Out Of Other Times
Forward it. a story poem of an old friend living on the hill14 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
Wow! What a poem and beautiful memorial description of the Lady on the hill! Each stanza describes the daily suffering living action of this gentle, tough, burnt skin, hard-working lady who had gone on living and suffering for her three daughters death and probably also her husband's, in finding a safe evening habour, tired and esaustid, killing her time in agriculture and searching wildlife herbs to make her natural liquor that she had called Hierbas.I can see my dead mother,(a hard working farmer and emigrant of eight bred up children)as she interweaves her way, cutting the willows, in search of particular and specific four herbs; as she washes her clothes and all what she needs, in a large tub with deep cold flowing water pulled up from her hill well (this underlines that there was no running tape water in her house); she dried them on her common opened square square (aia o cortile aperto quadrato o rettagolare)in the wind and under the sun as the smell of the oleander and acacia spread in the air; as she ties up her hair before spreading the full figs or half-cut ones lying in the sun to dry first and then they were ready and warmed up in the oven.Yes, all this was a yearly process preparation for her Hierbas.The Lady on the Hill is also an expert of weaving the cloth and embroiling roses and birds like the Wife of Bath by Chaucer but (a different kind of woman indeed!).Her humbleness, simplicity and kindness is superlative when notwithstanding her unlucky motherly lost, she thinks of another woman' daughter necessity and gives the poetess her hard long working knitting embroidment as a gift for her daughter's marriage as my mother would have done the same. These lost inexsistent people used to give "what they had not" to their neighbors. Thank you Marjon for letting me cry my ignorant mother' s life educative simple teaching method which has given me, eldest son the possibility of being successful in all his life working hard and honestly. A great work and memory, effectively, of other times. A great sincere cultural hug! Blessings! Tony
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Wow! What a poem and beautiful memorial description of the Lady on the hill! Each stanza describes the daily suffering living action of this gentle, tough, burnt skin, hard-working lady who had gone on living and suffering for her three daughters death and probably also her husband's, in finding a safe evening habour, tired and esaustid, killing her time in agriculture and searching wildlife herbs to make her natural liquor that she had called Hierbas.I can see my dead mother,(a hard working farmer and emigrant of eight bred up children)as she interweaves her way, cutting the willows, in search of particular and specific four herbs; as she washes her clothes and all what she needs, in a large tub with deep cold flowing water pulled up from her hill well (this underlines that there was no running tape water in her house); she dried them on her common opened square square (aia o cortile aperto quadrato o rettagolare)in the wind and under the sun as the smell of the oleander and acacia spread in the air; as she ties up her hair before spreading the full figs or half-cut ones lying in the sun to dry first and then they were ready and warmed up in the oven.Yes, all this was a yearly process preparation for her Hierbas.The Lady on the Hill is also an expert of weaving the cloth and embroiling roses and birds like the Wife of Bath by Chaucer but (a different kind of woman indeed!).Her humbleness, simplicity and kindness is superlative when notwithstanding her unlucky motherly lost, she thinks of another woman' daughter necessity and gives the poetess her hard long working knitting embroidment as a gift for her daughter's marriage as my mother would have done the same. These lost inexsistent people used to give "what they had not" to their neighbors. Thank you Marjon for letting me cry my ignorant mother' s life educative simple teaching method which has given me, eldest son the possibility of being successful in all his life working hard and honestly. A great work and memory, effectively, of other times. A great sincere cultural hug! Blessings! Tony
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Tony, what a splendid long review. It became a story in itself. I like the idea that it made you think so strongly of your mother, she surely would have liked my old friend on the hill, for being kindred souls, living of what nature had to offer them, and being content with that. That is why I called the poem "Out of Other Times". People like this do not exist anymore, and that is a pity.
Thanks again for this gorgeous review and your generous 6 stars.
Comment from richie b
Marjon,
A lovely poem with a touch of sadness. We meet this woman and know much of her from your write. Your writing is tight, concise and provokes imagery. You honor your friend well with this ode.
Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Marjon,
A lovely poem with a touch of sadness. We meet this woman and know much of her from your write. Your writing is tight, concise and provokes imagery. You honor your friend well with this ode.
Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Richie. I see you are reading poems I wrote some time ago. I am so pleased!
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I enjoy your writing and style!
Richie
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Great! Thanks!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a wonderful poem in tribute to a great memory. Those who have made an impression, or were good examples should be put into poetry for the next generations. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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What a wonderful poem in tribute to a great memory. Those who have made an impression, or were good examples should be put into poetry for the next generations. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Thaities, oh, I do agree! Thank you for your review.
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You're very welcome.
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Comment from Minglement
Such lovely reminiscences for this poignant, and nostalgic entry in the Pay It Forward Poetry contest. Your presentation is a lovely compliment giving it a magical feel. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Such lovely reminiscences for this poignant, and nostalgic entry in the Pay It Forward Poetry contest. Your presentation is a lovely compliment giving it a magical feel. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Minglement, that is a lovely review, thank you
Comment from RShipp
Thanks for the memories of the old couple who lived on the hill in my younger days. I had not thought of them for years. What a treasure!!
Best of luck with the Pay It Forward contest.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Thanks for the memories of the old couple who lived on the hill in my younger days. I had not thought of them for years. What a treasure!!
Best of luck with the Pay It Forward contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Thank you, RShipp, for the review. Nice it brought back memories for you.
Comment from Drew Delaney
The imagery here is really good. The end is like a flash fiction ending. The s consonant provides nice alliteration too. Very well done and a joy to read.
Dre xx
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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The imagery here is really good. The end is like a flash fiction ending. The s consonant provides nice alliteration too. Very well done and a joy to read.
Dre xx
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Drew, thank you very much for such a nice review. Much appreciated. And 6 stars! Wow.
Comment from June Sargent
This is a touching story in a poem. There is a fairy tale feel to it and yet I could picture this old soul embracing life the best way she knew how. And you had the privilege of being a part of that life . Sweet memories, I'm sure. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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This is a touching story in a poem. There is a fairy tale feel to it and yet I could picture this old soul embracing life the best way she knew how. And you had the privilege of being a part of that life . Sweet memories, I'm sure. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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June, thank you very much for your review.
Comment from royowen
I have one or two friends who I was close to, they died sometime ago, they were much older than I, I miss them so much. A beautifully written tribute my friend, I loved reading, indeed it's true that in Christ took our sickness, "By His stripes we are healed." Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I have one or two friends who I was close to, they died sometime ago, they were much older than I, I miss them so much. A beautifully written tribute my friend, I loved reading, indeed it's true that in Christ took our sickness, "By His stripes we are healed." Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much Roy, for this review.
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Bless you
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thanks again.
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OK
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Good job
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:)
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this story poem. Sometimes true stories are the best stories, and I enjoyed reading yours. I like the fanciful illustration you have included as well. My only suggestion would be to perhaps increase the font size and change the background color for better presentation. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you for sharing this story poem. Sometimes true stories are the best stories, and I enjoyed reading yours. I like the fanciful illustration you have included as well. My only suggestion would be to perhaps increase the font size and change the background color for better presentation. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you KyColonel Randal, for this nice review. And thank you for the suggestions!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about your friend that lived on the hill. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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This is a very well written poem about your friend that lived on the hill. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Teri. Love your review.
