farm. I feel sorry for anyone who hasn't experienced live on a farm. They are missing a great education and much of what life is about.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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You write a lot of poems that remind me of my childhood on the farm. I feel sorry for anyone who hasn't experienced live on a farm. They are missing a great education and much of what life is about.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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While I didn't grow up on a farm, I did have the advantage of a grandmother and great-aunts who told me what the old days were like. I feel like I was there with them.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, I hope that you can still go on walks in the woods even with all this isolation stuff. Loved your monometric walk and how you bring all the wonderful natural beauty that you observed.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Oh, I hope that you can still go on walks in the woods even with all this isolation stuff. Loved your monometric walk and how you bring all the wonderful natural beauty that you observed.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you. That makes me feel so good.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne. I am going to take your word for the style conformance because this is not part of my repertoire. I like the rhyme scheme and the meter you used here.
Robert
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Hello Yvonne. I am going to take your word for the style conformance because this is not part of my repertoire. I like the rhyme scheme and the meter you used here.
Robert
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you. I posted instructions in my author notes.
