Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Daughter's Prayers"Musings of an old man -2020
28 total reviews
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is such a touching poem! I got goosebumps while reading. There is such tenderness between the parent and child and an understanding within the child that is beyond her years!
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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This is such a touching poem! I got goosebumps while reading. There is such tenderness between the parent and child and an understanding within the child that is beyond her years!
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Diana, often we short sell the wisdom of children, they can be great wisdom weavers if we listen. Thank you!
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my pleasure to read!
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a touching story and I can see why it has received All-Time Best status. I did not see a thing out of place to make recommendations about. Great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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What a touching story and I can see why it has received All-Time Best status. I did not see a thing out of place to make recommendations about. Great job. Shirley
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Shirley, thank you!
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an excellent story as told through the eyes of an adult about a child, J.
Full of emotion and a sad situation told with great heart.
Just one small typo:
I stroked her blond (blonde) curls - blond is male and blonde is female.
Great job and I wish you well in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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This is an excellent story as told through the eyes of an adult about a child, J.
Full of emotion and a sad situation told with great heart.
Just one small typo:
I stroked her blond (blonde) curls - blond is male and blonde is female.
Great job and I wish you well in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Gloria, thank you for this catch!
Comment from Begin Again
Very touching and right on spot for how a child sees things versus the adult. Seems as if they can handle the pain and understand whats happening much easier that we can at times. I loved your story and wish you well in the contest. Have a great day!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Very touching and right on spot for how a child sees things versus the adult. Seems as if they can handle the pain and understand whats happening much easier that we can at times. I loved your story and wish you well in the contest. Have a great day!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Begin Again, i am grateful for your validation and reflection!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt story about the world as seen through a child's eyes. They sometimes are more observant than we thought and surprise us when their words make perfectly sense.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt story about the world as seen through a child's eyes. They sometimes are more observant than we thought and surprise us when their words make perfectly sense.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Sandra, I am deeply appreciative to this unexpected six-star review, Thank you very much!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the "Through the Eyes of a Child" writing prompt.
This short story tells of a young girl and father coping with a loss.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the "Through the Eyes of a Child" writing prompt.
This short story tells of a young girl and father coping with a loss.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Sharon, thank you very much, may your weekend be very pleasant!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Children do have a way of making things so simple. Their trust in God and Heaven is divine. It's a shame some lose that as they grow up. This is a really lovely flash fiction story. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Children do have a way of making things so simple. Their trust in God and Heaven is divine. It's a shame some lose that as they grow up. This is a really lovely flash fiction story. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Sandra, thank you. I am pleased you reviewed and shared your reflections on this. Have a splendid weekend, I am headed out to visit with a female hospice patient who is turning 101 years young on March 19th, a true gift this is for me to do today!
Comment from lance michaels
Very beautiful story of a child's acceptance of the death of her mother. it is difficult for a child to understand death and the fact that someone that has always been there for them no longer will be. Excellent, and if I had anymore six stars to give this would definitely gotten one!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Very beautiful story of a child's acceptance of the death of her mother. it is difficult for a child to understand death and the fact that someone that has always been there for them no longer will be. Excellent, and if I had anymore six stars to give this would definitely gotten one!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Lance, I will take even vitural six-star reviews :) Thank you!
Comment from Aussie
SPAG: "I know (that) mom was sick (no need for 'that'.) And would you really say "daughter dearest?" Would a child understand 'eternal rest?' A nice little story. Children are quite grown up around illness. I think this just needs a little spit and polish. Read it back to yourself out loud. With respect. K.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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SPAG: "I know (that) mom was sick (no need for 'that'.) And would you really say "daughter dearest?" Would a child understand 'eternal rest?' A nice little story. Children are quite grown up around illness. I think this just needs a little spit and polish. Read it back to yourself out loud. With respect. K.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your wise input. I have been known to say "daughter dearest" to both of my daughters when they were facing some life hurdles. A bit old school perhaps or family tradition refers to what other people call heaven as "eternal rest." I can see where that might seem sophomoric speaking to a child. I so welcome very reflection and I do pray your week ahead provides wondrous new discoveries!
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Yes, a bit old school but hey, that's your way. I was thinking of how your way would be received by readers only. KXX
Comment from forestport12
At first, I questioned why the rhyming scheme. But then when I thought about it and read more, I realized it was perfect for the story. And I could imagine this as great children's Christian story. So glad I pulled out this contest and took a look. Original thoughts. Well written.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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At first, I questioned why the rhyming scheme. But then when I thought about it and read more, I realized it was perfect for the story. And I could imagine this as great children's Christian story. So glad I pulled out this contest and took a look. Original thoughts. Well written.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Forest thank you, it was written from a Christian mindset. I am honored by your reflection.
