We Walk This Road as One
A Love Story Sonnet51 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful love sonnet for your friends. You met the strict rules of sonnet form beautifully with the change in thought in the third stanza and summarized with the couplet. I thought about what was meant by "omnipresent hearts" but I guess you mean that their hearts are really always present for each other. Hope Jim is recovering very well. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Wonderful love sonnet for your friends. You met the strict rules of sonnet form beautifully with the change in thought in the third stanza and summarized with the couplet. I thought about what was meant by "omnipresent hearts" but I guess you mean that their hearts are really always present for each other. Hope Jim is recovering very well. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Minglement
What a lovely entry for the Love poem contest. It's a beautiful tribute the kind of love that survives through thick and thin. I hope he recovers fully and quickly. I'm sure your poem brought comfort to them both. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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What a lovely entry for the Love poem contest. It's a beautiful tribute the kind of love that survives through thick and thin. I hope he recovers fully and quickly. I'm sure your poem brought comfort to them both. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love story sonnet about the love between a little bing couple that last for many years and through all the trials of life they have conquered and they managed to get through the last test they received.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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A very well-written love story sonnet about the love between a little bing couple that last for many years and through all the trials of life they have conquered and they managed to get through the last test they received.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gloria ....
A fine sonnet and most apt theme for the love poem contest, Janet. Your metre and rhyme as is your signature spot on as the theme and final observation take form.
just one typo in here somewhere: that we could not or would not e'er for foresee.
Many thanks for sharing and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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A fine sonnet and most apt theme for the love poem contest, Janet. Your metre and rhyme as is your signature spot on as the theme and final observation take form.
just one typo in here somewhere: that we could not or would not e'er for foresee.
Many thanks for sharing and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you Gloria for your wonderful review and for your kind correction. I had an extra word in there but have taken it out.
Thanks again and Blessings to you and yours.
Janet
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Utopia for some, true story for others -love and faith goes hand in hand with a solid and successful marriage and love story. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writing and contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Utopia for some, true story for others -love and faith goes hand in hand with a solid and successful marriage and love story. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writing and contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you Iza for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
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Thanks God😊
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is beautifully done as a sonnet. Using the first two to give us the pride in the love and the progresson, as seen through the third during the hard times and the pledge in the last
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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This is beautifully done as a sonnet. Using the first two to give us the pride in the love and the progresson, as seen through the third during the hard times and the pledge in the last
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you Barb for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Janet, this is a lovely sonnet in true sonnet form. Beautiful story in a poem written for your old friend and her husband who had a heart attack.
Beautifully worded, good abab rhyme - strong turn in the third stanza and
good final couplet. Good meter throughout. Lovely read. Good Luck in the contest. Love Dorothy xxx
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Hello Janet, this is a lovely sonnet in true sonnet form. Beautiful story in a poem written for your old friend and her husband who had a heart attack.
Beautifully worded, good abab rhyme - strong turn in the third stanza and
good final couplet. Good meter throughout. Lovely read. Good Luck in the contest. Love Dorothy xxx
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you Dorothy for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from TPAC
An endearing shout in my viewpoint of this particular read, filled with many delighting aspects to maintain the reader interests. All stated in my opinion.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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An endearing shout in my viewpoint of this particular read, filled with many delighting aspects to maintain the reader interests. All stated in my opinion.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review and for your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful offering for the Love Poem contest, Janet -- love the references of the heart mixed with nature metaphors to create a bond that can be visualized! :) Best of luck to you, my lady! ;)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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A beautiful offering for the Love Poem contest, Janet -- love the references of the heart mixed with nature metaphors to create a bond that can be visualized! :) Best of luck to you, my lady! ;)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I talked to Jim last night and he is doing great.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Ricky1024
"We Walked the Road as One"
Is a love poem contest entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky1024
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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"We Walked the Road as One"
Is a love poem contest entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky1024
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Thank you Ricky for your wonderful review and for your kind comments. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
