Comment from Jeffrey Ford

Excellent

Thank you for writing this poem! It is important to that people know the power of Jesus and how he can change the lives of people for the better. It is very well written, and I didn't see any errors.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020

Thank you for the excellent review and your wonderful response to this poem. I wanted to articulate a personal experience with Christ, in a contemporary setting that I hoped would make it more relevant for people living today and show that Jesus is here and now. estory

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A fine deeply religious and faithful write about Easter, its meaning, your feelings and I loved the sing song bit. A hopeful and positive write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging comments supporting this poem. Glad you found it so uplifting estory

Comment from Diana L Crawford

Excellent

This is an excellently written Free Verse poem. It's not too long at all! Just right with beautifully described details of what life will be like at the day of His second coming. You project such thought provoking scenarios in this! Thank you for sharing! xoxo

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful words in support of the poem. I am glad that you enjoyed this personal articulation of the power of Jesus in this contemporary setting. I think many people think of Jesus in the world of 2,000 years ago, but He is with us now. That's my message. estory

reply by Diana L Crawford on 07-Mar-2020

Yes He is! Excellent poem!

Comment from juliaSjames

Exceptional

I enjoyed this free verse account of the second coming. It's vivid words bring redemption to life in a contemporary setting. The final stanza is my personal favourite, but the entire write is exceptional both in concept and execution.

One suggestion is only to capitalize the beginning of lines when grammar dictates. Otherwise it becomes a distraction in free verse.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020

Thanks again for the six star review and all the continuing support of my work. Glad you enjoyed it. I think the second to last stanza is my favorite, and I contemplated taking out the last stanza to cut the length, but in the end, I thought it was important to include the children. They also are a metaphor of us being children of God. estory

reply by juliaSjames on 07-Mar-2020

I'm glad you kept the children. I don't recall the exact quote, but didn't Jesus say unless you become like these children you won't enter the Kingdom?

A fine piece of work, Estory.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

When Jesus walks from your poem feels like Spring, because everything goes back to life; I think this might be the reason why Easter is in Spring. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020

Thanks for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the poem. I wanted that spring like, uplifting effect. Is Easter in spring, or spring in Easter? This poem actually was inspired to a degree by a poem of Pasternak's he included in Dr. Zhivago; Holy Week. I wonder if you know that poem. My favorite of Pasternak's. estory

reply by Iza Deleanu on 07-Mar-2020

I have to revisit the book; I read it when I was a student many years ago when I was taking Russian literature for one of my classes.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Easter story and the wonders Jesus can create simply by walking beside us when we invite Him into our lives all our troubles will become something if the past.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad that I was able to make something intangible seem a little more tangible, a little more relevant in people living today. estory

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

Great job with this early Easter story that is a relevant reminder that even today the Lord is still alive, still reigns, still heals, stills works in the lives of lost souls, and we can look forward to his coming again soon. Thanks for Sharing.
Bill

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am so glad you enjoyed it and that I seemed to accomplish what I wanted to do; make the story of the resurrection come alive in modern terms. estory

Comment from Irish Rain

Exceptional

I love the last two lines the most.
But, overall, I love this entire poem.
Repeating the words 'where Jesus walks'
is genius, and the attraction, and the summation,
as He walks everywhere, and invites
us on the journey.
Never too early for Easter!!
Blessings...

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thanks again for your exceptional review and your encouraging comments supporting this poem. estory

reply by Irish Rain on 06-Mar-2020

Have a great weekend!!

Comment from RShipp

Excellent

"Waltzing around in the street,
Free from her Alzheimer's"
That would be a dream come true for someone who had walked this!

I loved the theme of each of your stanzas... but the first was the best.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the poem. That line about Alzheimer's I put in for my mom, who passed from the disease in Nov 2015. After she died, I had a vision of her freed from her constraints, dancing like she used to when she was young. I wanted people to feel the power of the resurrection in personal terms there. estory

Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson

Excellent

I don't usually read long poem due to my stroke my mind doesn't remember what I just read but your poem captured my attention from the first line the last.
Your words were so he heart full they touch my heart and soul. This is what I call a food for thought write
thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful personal response to this poem. I am so glad you found it so captivating and I hope it was able to lift you up a bit in a down time. I wanted to create an articulation of a personal experience with Christ. estory

reply by Miss Cookie Atkinson on 06-Mar-2020

Your very welcome have a safe and blessed week end.
Cookie

reply by Miss Cookie Atkinson on 06-Mar-2020

Your very welcome have a safe and blessed week end.
Cookie