Shredded Dreams
Haiku with a twist (get my gist?)18 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
You fit volumes in these three lines. A very expressive poem. Loved your creative imagery and visuals, and your fantastic photo and presentation.
I wish you luck in the booths, this should make a special entry.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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You fit volumes in these three lines. A very expressive poem. Loved your creative imagery and visuals, and your fantastic photo and presentation.
I wish you luck in the booths, this should make a special entry.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I'm pleased you liked this--a challenge for me! Cheers. LIZ (This is a repromotion--contest long over--probably was disqualified--I needed the stretching exercise.)
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Very clever! Lovely twist. Will have to listen to Esther Hicks after two in a row of this topic. Lovely art. Art is hopeful :). Beautifully presented. Don't think haiku is allowed to rhyme though...have to ask Gypsy...
Well done!
xxLucy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Very clever! Lovely twist. Will have to listen to Esther Hicks after two in a row of this topic. Lovely art. Art is hopeful :). Beautifully presented. Don't think haiku is allowed to rhyme though...have to ask Gypsy...
Well done!
xxLucy
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I'm pleased you liked this--a challenge for me! Cheers. LIZ (This is a repromotion--contest long over--probably was disqualified--I needed the stretching exercise.)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image and
nice presentation, Liz.
-The syllable count is good,
along with end rhyme
and internal rhyme.
-"Hope is all that matters."
-A good entry; good luck!
-You did a great job with this poem.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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-Great image and
nice presentation, Liz.
-The syllable count is good,
along with end rhyme
and internal rhyme.
-"Hope is all that matters."
-A good entry; good luck!
-You did a great job with this poem.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your encouragement Pam! I hadn't set out to rhyme, but when I ended up with the middle rhyme, I traded off the original ending Cruelly shredded dreams (using words 2 and 3 as the title) and went with Hope: all that matters in order to rhyme. Not sure if I made a wise decision: trite phrase, I'm afraid. Cheers. LIZ
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You are welcome, Liz. I don't see a problem with your poem.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 3 Line Poetry contest.
This short piece tells of hope.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 3 Line Poetry contest.
This short piece tells of hope.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Sharon. Haven't even had mention in a contest yet, but enjoy the challenge regardless. Writing real poetry is a departure from my usual bawdy limericks (currently listed is Profil-er Paying for Post-age). Also two parody songs on my profile page if you care for a chuckle (?) Cheers. LIZ BE FOREWARNED FOR CONTENT!
Comment from papa55mike
We seem to have lost a lot of hope in our country today. What a wonderfully written poem and the painting is terrific.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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We seem to have lost a lot of hope in our country today. What a wonderfully written poem and the painting is terrific.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Mike. Haven't even had mention in a contest yet, but enjoy the challenge regardless. Writing real poetry is a departure from my usual bawdy limericks (currently listed is Profil-er Paying for Post-age). Also two parody songs on my profile page if you care for a chuckle (?) Cheers. LIZ BE FOREWARNED FOR CONTENT!
Comment from Gypsymooncat
One hopes that one finds something else to do the job rather than something in tatters lol.
I guess a newspaper ripped into strips would constitute bring in tatters but it worked for gran and grandpa!
I think I got the gist of the twist, if not, I'm an idiot who just raved on and on and on and on lol
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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One hopes that one finds something else to do the job rather than something in tatters lol.
I guess a newspaper ripped into strips would constitute bring in tatters but it worked for gran and grandpa!
I think I got the gist of the twist, if not, I'm an idiot who just raved on and on and on and on lol
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you, alias Gypsy. Haven't even had mention in a contest yet, but enjoy the challenge regardless. Writing real poetry is a departure from my usual bawdy limericks (currently listed is Profil-er Paying for Post-age). Also two parody songs on my profile page if you care for a chuckle (?) Cheers. LIZ BE FOREWARNED FOR CONTENT!
Comment from Mackenzie Schmidt
Your Haiku Shredded Dreams was well written. Your Description Haiku with a twist (get my gist?) made me chuckle and demonstrated how you reversed the intent of a haiku from beauty in nature to horror in nature well done.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Your Haiku Shredded Dreams was well written. Your Description Haiku with a twist (get my gist?) made me chuckle and demonstrated how you reversed the intent of a haiku from beauty in nature to horror in nature well done.
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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You again! Thank you. That was quick. Hope you won a pump for your efforts. Hadn't realized Haikus were intended only for beauty--the artwork of a lovely Japanese garden could be taken ironically in light of my depressing theme, but I picked it simply because it happened to pop up as I aimlessly scrolled and I figured, well, Haikus are Japanese! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from kahpot
A very well written and presented 3-line poem, hope is what we all need now though we must all act to help this terrible situation, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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A very well written and presented 3-line poem, hope is what we all need now though we must all act to help this terrible situation, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your encouraging words. I rarely write poetry, other than Limericks--please, check out my profile page for my latest (only if you like bawdy humor!) I just posted a 20-word poem titled Awaiting the Knight. I believe it offers pump potential. Cheers. LIZ
