Gently Elegant
a-b-c of love...15 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Congratulations on having your ABC Poem well received in the contest. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of "swanning" and the reinforcing artwork, plus your rhymes and use of alliteration. Big cheers- Joan
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Congratulations on having your ABC Poem well received in the contest. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of "swanning" and the reinforcing artwork, plus your rhymes and use of alliteration. Big cheers- Joan
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on yet another well-deserved prize. Again, fresh imagery, elegant phrasing and alliteration. Photo is perfect! I like the reflecting and swanning about. Cheers. LIZ
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Congrats on yet another well-deserved prize. Again, fresh imagery, elegant phrasing and alliteration. Photo is perfect! I like the reflecting and swanning about. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Beautiful! Swans are a favorite of mine and your elegant description flows beautifully in this ABC poem!
Great job!
Thank you for sharing! I hope you are feeling a little better today! Are you home yet?
xoxo
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Beautiful! Swans are a favorite of mine and your elegant description flows beautifully in this ABC poem!
Great job!
Thank you for sharing! I hope you are feeling a little better today! Are you home yet?
xoxo
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks for lovely review. Yes, i'm home, but in great discomfort and unable to sit at computer for longer than 10 minutes. being completely horizontal is only respite i get, even on painkillers. I'm not a softie, but it hurts! Waaagh!!! (I've never been sick before, so maybe I am a softie. Pain is probably a fact in many people's lives.)
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Oh so sorry! I?m sure it is quite the challenge for you! Ugh! Do you have anyone to help you? I hate to think of you all by yourself dealing with this! :( Xoxo
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I'm home alone but my lovely neighbour Jo pops in.... others are phoning. I don't want to see anyone just yet.
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Yes I can understand that, but glad to know someone is looking in on you! Keeping a prayer for you. xoxoxoxoxo
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Much appreciated. xx
Comment from CrystieCookie999
For sheer poetic technique condensed in five lines, this is awe-inspiring, along with a striking image. There is r alliteration in line 1, some 'd' consonance with limpid and pond in line 2, plus some internal rhyme with that swan/pond sound, t consonance in line 3, and L alliteration in last line. And again an end rhyme with pond/bond. Swans are of course, naturally elegant, so nice title choice. I would revive this around Valentine's Day next year :)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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For sheer poetic technique condensed in five lines, this is awe-inspiring, along with a striking image. There is r alliteration in line 1, some 'd' consonance with limpid and pond in line 2, plus some internal rhyme with that swan/pond sound, t consonance in line 3, and L alliteration in last line. And again an end rhyme with pond/bond. Swans are of course, naturally elegant, so nice title choice. I would revive this around Valentine's Day next year :)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for wonderful review.
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You are welcome. I just noticed tonight on your profile that you were getting over a stay in the hospital. Hope you are back to feeling up to speed again.
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Thanks for your good wishes - the op has knocked me back a bit for the past week but I am hoping to be vertical without pain soon.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ABC poem about the beautiful swans that always bring up thoughts of romance with their elegance on the water when they come together and show their love to the world.
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A very well-written ABC poem about the beautiful swans that always bring up thoughts of romance with their elegance on the water when they come together and show their love to the world.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, LisaMay,
.....Gently Elegant....is a beautiful abc poem for the contest. The presentation is awesome. The contrast between the beautiful swans and the limpid pond is nice. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Hello, LisaMay,
.....Gently Elegant....is a beautiful abc poem for the contest. The presentation is awesome. The contrast between the beautiful swans and the limpid pond is nice. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your lovely review.
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely and well constructed ABC poem - and the picture is perfect. Yes, swans are known of their "loyal bond" as they mate for life. Best wishes in the contest, LisaMay!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Lovely and well constructed ABC poem - and the picture is perfect. Yes, swans are known of their "loyal bond" as they mate for life. Best wishes in the contest, LisaMay!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from juliaSjames
Love that description, "gently elegant intertwinement". Swans are creatures of grace and beauty in their elements of water and air. In fact the swan is my power animal. I believe they are also symbols of fidelity since they mate for life. Altogether a great choice for your poem.
The ABC format is seamlessly incorporated into the write.
However I have a query about "match" in "unites a love match". Suggest "unites a matchless love"
What do you think?
And perhaps "lifelong" is stronger than "loyal" in the final line.
Good luck in the contest. I haven't been inspired to write anything yet.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Love that description, "gently elegant intertwinement". Swans are creatures of grace and beauty in their elements of water and air. In fact the swan is my power animal. I believe they are also symbols of fidelity since they mate for life. Altogether a great choice for your poem.
The ABC format is seamlessly incorporated into the write.
However I have a query about "match" in "unites a love match". Suggest "unites a matchless love"
What do you think?
And perhaps "lifelong" is stronger than "loyal" in the final line.
Good luck in the contest. I haven't been inspired to write anything yet.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Both your suggestions sound like improvements. Thanks for the input.
Comment from Bill Schott
This ABC poem, Gently Elegant, follows the RSTU heading and creates the vision of elegant love with these eloquent words swimming within a perfect heart. nice.
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This ABC poem, Gently Elegant, follows the RSTU heading and creates the vision of elegant love with these eloquent words swimming within a perfect heart. nice.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
Comment from Michele Harber
What a sweet and, to quote your title, "gently elegant" poem this is. You make a great use of strong and/or descriptive adjectives (i.e., "ritualized," "limpid," "elegant") to bring to life the majesty and loyalty of these animals.
Just a small side note that swans hold a special place in my heart, as I was married at a place called The Swan Club, who gorgeous grounds included a pond with a few resident swans.
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What a sweet and, to quote your title, "gently elegant" poem this is. You make a great use of strong and/or descriptive adjectives (i.e., "ritualized," "limpid," "elegant") to bring to life the majesty and loyalty of these animals.
Just a small side note that swans hold a special place in my heart, as I was married at a place called The Swan Club, who gorgeous grounds included a pond with a few resident swans.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
