Trapped Inside
2-2-5-7-5 March weather frustration17 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You and me both, Shirley. The UK is sinking, we'll soon disappear with the amount of rain we're having. Your words say it all, my friend. Oh to be able to go for a nice walk, without being drowned on. Summer is around the corner, hopefully! Well done, my friend, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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You and me both, Shirley. The UK is sinking, we'll soon disappear with the amount of rain we're having. Your words say it all, my friend. Oh to be able to go for a nice walk, without being drowned on. Summer is around the corner, hopefully! Well done, my friend, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Sandra, thank you so much. It was a dreary afternoon, but the morning was so promising! By the way, I am Marjon, not Shirley. It is of no importance, lol.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
hello, Marjon van Bruggen,
.....Trapped Inside.... is a good entry for the 2-2-5-7-5 March weather frustration.
Good syllable count. The poem doesn't flow well at the end. I know you are trying to make the syllable form fit but there may be another way.
Good job,
gypsy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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hello, Marjon van Bruggen,
.....Trapped Inside.... is a good entry for the 2-2-5-7-5 March weather frustration.
Good syllable count. The poem doesn't flow well at the end. I know you are trying to make the syllable form fit but there may be another way.
Good job,
gypsy
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Hi Gypsy,
Thank you. I think you are right. In the meantime, I have changed the last line in: "of a dark, drowned walk" Looks and sounds better.
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you are welcome :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Every now and the, we all feel trapped and feel like we need to get out and away from our troubles. Personally, I would love to open my extra-large multi-colored umbrella, and take a walk in down pouring rain. I would sing, "Just walking in the rain / Getting soaking wet."
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Every now and the, we all feel trapped and feel like we need to get out and away from our troubles. Personally, I would love to open my extra-large multi-colored umbrella, and take a walk in down pouring rain. I would sing, "Just walking in the rain / Getting soaking wet."
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thaities, Thank you! No, I don't share your love for walking in the rain. (the song...yes!) But this morning there was a nice sun and I had been looking forward to a shiny and warm walk. No luck!
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God sometimes sends us little taps on the shoulder. I live in Thailand, and the weather is just turning beastly hot. April is the hottest month. Anyway, yesterday a tropical storm blew in with loads of rain, strong destructive winds, and hail! This is the second time in 47 years I have seen such a thing.
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We have the hottest month in August, People here leave the island (Mallorca) from midday to evening to the tourists and have a long siesta.
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Interesting!
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Thanks!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from RodG
I like how you make the reader use his imagination to visualize this scene. I see the Speaker inside her bright kitchen with pink walls and "fussy white curtains" frowning as she gazes out a "wet window" dripping with rain drops. Nothing disillusions me faster than blustery Winter. Rod
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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I like how you make the reader use his imagination to visualize this scene. I see the Speaker inside her bright kitchen with pink walls and "fussy white curtains" frowning as she gazes out a "wet window" dripping with rain drops. Nothing disillusions me faster than blustery Winter. Rod
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Rod. Nice review!
Comment from BethShelby
I know the feeling. It has rained a lot here lately and when I have outside plans I feel trapped inside too. You 2-2-5-7-5 poem paints a good picture of being trapped. The illustration is perfect.
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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I know the feeling. It has rained a lot here lately and when I have outside plans I feel trapped inside too. You 2-2-5-7-5 poem paints a good picture of being trapped. The illustration is perfect.
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thanks, Beth.
Comment from patcelaw
It is never a good thing when we would love to go out for a walk that it is raining. I do most of my walking inside our rather large house. So far this morning I have walked over 1 mile to help with my goal of 3.5 miles a day and over 100 miles a month.
Patricia
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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It is never a good thing when we would love to go out for a walk that it is raining. I do most of my walking inside our rather large house. So far this morning I have walked over 1 mile to help with my goal of 3.5 miles a day and over 100 miles a month.
Patricia
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Patricia.
