Assassin Nation
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Flashback Manuel Kontroz"A sequel to the novel Baker's Dozen
7 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, this is the first I've read of this and I'm thrilled. It's great and action packed and I love this Manuel already. Please don't wait to long before you write a new chapter. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2020
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Hi Bill, this is the first I've read of this and I'm thrilled. It's great and action packed and I love this Manuel already. Please don't wait to long before you write a new chapter. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 19-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Ulla. I?ll try to expedite the story.
Comment from nomi338
My new hero. I need to either have this guy working for me, or better yet, I need to become this guy. He is the epitome of a guy who gets the job done lickety split. No comment needed or acknowledged. This dude is good.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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My new hero. I need to either have this guy working for me, or better yet, I need to become this guy. He is the epitome of a guy who gets the job done lickety split. No comment needed or acknowledged. This dude is good.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hopefully he will save the day.
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very well-written, interesting chapter. Your dialogue seems believable and your characters really come to life. Common knowledge hmm. For some reason, I don't quite believe that. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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This is a very well-written, interesting chapter. Your dialogue seems believable and your characters really come to life. Common knowledge hmm. For some reason, I don't quite believe that. Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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---Common knowledge--- is typically used by those with tons of data in their heads who believe that this information is widely known by others. Thanks, MD, for reviewing this. Bill
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Soooo.... Manuel is amazing, to say the least... :) Quite a lot of twists in here... :) Thanx for sharing and good luck with the book, sir! ;) Yvette
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six p.m." Manuel --> six p.m.," Manuel
from who?" --> from whom?"
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Soooo.... Manuel is amazing, to say the least... :) Quite a lot of twists in here... :) Thanx for sharing and good luck with the book, sir! ;) Yvette
political sea." he replied --> political sea," he replied
those two." said --> those two," said
war hero." said --> war hero," said
six p.m." Manuel --> six p.m.," Manuel
from who?" --> from whom?"
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Yes, guilty with an explanation. The first four are the result of quickly shimming in tags before I posted two minutes before midnight. I was going to tidy them up, but fell asleep watching a recording of the Biden-Sanders Debate instead. Both of these guys are boring. The fifth is a character dialogue and doesn't have to be grammatically correct as ninety-nine percent of American English speakers never use whom when speaking. That percentage may be off a bit, but not by much.
Thank you for keeping me honest, and I with fix those offending punctuation gaffs right away.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This chapter holds the same excitement as previous chapters. The conversation runs smoothly, and the character appear real. The story line continues to build. Good writing!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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This chapter holds the same excitement as previous chapters. The conversation runs smoothly, and the character appear real. The story line continues to build. Good writing!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Thank you, TT.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, your writing is excellent, as always, but I got lost in this one, because in last chapter Dr woo was dead, and suddenly you have a figure like the flash killing off the assassin on the roof, AND this Manuel character "sounding as if" ( and I put those words in parenthesis because I don't know IF IT IS common knowledge.)
Outside of this being a flash back, I don't have a clue!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Dear Bill, your writing is excellent, as always, but I got lost in this one, because in last chapter Dr woo was dead, and suddenly you have a figure like the flash killing off the assassin on the roof, AND this Manuel character "sounding as if" ( and I put those words in parenthesis because I don't know IF IT IS common knowledge.)
Outside of this being a flash back, I don't have a clue!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Dr. Wu is dead in 2020, this is 1978. One of the ideas in this series is that Dr. Wu is a geneticist creating long-living people. C.C. Connor and his twin sister Millie are in their seventies but look forty. Manuel Kontroz has been around since the beginning of the story. Some items have future significance.
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Okay . . .this helps a lot.
Is the flash who killed the assassin on the roof, one of those elements having future significance?
P. S. How many chapters have you posted so far AND what number is this one? I want to know how far I am behind.
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I just noticed. this is Chapter 18 . . . Way too far behind!
Comment from lyenochka
Vancouver as in WA or BC? There is are many Russian immigrants in Vancouver, WA. Great job with this riveting piece. Didn't quite understand the pill and the Certs roll thing. But Kontroz seems to be quite the superhuman.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Vancouver as in WA or BC? There is are many Russian immigrants in Vancouver, WA. Great job with this riveting piece. Didn't quite understand the pill and the Certs roll thing. But Kontroz seems to be quite the superhuman.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Canadian currency? The Certs comes later, the kill pill is cyanide.
