~ Wafting Aromas ~
Cinquain Poem (2,4,6,8,2)15 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Ah yes, they have similar effects, but for different reasons. I LOVE that smell of fresh cut grass...also reminds me of childhood. Nice. This makes me want to get a cuppa coffee!
The flow is good, with the dramatic pause of the ellipses working well!
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Ah yes, they have similar effects, but for different reasons. I LOVE that smell of fresh cut grass...also reminds me of childhood. Nice. This makes me want to get a cuppa coffee!
The flow is good, with the dramatic pause of the ellipses working well!
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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RD, thank you again for your most thoughtful review. Always appreciated. ~DDxx
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xxoo :-))
Comment from Sally Law
I do, too. But the smell of coffee is just as heavenly to me. I'm well known for my consumption. A fine cinquain poem today for the contest, dear DD.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best for the contest.
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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I do, too. But the smell of coffee is just as heavenly to me. I'm well known for my consumption. A fine cinquain poem today for the contest, dear DD.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best for the contest.
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thank you Sally. I appreciate your review and shall think of you the next time I drink my morning cup of finely brewed coffee while sniffing some freshly cut grass :-) ~DDxx
Comment from Pantygynt
This is lovely and displayed on the large screen of my laptop it is compliant but comes over as six lines on my tablet. Let us hope the judges have a large screen. Coffee like pipe smoke, and it seems, freshly mown grass is one of those aromas that eventually disappoints. The coffee never tastes anything like as good as it smells and the pipe smoke of your own pipe never matches that of someone else's and that is true even with the same brand of tobacco in both.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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This is lovely and displayed on the large screen of my laptop it is compliant but comes over as six lines on my tablet. Let us hope the judges have a large screen. Coffee like pipe smoke, and it seems, freshly mown grass is one of those aromas that eventually disappoints. The coffee never tastes anything like as good as it smells and the pipe smoke of your own pipe never matches that of someone else's and that is true even with the same brand of tobacco in both.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Pantygynt, thank you for the review and concern of fit on large or small screen. It appears that it doesn't really matter as the committee already have their favourite picks, whether viewed fully or not. But, I a very picky on my coffee consumption (only one or two a day) so it has to be a good sup! ~DD
Comment from Eve Vasa
It is a lovely smell. My other favourites are the smell of horses and bitumen. New roads, just great. Our sense of smell is very strong really, like you say in the author notes, it takes you back to your childhood.
And of course, coffee!! It has a fabulous smell and is a great pick-me-up.
I think this is a very nicely written and presented work and best of luck with your writing, Eve.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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It is a lovely smell. My other favourites are the smell of horses and bitumen. New roads, just great. Our sense of smell is very strong really, like you say in the author notes, it takes you back to your childhood.
And of course, coffee!! It has a fabulous smell and is a great pick-me-up.
I think this is a very nicely written and presented work and best of luck with your writing, Eve.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thank you Eve. I really appreciate your thoughtful review and comments on my short wafting aromas poem. Strong smells and blessings to you :-) ~DDxx
Comment from Mark Valentine
I love both smells as well ( but one of them makes me sneeze). Your photo and font, along with your words, bring the smell to life. And the addition of coffee brings it from childhood dreams to adult reality - well done and good luck in the contest .
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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I love both smells as well ( but one of them makes me sneeze). Your photo and font, along with your words, bring the smell to life. And the addition of coffee brings it from childhood dreams to adult reality - well done and good luck in the contest .
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thank you Mark. Your review is very much appreciated and well received. ~DD
