Touch Me
A 2-2-5-7-5 poem...16 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
This is burning down the house here. A new style for you, and I love it! Not a word was wasted. Just enough to tease the readers imagination. A lovely presentation filled with loves' passionate longings.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxoxo
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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This is burning down the house here. A new style for you, and I love it! Not a word was wasted. Just enough to tease the readers imagination. A lovely presentation filled with loves' passionate longings.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxoxo
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thanks again! you know I got to keep that romantic muse busy! :) xoxoxo
Comment from June Sargent
Such powerful imagery here - being enraptured when someone whispers dreams into your soul. It's the soft touch that melts your heart- not the bodice-ripping lust that some envision. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Such powerful imagery here - being enraptured when someone whispers dreams into your soul. It's the soft touch that melts your heart- not the bodice-ripping lust that some envision. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thank you! I got this romantic muse that won't quit! haha! appreciate you enjoyed this! :) xoxo
Comment from Larry5000
Love the picture and the scenery involved, your words were so beautiful and seemed to fit well. The word enrapture caught my eye and with the picture gave me a quick thought of a one stanza poem.
Whisper those moments that drew me to you
As we made love on the beach, beside the ocean so blue
You enrapture my soul from that first tender kiss
Leading me forever, into love's eternal bliss.
Great job as always :-)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Love the picture and the scenery involved, your words were so beautiful and seemed to fit well. The word enrapture caught my eye and with the picture gave me a quick thought of a one stanza poem.
Whisper those moments that drew me to you
As we made love on the beach, beside the ocean so blue
You enrapture my soul from that first tender kiss
Leading me forever, into love's eternal bliss.
Great job as always :-)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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OMG! That is beautiful! You are such a poet after my own heart! Thank you for sharing and for taking time to enjoy this poem! xoxo
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I am so glad you liked my short poem... sometimes all it takes is just one word to build upon. Keep the the great work.
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that is so true! xoxo
Comment from LisaMay
Hi Diana, nice poem... it is beautifully sensual to go with that lovely painting. (I don't think you need "enraptured" in the past tense - the other verbs are in the present tense, so 'enrapture' fits better... and maybe even a comma after come.)
I am still in hospital after the appendix operation. It's a bit uncomfortable using my computer - that's why I missed posting last night.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hi Diana, nice poem... it is beautifully sensual to go with that lovely painting. (I don't think you need "enraptured" in the past tense - the other verbs are in the present tense, so 'enrapture' fits better... and maybe even a comma after come.)
I am still in hospital after the appendix operation. It's a bit uncomfortable using my computer - that's why I missed posting last night.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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What! I did not know you were in hospital! Oh dear! I know what you are going through. I had mine out many years ago! You poor thing! Praying for you honey for speedy recovery. Thank you for taking time on this piece. I just corrected that as I revamped the last line a bit! You?re in my thought my precious friend! xoxoxo
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I messaged you to congratulate you on how well you mare doing in the poet rankings and said about my dastardly appendix. Thank you for your prayers. xx
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Here? I am so behind in emails here, just overwhelming sometimes. Do write me at my private email for important things like this. I hope you are feeling better now, my dear. I'm sure it will be a while before you are really back to yourself. The insides take a little longer to heal than the scar outside :) xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from lyenochka
Such inviting words of love in your poem! I liked how you used verbs - in the imperative form: touch, love, whisper. I think your last verb would work better to be in the imperative form, too: enrapture instead of 'enraptured.' Just a suggestion.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Such inviting words of love in your poem! I liked how you used verbs - in the imperative form: touch, love, whisper. I think your last verb would work better to be in the imperative form, too: enrapture instead of 'enraptured.' Just a suggestion.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Ha! Yeah, I caught that and revised the last line a bit as well! Thank you so much! xoxo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 2-2-5-7-5 poem leftover poem. Inviting a lover to touch and love whatever you have in store. Willing to hear his whispers about his dreams in your dear.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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A very well-written 2-2-5-7-5 poem leftover poem. Inviting a lover to touch and love whatever you have in store. Willing to hear his whispers about his dreams in your dear.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I am a big romantic at heart, and I just love to dream! LoL! Thanks so much for reading! xoxo
