Tales From Eden
Skewered fruit etc11 total reviews
Comment from Susan Larson
It's entertaining to see people cut loose with words, concepts, beliefs and symbolism. I enjoyed the picture and the play on original sin. It reminds me of an old joke that it wasn't the apple hanging on the tree but the pear lying on the ground.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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It's entertaining to see people cut loose with words, concepts, beliefs and symbolism. I enjoyed the picture and the play on original sin. It reminds me of an old joke that it wasn't the apple hanging on the tree but the pear lying on the ground.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Hahaha the pear lying on the ground
Susan that was new to me thanks for sharing. Made me laugh.
Also for your generous comments. Thank you
Best
John
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Jack Paar told that joke when I was in high school and my mother was aghast! I didn?t get it until about ten years later. Oh, that age of innocence!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Tales From Eden
by Lordinajamjar
Hello my friend
Definitely a fun 5/7/5 entry for the contest. Good syllable count and nice presentation. Lines are well connected.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Tales From Eden
by Lordinajamjar
Hello my friend
Definitely a fun 5/7/5 entry for the contest. Good syllable count and nice presentation. Lines are well connected.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about having some fruit from the tree and asking the fruit fairy if it might be a sin to eat so much juicy fruit in summertime that one can go to jail for it.
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about having some fruit from the tree and asking the fruit fairy if it might be a sin to eat so much juicy fruit in summertime that one can go to jail for it.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Yes indeed Sandra. A very good retelling of the tale. ;)
Love it.
Best
John
Comment from smileycloud
hi
very interesting 5/7/5 and the presentation is great
even though I get the analogy before I read the author notes, being Adam Eve and the devil snake
but
I am really stuck with "hammering hanging fruit",I would like to take a stab and think it was an apple in a tree, but ???hammering ???
lol
I am lost, but then again so was Adam and Eve
orange nail sin...????the nails of the Cross????
am I reading too much into this fun poem and it is simply all to do with lust for the scanty clad angel????
lol
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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hi
very interesting 5/7/5 and the presentation is great
even though I get the analogy before I read the author notes, being Adam Eve and the devil snake
but
I am really stuck with "hammering hanging fruit",I would like to take a stab and think it was an apple in a tree, but ???hammering ???
lol
I am lost, but then again so was Adam and Eve
orange nail sin...????the nails of the Cross????
am I reading too much into this fun poem and it is simply all to do with lust for the scanty clad angel????
lol
have a smiley day
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Hi Smiley,
Hanging fruit parody, forget the apple its an orange in this case hammered with a nail.
If you read my reply to an earlier comment you will be further enlightened.
Thank you for taking the time to comment.
Best.
John
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ta :):):)
Comment from Ashtar Zaidi
Great Job... !! I really enjoyed it, deep ideas, your energy is infectious, the way how you explained it was fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~Ashtar~
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Great Job... !! I really enjoyed it, deep ideas, your energy is infectious, the way how you explained it was fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~Ashtar~
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!!
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Sorry, I didn't get it; I guess I was too preoccupied with the red bikini on the green frog. However, I read the reviews and got the meaning and drift of the concept of the poem. This explanation could have been given in the Author notes, I'm thinking, to facilitate matters.
The poem is a 5-7-5 Haiku poem fitting the requirements. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Sorry, I didn't get it; I guess I was too preoccupied with the red bikini on the green frog. However, I read the reviews and got the meaning and drift of the concept of the poem. This explanation could have been given in the Author notes, I'm thinking, to facilitate matters.
The poem is a 5-7-5 Haiku poem fitting the requirements. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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No apology needed Giovanni.
You are the reader, I respect your opinion as I respect all opinions good or bad.
I usually don't put explanations of my work in the authors notes. I just let the work express itself. If it fails then so be it.
I appreciate your very thoughtful comments and I am grateful for your review.
Best
John
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yeah, not gonna touch the meaning that may or may not be implied with this one... :) :) Your syllable count is correct, sir, so best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Yeah, not gonna touch the meaning that may or may not be implied with this one... :) :) Your syllable count is correct, sir, so best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Coward. Lol
Thanks Yvette for your review.
Best
John
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Naaaah, let's call it 'cautious', shall we? LOL!! ;) :)
Comment from January L'Angelle
I suppose if I understood this poem, It would be better for me. What is "hammering hanging fruit?" and an "orange nail sin?" please tell me so I can understand this! Otherwise, the poem is perfect in its form and structure. Well done in that area. -January L.
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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I suppose if I understood this poem, It would be better for me. What is "hammering hanging fruit?" and an "orange nail sin?" please tell me so I can understand this! Otherwise, the poem is perfect in its form and structure. Well done in that area. -January L.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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L' Angelle, It has multiple meanings depending on one's view I suppose.
The garden of Eden is the setting in the realm of fairies. Hammering oranges hanging from a tree might be be original. An orange with a nail through it might be a result of that and a play on on words "Original sin".
The winged frog fairy is hanging in air wearing a bikini and maybe her fruit is a temptation. To be hammered by other frogs so to speak.
It is up to the reader's own imaginations what they take from it. Like any fantasy poem you either hate it or love it.
Hope this helps.
Best
John
Comment from D.S. Knight
This piece fits the requirements perfectly.
However, in its way, it is one of the most horrible pieces I have read in years. That is, it is probably the most enjoyable perfect piece I've read in years. Thanks for the delight!
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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This piece fits the requirements perfectly.
However, in its way, it is one of the most horrible pieces I have read in years. That is, it is probably the most enjoyable perfect piece I've read in years. Thanks for the delight!
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you Sir Knight.
Your ell chosen words are fitting praise indeed for this piece. Lol
I am very grateful for the six stars. In honour indeed.
Thank you so much.
Best
John
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
The artwork you choose to go with your poem made my morning I couldn't stop laughing. They are a perfect match
you captured my attention from the start. I wonder if other members got the message.
This is truly a food for thought write,
thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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The artwork you choose to go with your poem made my morning I couldn't stop laughing. They are a perfect match
you captured my attention from the start. I wonder if other members got the message.
This is truly a food for thought write,
thank you for sharing.
Cookie
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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Haha Thank you Cookie.
I just wanted to make people laugh and maybe make some do a second take and laugh some more.
Best
Joh
