the heartbeat of my life
5-7-5 (the pulse of her heart)15 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
Yes, 5-7-5 and Haiku seem to be your forte. This is a lovely little gem of a tribute to your love. How vital, how intimate that heartbeat. Beautiful obdervation and presentation. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Yes, 5-7-5 and Haiku seem to be your forte. This is a lovely little gem of a tribute to your love. How vital, how intimate that heartbeat. Beautiful obdervation and presentation. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your pleasant review and stars. You are absolutely correct that my poetry wheelhouse does not include any type of longer verse than my typical 5-7-5 (and maybe an occasional 5-7-5-7-7).
Comment from Janet Foor
A beautiful 5/7/5 poem Mark. The red color adds another dimension to this well written piece.
The satori line gives it a nice finish.
Blessings and stay well
Janet
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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A beautiful 5/7/5 poem Mark. The red color adds another dimension to this well written piece.
The satori line gives it a nice finish.
Blessings and stay well
Janet
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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THANKS Janet!
So pleased you liked this post. For me, the ?beat? that I enjoyed the most was the ?feel? and ?sight? of my children when my wife was in her last trimester (-:
Mark
Comment from MamaBebop
Mark,
Beautiful, really, really beautiful 5-7-5. I must admit something though, before I read your notes I took the red font and the word "her" to be YOUR heartbeat~ since the title of the piece is the heartbeat of my life. She keeps your heart beating.
I see it both ways though.
Blessings,
Your fan,
Beth
Ps. Hope you're well ;)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Mark,
Beautiful, really, really beautiful 5-7-5. I must admit something though, before I read your notes I took the red font and the word "her" to be YOUR heartbeat~ since the title of the piece is the heartbeat of my life. She keeps your heart beating.
I see it both ways though.
Blessings,
Your fan,
Beth
Ps. Hope you're well ;)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Beth,
Thanks for your encouragement and recognition of the throbbing heartbeat imagery, but not my heartbeat.
Stay safe yourself. Interaction with others has become limited. Lucky we can routinely ?visit? others via Facebook.
Blessings to you too.
Mark
Comment from tempeste
I know this might sound naive but the thought that we , I am made up of a heap of veins , muscles , bones and organs makes me shudder .. I really don't like looking at the human body without the skin.
That said , I did find your poem about the pulsing vein on her neck very poetic ..once I saw my vein in my wrist pulse visibly after I had ran to catch a train .. I stared at it for a while .. it really hit me that my heart was beating , circulating my blood ..
A well constructed title .. It ignites the readers curiosity to want to know more
Your colourful choice of artwork complements the theme of your poem
The last line is revealing .. you have strong feelings for this woman .. she titillates you ... she's special ..
I have made it a weekly habit to check your portfolio ...
...I'm confident to find food for my soul ..
...words that will make me reflect or just simply make me feel good , give me a blissful moment, in these troubled times.
Ciao Marco!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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I know this might sound naive but the thought that we , I am made up of a heap of veins , muscles , bones and organs makes me shudder .. I really don't like looking at the human body without the skin.
That said , I did find your poem about the pulsing vein on her neck very poetic ..once I saw my vein in my wrist pulse visibly after I had ran to catch a train .. I stared at it for a while .. it really hit me that my heart was beating , circulating my blood ..
A well constructed title .. It ignites the readers curiosity to want to know more
Your colourful choice of artwork complements the theme of your poem
The last line is revealing .. you have strong feelings for this woman .. she titillates you ... she's special ..
I have made it a weekly habit to check your portfolio ...
...I'm confident to find food for my soul ..
...words that will make me reflect or just simply make me feel good , give me a blissful moment, in these troubled times.
Ciao Marco!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Buenos dias Tempeste (Bom dia in Portuguese)!
So pleased with your comments and thoughts for this post. I guess it found the right beat for you (-;
THANKS.
Mark
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem it captured my attention from the first word to the last After reading the Hot poem I thought when my heart beats through my neck its letting only letting me know at the age of eighty-one I'm still alive.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem it captured my attention from the first word to the last After reading the Hot poem I thought when my heart beats through my neck its letting only letting me know at the age of eighty-one I'm still alive.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Cookie,
When there is snow on the roof, there's still fire in the furnace (mostly for females saying this about some of their male friends !). Likely there are still flames to quench in your life and writing. So pleased this one gave you a good feeling.
Mark
P.S. We were all born in the last century and will die in this century - I do not believe in reincarnation (-;
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Well time will tell when the day comes I might already be with the Heavenly Father.
Cookie
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, The Heartbeat of Life, has the proper formatting and, with the enhanced pronoun, gives the reader a heartbeat to follow.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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This 5-7-5, The Heartbeat of Life, has the proper formatting and, with the enhanced pronoun, gives the reader a heartbeat to follow.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Bill,
Glad you followed along with my beat. THANKS for your review.
Mark
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
WOW! Hot! Cool down! I do not wand my screen to catch on fire. This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem with a definite message. Interesting use of color in text, Great illustration. Regards, Jerry
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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WOW! Hot! Cool down! I do not wand my screen to catch on fire. This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem with a definite message. Interesting use of color in text, Great illustration. Regards, Jerry
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Thanks Jerry!
Your endorsement and extra stars really warmed my ego. Your highest rating is the first for this post. I have received this honor for other posts, but I am still awaiting my first-time triple six! LOL
Mark
Mark
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the heartbeat of your life is the pulse of get heart visible in her beautiful delicate neck. Her flush of shyness excites you.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the heartbeat of your life is the pulse of get heart visible in her beautiful delicate neck. Her flush of shyness excites you.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Sandra,
Sandra,
Glad we are in sync with the meaning of this post. Thanks for your support of the same.
Mark
Comment from kahpot
Beautiful, though I will admit before I read your notes I took the artwork and the red font as highlighting her flush, I can see how her heartbeat would be emphasized as well, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Beautiful, though I will admit before I read your notes I took the artwork and the red font as highlighting her flush, I can see how her heartbeat would be emphasized as well, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Pleased that my notes provided you a clue as to why I used red text for her!
Thanks for your support of this post.
Mark
Comment from QC Poet
Format fitting and charming entry, I thought the notes definitely added to understanding it. I did wonder if someone blushes from embarrassment? Quickly answered when I reread Her in red 3x. Good Luck in the contest and may God Bless you.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Format fitting and charming entry, I thought the notes definitely added to understanding it. I did wonder if someone blushes from embarrassment? Quickly answered when I reread Her in red 3x. Good Luck in the contest and may God Bless you.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Hi!
Methinks this was your first visit to my typical 5-7-5 verse. Longer verse is not in my poetry wheelhouse.
Pleased you liked my verse and that the notes emphasized the heartbeat.
Mark
