Horror Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Cold Night"a collection of contemporary haiku
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Comment from Joan E.
You really conjure up the scene and the emotions in this 4-6-5 Horror Haiku. I admired your use of alliteration and parallel picture to intensify the mood. More sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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You really conjure up the scene and the emotions in this 4-6-5 Horror Haiku. I admired your use of alliteration and parallel picture to intensify the mood. More sighs- Joan
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊 my friend.
Comment from kahpot
I am not great with the Haiku form though I do try, in this one I found that the words give an image of a lost love and the coldness of stepping over (memories) by herself, an excellent short poem (to me) and very worthy of your dedication to Dean, very well presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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I am not great with the Haiku form though I do try, in this one I found that the words give an image of a lost love and the coldness of stepping over (memories) by herself, an excellent short poem (to me) and very worthy of your dedication to Dean, very well presented****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊
Comment from Raul1
Very creative and well written poem. I like your poem. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice job. Thanks for sharing! I like it.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Very creative and well written poem. I like your poem. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice job. Thanks for sharing! I like it.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
H how miss him and his wonderful mind god blessed him with a gift to many things but I believe is heart was writing I enjoyed reading your poem. The photo tells it all,' this is what I call a food for thought poem..
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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H how miss him and his wonderful mind god blessed him with a gift to many things but I believe is heart was writing I enjoyed reading your poem. The photo tells it all,' this is what I call a food for thought poem..
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊
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It was my pleasure, have a safe and blessed week end.
cookie
Comment from Bill Pinder
Interesting writing. Which word are you saying is the caesura and why? Who is referred to by "his?"
That's great that you could co-author some books with Dean. How did you handle publishing?
Bill
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Interesting writing. Which word are you saying is the caesura and why? Who is referred to by "his?"
That's great that you could co-author some books with Dean. How did you handle publishing?
Bill
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review. The caesura is a long dash in my haiku. The satori is his step less snowed path....the path to the castle he walked when he was alive. He is dead and the path is snowed over....no one uses it anymore. She is cold and alone without her lover. I handled it he publishing through Amazon site...
https://www.createspace.com/
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Thanks for all the info.
Bill
Comment from royowen
I remember the horror haiku writing accompanied by the manic love of horror in company with Dean Kuch, but you still do incredibly well on your own Gypsy, well done girl, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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I remember the horror haiku writing accompanied by the manic love of horror in company with Dean Kuch, but you still do incredibly well on your own Gypsy, well done girl, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy, your kind words mean a lot to me. I miss writing with Dean.
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Well done
Comment from Susan X Smith
I think this is more of a Senryu than a Haiku, but I'm no expert. Anyway, I enjoyed reading it and the picture is a great addition. Best wishes for your ongoing creative writing.
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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I think this is more of a Senryu than a Haiku, but I'm no expert. Anyway, I enjoyed reading it and the picture is a great addition. Best wishes for your ongoing creative writing.
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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English haiku is different than classic haiku. I added the definition by the American haiku association in my author notes. In any case, haiku has 17 syllables or less in a short long short format. A reference to season...snow is winter. And a satori...the last line is supposed to make you think if the relation of the top two lines and the last line.
Thank you very much for the review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay so, I love her hair! ;)
But, the words... burrr! Cold and to be the first steps on a pathway in the dark -- that really is kindof a creepy feeling with the breeze blowing by.... :) Great 'chill' you've got here, Gypsy! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Okay so, I love her hair! ;)
But, the words... burrr! Cold and to be the first steps on a pathway in the dark -- that really is kindof a creepy feeling with the breeze blowing by.... :) Great 'chill' you've got here, Gypsy! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Yes, it's very cold in transylvania... LoL she lives in a castle...the heating bill is horrifying.
Thank you very much for the review 😊
